The Top Queen Was Forced to Practice Immortality

I'm here for a return visit (laughs). I've only read the first few chapters so far. Let's talk about my feelings. First of all, the first impression is that I can't tell what kind of novel this is (dog head). Wedge: Cultivation to Immortality? I've lost my i. Chapter 1: Top star? (Singing and dancing rap). Zombies appear: Zombie apocalypse novel? OK, okay. Then I return to Cultivation again, your grandma is awesome (referring to Plug-in). But from the perspective of these chapters, there is not much sense of inconsistency, and it can be read. Secondly, it has a good idea. "About me, a top star, picked up a son and became an immortal by fighting zombies". But one thing I am very concerned about is that the book is called "Top Top", so after the protagonist embarks on the road to becoming an immortal. What impact will it have on him? The third issue is typos, omissions and semantic issues. As a person who has been taught thoroughly by a high school Chinese teacher, when I see this kind of words, I want you to correct them ten times 🙂. For the first few chapters I read, I only corrected two typos, and there were several other problems. I have also seen in other book reviews that "the land is good" is not divided. I used the second sentence of the third point to give an example and suggested studying it carefully (laugh😁 This point is considered a nitpick. Although it is harmless, obsessive-compulsive disorder will make it a bit uncomfortable to read. That's it for now, I haven't read the rest yet, I will talk about it later.

I'm not very good at commenting, so I'll just say a few words. The author's ideas are novel and his thinking is broad. In short, it is very interesting. The only thing is that it may have been written too hastily, and there will be some minor errors in some places, but it is not a problem. So it is worth reading. Readers can read it slowly.

Come on! I haven't seen much of this subject, so I can't give any good advice. Thank you for your vote, it helped me break the record of zero.

It's amazing, I can't say much about the details. The content is also very exciting. Personally, I think adding a little humor would have a better effect.

The book has been collected. After reading the first three chapters, I decided to add it to my bookshelf. You are very good at grasping the subject matter. You are also a newcomer. Why are you so good?

The clear flow in the novel about cultivating immortals is good. It integrates cultivating immortals, modernity, and interstellar all together, but there is no sense of clutter. To pick a small thorn, the "dedicated ground" is a bit indistinguishable...

The application for signing a contract with 100,000 words failed. I have written novels on other websites before, but I never thought that signing a contract would be a problem. My real-life friends and teachers all said that my writing skills are good. To be honest, when I first came to Qidian, I was too distracted. I thought I would become a god with one book. I thought I was not recognized for my talents because I didn't come to the station. Today, I failed to apply for a contract. It was like a basin of cold water poured directly on my head. It was really heart-breaking. Gradually I calmed down and read the book again without filters, only to realize that I had too many shortcomings. Leaving aside the content of the story for now, there were big problems with the classification of the work, the settings, and even the title of the book, from head to toe. But after thinking about it for a long time, I just couldn't bring myself to cut it off. Even if I wrote a million words, I still couldn't sign the contract, so I wouldn't give up. I want to present this story completely. Even if it is not good enough, I will insist on giving an explanation to the characters in the story and an explanation to myself. To take a step back, even if I practice my writing again with a million words, I will always make progress. For the sake of future progress, I think I won't give up yet.        ，，，，，， Finally, I wish all those who strive for their dreams have a happy ending.

I've come back for a return visit. It's possible that I didn't sign a contract because the editor didn't like your style. But it doesn't matter. Maybe it was because Xianxia was slow to gain popularity. At first, Ergen's novels were all signed for 200,000 words, so don't rush.

The author is a new author, and there will be many shortcomings. If you see them, you can point them out at any time. I am not afraid of poisonous words or scolding. I just want to make my book better (I will not delete the posts. I have pinned the posts that point out my shortcomings. Everyone is welcome to comment.)

Don't vote for me, I gave up. If you have brothers and sisters who need recommendation votes, remember to leave a message. There are still a few accounts that have votes 🤤🤤🤤

I think you have a good idea. There should be some details and sentence problems. It is exactly the same as my last book. It is not easy to bring emotions into the world. The foreshadowing is not very strong. Lan Jiuer's baggage is not a foreshadowing. I have told the readers before. But your writing is really good. When you become a god, 🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​            I just learned about it, and I probably know a little bit about it. Although I don't really understand it, it means that it can't be updated today, but it can't be deleted, and the review has failed. I just asked about it in the water circle. Many people sent pictures to let me know, but the pictures were blocked and I couldn't see them at all. Including this comment, I revised it several times before posting it. If there are authors in our circle who haven't signed a contract yet, don't worry, let's wait and see. I'm not entirely sure what happened.

The writing is good. I read the first two chapters, and then looked at the title directly. It felt like a traditional fairy tale. It makes me have no desire to read anymore. Readers will not like old routines, it is better to be innovative. If it is the same as other ordinary fairy tales, then there is no need to read it. The current novel market is close to saturation. There are too many similar works (especially fairy tales and martial arts). If you want to stand out, you need not only excellent writing but also novel plots. Finally, please give me a thumbs up to the author.

Wow~ It's a rare fairy tale novel. It looks very fresh, and the details and emotions are well expressed. People are looking forward to the subsequent plot~ Keep up the good work (๑´∀`๑)

Collect it first and wait until you have some free time before you start reading it slowly! 😄Also, don't be discouraged. If the book is well written, no one else is needed. The readers are the best proof! 👍

Based on your suggestion, my book was divided into sections. When I had written more than 40,000 words, I received a request from the webmaster to sign a contract with me. This was my first time writing a book and I didn't understand anything. Thanks to you guys for telling me some things, I came back to say thank you. Da Da Da's writing is great. Readers who believe in you, we all support you. Come on Da Da Da (✪▽✪)👍👍

Come on! Keep it up!

I'm here to cheer you up again✊

After reading the suspense set up at the beginning of Dada, I feel that the story is very attractive. Although I haven't seen many Xianxia, ​​I can still feel that Dada has constructed a relatively large world view. I saw what Dada said about the failure of signing the contract. In fact, I think this cannot be used as a criterion to evaluate the quality of a book! Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

Although I don't like Xianxia, ​​I still can't help but come and see Su Dada and vote for him, hehe, keep up the hard work. Zhien's name is great👍 It can be seen that when every author conceives a name, it is extremely troublesome in order to fit the character's personality 😁

The mediocre little writer came to take a look and read the first few chapters for the time being. I personally thought it was quite good. The writing style is slightly relaxed, the plot direction is good, and the output of information is handled well. Maybe the only small shortcoming is in Zhezi. The novel needs a sense of picture. I think some places are not detailed enough, which will cause questions. The action description can be better. There is no problem with the plot. Overall it is very good! Come on ❤️

Brother Su, I have to go to school and can't continue to read your books. I hope I can read more chapters when I come back. Goodbye. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง. Three tickets are given. Don't forget me😁😁

Haven't signed a contract yet? It feels like it's ready to be put on the shelves 😰

The writing is very good, and the description of each character is very vivid. Whether it is the color, sense of substitution, or the details and expressions, it is very worthy of learning and reference. I wish the author good luck in his work and good health.

How should I put it? I feel that the plot is quite good, but there are some places that there is no need to explain to the readers. For example, some foreshadowing places will be used later and have nothing to do with the previous ones. There is actually no need to write them.

Come on! Every book is our hard work. No matter what the result is, we must at least be worthy of our hard work during this period. I hope you and I will encourage each other to show what we think in our hearts to every reader.

I'm super happy, I signed a contract with Hongxiu! ! !

Does it mean that if you don't reach the experience value today, you can't use it? ——Wong Tai Sin, who was heartbroken for five yuan I finally made up my mind to save the five yuan spicy noodles, but I didn't expect the system to do this for me! Read the article! China Literature Network Management! I want to complain! ! !

It's coming, it's coming I accept it, If you have nothing to do, let's take a look and ask for advice.

😭I've been too busy lately, please try your best