Walking with the Devil

Friends who are passing by, take a look and give me some suggestions.

I haven't read Chapter 5 because the first chapter is too long... 1. The setting of angels and demons should actually be very interesting, but after mentioning it at the beginning, it becomes a bit invisible later on 2. The overall writing is smooth and the story is well designed, but The transition is peaceful, and some key scenes (such as A Hua rushing in to protect A Fang) are skipped in one sentence. In fact, they can be detailed a little bit 3. Some sections are too long, really too long, and look very tiring... 4. The overall feeling is still very innovative, come on.

The introduction is too simple and does not have the effect of inspiring others. Then, although the book and story are good, each chapter has a similar number of words! The first chapter is too long... It feels like it is definitely over 2,000 words. There are still some paragraphs that are too rough, too long and too thin. There are also many things in the story that are quite wordy, which can obviously be summed up in one sentence. I suggest you revise it! Overall, it's not bad. Keep up the good work (the above is purely my personal opinion, don't worry about it because it's useless to care about it, hahaha, bye)

You have come, just take a look before you leave. 🥺🥺

I would like to make a small suggestion. Sometimes some paragraphs are really long. If time permits, I suggest you break them down.

The story is very well written, I can feel that you have your own ideas, please do your best! ! !

The story idea is good, the big brain is very good, it is an interesting story, looking forward to the update

Come on, portray the worldview perfectly, set up people, come on

The writing style is not bad, but it is a little unclear at the beginning. It could be further described in depth, and some things that should be explained still need to be explained. Big cheers. Received.

The plot is monotonous. The introduction is monotonous. The content is monotonous. The setting is monotonous. The biggest drawback is that one or two words are monotonous.