Return to the Nobility

1. The big world view should be a new and imaginary world view, but without a transitional introduction (even a few strokes will do), I feel that I can't fully understand it. I just have a feeling of hey, what is this, and after a while, ah, what is that again. 2. I still admire Da Da's writing style because it is very similar to those classic Western literature wording styles! 3. I felt a little confused by the progress of the plot. Let me just say that before I could understand anything, the protagonist was in jail. I said:? ? ? Why! And that crystal! What is it for? Is it a clue item~ 4. If you are not a person who often reads Western literature, you may not be able to quickly enter it. This is a common problem among everyone. You always look at a work from the author's point of view and don't know how it is written. Maybe the author can continue to simplify some language, or use other things to metaphorically replace it~ It is easy to persuade others! That's probably it! The opinion of a female video author may not be accurate enough! Come on together!

I'm not very good at writing book reviews, sorry. First of all, I think what you said at the beginning is too confusing. Ignoring the rest, I think you have already discouraged me a little in this first chapter. In the spirit of mutual evaluation, I continued reading. From the first to the third chapter, I really didn't understand what it was about. The writing was good, but I felt that the sense of immersion was really not strong. So I went back and watched it again. Then I found out that the protagonist was a thief who went to jail and then went to the academy. To be honest, you were too slow to get started. I didn't read the protagonist's interests and hobbies. It wasn't until the second or third chapter that I realized that the protagonist liked to be alone. As someone who has read novels for many years, I think if you don't like slow-paced novels, it will feel very discouraging. After reading the third chapter, I felt that the plot developed too slowly. After eight chapters, I saw the protagonist going to prison and coming out of prison to go to the academy. I think it would be better if the previous chapters were more concise. Few people can read it alone. I even had to go back and read it more than once before I could figure out what the story was about. But what I write later is okay, it won't be boring, and the story becomes interesting. I think the author may be digging holes in some places, but I can't see it, and I really don't have the patience to read it again. These are the main issues. It may be a bit venomous, but the writing style is absolutely fine. There is no doubt about it. In short, come on, author!

The writing is good, and it can be said to be very interesting, but it has problems as a web text. [Title]: 6 points. To put it simply... I can't understand it. After reading a few chapters, I didn't feel the relationship between the title and the content of the article. Maybe there is some connection in the author's opinion, but ordinary viewers like me may not understand it well. [Introduction]: 6 points. This introduction is quite well written, and it feels very grand and has that kind of spirit. However, there is the same problem as the title. It cannot be seen to be related to the article. After reading the introduction, I thought it was the invincible style of the world-destroying demon king, but it turns out that I first dealt with a little gangster... [Writing]: 8 points. The author's writing is still very good, and it has a feeling of reading Harry Potter, which is very suitable for this medieval fictional world of magic and alchemy. But I feel that it was written too deliberately, and some places should have been omitted. For example, the author's first few chapters are very strange, with thousands of words written eloquently. But for me, the most intuitive feeling is that the protagonist's character is fully expressed, and the world view is revealed, but the specific content of the book is not reflected. [Plot]: 7 points. It can be seen that this is probably a slow-burning novel, but it is not very popular now. Although the writing is very good and should be able to retain some readers, it is too niche for the online writing community, so it is better to submit it for publication directly. [Comprehensive perception]: 7 points. Overall, this book is acceptable to me. As long as there are no shortcomings in the plot or logic, I can read it, not to mention that the author's writing style is pretty good. However, the plot advances too slowly in the early stage, which will make readers lose their patience. To sum up, I hope the author will continue to work hard and become a god soon!

I have read the first three chapters. The writing is good and the writing is smooth. The story setting is not clear yet. The title of the book is very good and the introduction is average. In addition, there are too many characters in the first three chapters, which are a bit confusing, and the main line is not clear... Come on.

Sorry, I only read the first chapter. This comment must be really rude. The biggest problem: image quality. The novel is not a prose or an argumentative essay. The novel is mainly based on plot and characters. Then the sense of picture is very important, but what the author lacks the most is this thing. A good picture sense should be able to allow pictures to appear in the mind along with the description, and to be able to construct scenes, events, and even the world with the author. The specific words and sentences used become secondary. No matter how white it is, as long as it has a sense of picture, it can make people watch it. On the contrary, no matter how good the writing is, I can't stand it. So this kind of description is very important. It must describe space, action, and details in a logical order. It is similar to the order we usually observe. No matter how new your concept is, the description must conform to the laws of human psychology, otherwise it will be completely impossible to construct. If it cannot be constructed, there will be no sense of substitution. At this time, the author's dazzling skills have become a flaw. It can be seen that the author sometimes intends to show off his skills. However, the gorgeous words without pictures are an obstacle to reading. What's more, in addition to words, the author completely ignores syntax and grammar and uses punctuation marks indiscriminately in the process of combining words into sentences. To put it bluntly, there is no writing style at all. So, it is really impossible for people to watch. I would like to give you a suggestion: The author should not worry about the writing style at all now, and do not think about plot development and character creation, just write the pictures properly first. I believe that when authors write something, they have pictures in their minds, so let's first describe the pictures honestly and in human terms. Because this is the most basic thing that can make people watch. The sense of substitution, the rhythm, the poisonous and refreshing aspects, all must be based on the sense of picture. If there is a picture, there may not be any of the above, but if there is no picture, there must not be any of the above.

I read the text more seriously, and I like to read word by word, sentence by sentence, and never skip. Then I felt a little uncomfortable while reading. I am very sorry that I have only read the first three chapters. There are many words with grammatical errors. For example, in the first chapter, giving xx is a short action, not a continuous action, and is generally not used later. In the later chapters, there are also some missing subjects in the entire paragraph, as well as other grammatical errors. Because the mobile app cannot copy sentences, it is difficult to list them all. As a reader, I clicked in and saw that this article was serialized. The latest update was 4 days ago, and I felt chilled. You must know that in a place like Qidian, interruption is fatal. Stable updates represent the credibility of the author. Few people read eunuch novels. The plot progress at the beginning is a bit slow, with many unfamiliar words and concepts appearing, some explained and some not. I feel that it should be closer to the reader's understanding. Don't throw out too many unfamiliar concepts at the beginning. You can slowly explain them later. Internet articles pay attention to three golden chapters, and the beginning should attract people to continue reading. However, the first half of this novel throws away unfamiliar concepts, and the plot described in the other half is relatively fragmented. It is narrated at one time and then interrupted at the other. It is difficult to achieve the effect of grabbing people. The last thing is the subject matter. Although the Lord of Mysteries is very popular, most translation styles, Western-style names of people and places, still have the effect of dissuading people. It doesn't matter to the masters, but newcomers still have to choose carefully.

Hello brother, you left a message under my post on "I Have a Mythical Tree", hoping that I would comment on this book. Because I don't have enough personal time, this review won't be too long. I hope you can understand. First of all, I want to say that this post may contain my strong personal tendency and does not mean "I want to teach you how to write a book". Please don't take it too seriously. In terms of advantages, the advantages of your book are actually not outstanding. I will only mention one point here. Your description of the character dialogue is acceptable, and there are not a lot of words like "xxx Road:".         Disadvantages:       1. There are a large number of grammatical errors in the whole text. You may have used a wording similar to "translation accent" to fit the context of the article. But this kind of wording does not add any points to me, and it causes me more of a huge reading and psychological obstacle. 2. The description of the plot is extremely complicated and complicated. This is actually similar to the previous point I mentioned. Your translation has caused great interference to the plot. 3. The writing method is close to classical literature, but it is paradoxical. If you have ever read foreign classical literature during the Industrial Revolution, you will find that your writing style is very similar to the author who wrote this kind of text. There are a lot of text descriptions and narrations for each part. But the problem is that the role of classical literature is to highlight the psychology and character of the main supporting characters and sublimate the theme. But your article does not have such a spiritual core. Readers of online literature do not need or want to know what the past and present life of a little guy is like. 4. The character description is unclear. I don't have enough time, so I can't give you a detailed analysis. For example, the "girl" in Chapter 2 cannot be clearly identified as a character, her motives are unclear, and her behavior is stereotypical.             5.       ， 6. The structure is unclear, the main story line is vague, and the specific motivation is lacking. 7. As of now, there is no overlap between the introduction and the text. Even if the introduction describes the later content, there still needs to be a few overlaps with the original text. The introduction represents the main direction and style of the book. What you describe in the introduction is a high-level fantasy, but in the main text so far, you have described a low-level magic city of the cyberpunk type. Overall, your work is not above the passing mark. For myself, there isn't much I want to read, and there may even be some minor issues with signing the contract. I would give the overall review a "poisonous weed". Finally, I hope that your writing skills can be improved, and that this book will improve in the future. Thank you for inviting me, and see you soon.                                         —

Well, it seems that I am the first one. The writing style of this book is a bit deep. My ability is limited and I can only find a few details. The above errors are marked in each paragraph.

I just finished reading the first chapter, and I feel that the description is too cumbersome and even a bit long-winded. Maybe it's because I usually watch female videos. But I personally feel that when I read your novel, I suddenly felt like I was reading a text. It is too boring, and it is difficult to attract readers like me who are female readers. The author's writing style is indeed good, but I think writing style is not very important compared to the plot. It is of no use to just describe and describe, no matter how good the writing style is.

Come on, it will be better if you adjust some paragraphs❤Forest Hungry Ghost

The article is very literary It doesn't read like Internet literature is a real novel Although the character description is simple but refreshing (not to boast It makes people feel good about reading But it would be better if the plot can be laid out more clearly Otherwise, the reading is a bit blurry The writing is very good At least it is not a fast food culture! Come on ❤️

The pace is too slow, and there is too much foreshadowing in the early stages. The reader may have clicked the cross mark before reaching the later stages. Also, what is the purpose of that girl... Does it highlight the excellence of the protagonist? I have read the first 3 chapters and will review the rest after reading them. (It is recommended that you add some conflict during the protagonist's theft process in the early stage, such as adding a strong opponent for the protagonist in the future...)

The writing is first-rate, the story is second-rate, and the plot advancement (conflict)... Is one level higher than the bottom-rate It is probably more suitable for writing slow-burning articles, but... The starting point is more suitable for online articles... Slow-burning articles are generally niche and not very suitable for newcomers to write. Oh forget it, what I just said 😭 really doesn't know how to comment.

Advantages: 1. Refined language is the basis for reflecting technology, and the details and environment description make people feel the taste when reading. 2. The character dialogue is also good. It is indeed easy to understand who is who from the reader's perspective. Disadvantages: 1. Plot, plot. The plot momentum in the first few chapters is too weak, at least it gives the protagonist a reasonable goal. 2. Putting aside the plot, it is recommended to simplify the language and make the dialogue more precise, and then determine the interaction between the protagonist and supporting characters through dialogue.

The writing is great, there is a lot of suspense, and the writing style is novel. Come on, I have collected it. ❤️

But reading your book is like reading a printed version of Notre Dame de Paris. It's a bit different from online writing. The audience for online articles is very large, and there should be a large number of people who like to read easy and enjoyable articles without thinking.

It feels good, I rarely read Western fantasy novels (◔◡◔)

Author: Why don't you play with Digimon anymore?

I would like to ask, is the author a eunuch?

I gave up, I felt dizzy when I saw foreign names, and there were so many people...

After reading it, I found that there was nothing wrong with the writing and the story was okay. After seeing many people's comments in the comment area, as a newcomer who has only started one month before you, what I want to say to you is: I suggest you read some articles by great masters as an author. The overall feeling is that female channels strive for literary talent, while male channels strive for imagination. Sometimes men's videos are too wordy and unflattering. Go ahead and code. You don't have to read my books. As a novice writer, I still recommend that you spend more time writing a good book. If you save a lot of manuscripts, promote it more. One month out of the rookie stage, it's basically hard to be seen.

Emmm, I said, I am a little helpless