The Last Barrier of the Universe

Come on!

The story is really well described, keep up the good work

Not bad, but there are some details that you still need to pay attention to, such as typos and so on. Let's work together!

Awesome, keep it up, wait for the update 😁

Come on, pay attention to details and don't be careless.

It needs to be organized, come on＾0＾~

First, for punctuation, try to use periods when periods should be used, and do not use exclamation points instead, because the emotions expressed by the two are different. Second, "", try to use these three words correctly, "" is followed by description, "" is followed by action, and the previous action must be modified. Remembering these three points should reduce the frequency of incorrect use. Third, for typos, try to go back and take a look after each chapter is written to check the typos in the article. If possible, do not have any typos, which will affect reading fluency. Fourth, I have a good idea. It would be great if I could explain it in my own world. Overall evaluation, the writing is online and the plot is smooth. I just felt that the golden finger at the beginning was a bit abrupt, and I felt that there was still a little lack of foreshadowing. _(:з∠)_Come on!

The writing is very good and the narrative is clear. I hope to read more.

I write it in paragraphs. If it's too long, it looks a bit tiring. It's not bad. Come on.

Already collected. Your recommendation ticket is too miserable. I will get one tomorrow. Please check out my work too!