May the Young Stay Young

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Nowadays, most authors like to use internet slang and references in their novels. Then involve the readers. I suggest the author could update more slowly. Then make the novel's content even more outstanding. The most important part of a novel is its beginning. If the beginning fails to grab the reader's attention Even if it gets really exciting later on, it won't matter. In a chapter, the beginning must be excellent, the middle can be filler, and the end must leave suspense. Foreshadow what will happen in the next chapter, or leave a subtle hint that readers can guess! This will make people look forward to your next chapter. Hope this helps! Come on

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The author's descriptions of 'people' are truly vivid, and they are particularly adept at writing about the details of life, gradually forming a series of beautiful scenes. That's my feeling—the beauty of 'humanity' 🌹🌹

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I've read a bit of the book, and well... The writing style is quite novel for online novels, leaning towards a gentle and delicate style, emphasizing subtle beauty. However, it is, after all, an online novel, and I suggest it should have some ups and downs. The author's writing is still relatively immature, so it will be difficult for them to stand out. But I still wish them good luck! ^0^~ This kind of light and refreshing style is rare these days. 🤭

Having read the first chapter, I have a few preliminary suggestions for your reference: First, is the opening poem a work by Gu Cheng? I searched for keywords and found that someone on a certain platform answered with this poem, but the author was identified as Xia Mo. Secondly, it would be helpful to add a separator or something similar between the opening quote and the main text to clearly distinguish them. This is because the quote uses the perspective of "we," meaning it's a first-person perspective communicating with the reader, while the main text shifts to a third-person perspective. Personally, I think it's better to separate these shifts in perspective. Third, it is recommended to distinguish between different locations as much as possible. These are my thoughts for now; I hope they are helpful. Come on.