Swallowed Star: Luo Zhiyuan

The newcomer is pretty good, but there are two fatal points. 1. Lack of logic: According to the time period, the Nuolanshan family fleet will invade the earth. Can you imagine that the protagonist is still a child of several years old and goes out into the universe alone, leaving the safety of the earth behind, stepping on the watermelon rind and going wherever he wants. The cosmic genius battle is even more outrageous. Luo Feng, Hong, and Lei Shen didn't participate? Luo Feng captured the golden-horned giant beast and was extremely talented. Babata would definitely let Luo Feng and the others sign up for the competition. The result? Luo Zhiyuan was the only one on earth to participate in the competition, and the child Luo Zhiyuan took Ai Chen's hand. That picture is so beautiful! 2. Lack of foreshadowing: You wrote such a thrilling match scene between geniuses in a dry manner, and there was not even a bystander shouting 666. If you think about the original work, the Black Dragon Mountain Empire's seed players were defeated one after another, creating a depressing atmosphere. When Luo Feng stood out and broke into the top 1,000 of Qianwu Universe Kingdom, the Black Dragon Mountain Empire was boiling. From the Emperor of the Black Dragon Mountain Empire to the people of the empire, everyone was cheering. Why is it so cool to see this? Foreshadowing! There is also the part about Chaos City Lord recruiting Luo Zhiyuan as a registered disciple, which was briefly mentioned. Without any foreshadowing, how can the protagonist appear to be awesome? Why does the Lord of Chaos City want to accept disciples? What is the status of the disciples of the Lord of Chaos City? Are any melon-eaters shocked? Does anyone have any comments? Have you ever been ridiculed or slapped in the face? …

I hope I can write as much as possible! The tickets have been presented.

Another eunuch that successfully devoured fellow fans.

When I saw the name Luo Zhiyuan, I thought at first that it was his father who traveled through time and became Luo Feng 😅 Later I realized that his father's name is Luo Hongguo, but the two names have the same style 😅😅

What a coincidence

In this book, the protagonist says that the food on Earth exceeds that of other worlds. I objected. But one person also refuted me that the delicacies of the earth must be better than those that swallow the stars. I don't want to say anything, I just want to say that I published something for him to see. In the original work.

The author currently updates about 4,000 times a day, but he still needs to practice more, since he is really not good enough. However, I still hope that the author will write better and better, and go straight to Sanjiang to reach the best products 😁😁😁

The book reviews have been a lot busy these two days, which is very comfortable. Hehe~ I will try my best to write better, give me some time to grow, collect more, comment more, and vote more: P

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That's it? A eunuch? ? ? ?