Urban Serpent

My opinion is that there is a protagonist who has a Taoist memory and a heart that has not changed at all. Anyway, I can't explain it, so that's it.

Come on, author, your work, whether it's Juggernaut or later The Crown, is very good, but you have to be faster, so that you can be popular. When you are popular, you have motivation, it is not easy to be unfinished, and you are more popular, forming a virtuous circle. 🎁🎁🎁

How many manuscripts have been saved for Fatty's new book? . . Don't tell me to write one chapter a day. . . I highly suspect that it is because you never save the manuscript and write it now that it collapses in the later stages of writing. . . This time, you learned your lesson, saved some drafts and gave it some time to polish it carefully. Your writing skills can be good in conception, but why does the plot collapse every time in the middle? There is no late stage sword master at all. The hard replacement of the map in the late stage is barely finished, and the sword master in the late stage is directly killed by the outline. . . I hope the new book will improve it. . .

3 Major breaking points of this book 1. Writing about a good-for-nothing wife, slowing down the pace 2. Always writing about Guo Jia plot, and not being able to handle the middle points 3. After writing the subject of cultivating immortals for a long time, I still can't defeat the martial arts practitioner. He is like a grandson, doing whatever others ask him to do.

Already invested + chasing investment, fat man, don't let your loyal readers down!

The layout is too small. At first, I thought it was about a fairy seeking enlightenment, but later it turned into a clumsy third-rate romance drama. The key point is to keep writing. Later, it leads to the interstellar world, and a lot of black technology was mentioned. I thought it was a very advanced interstellar civilization. In the end, it is still a third-rate science fiction system in which one person's power overwhelms everything. Now it has introduced the story of family and friends. If the author wants to write a romance, he should cut it off early. The next book will be a full text of romance.

Every book is poisoned by your heroine. The key is that you have to write about the heroine in every book. You can't write the relationship well, but you still have to write it.

The emotional line is not well written, it is inexplicable, it seems to be just a love line to add to the plot, and it makes people feel alienated.

The writing is very good, but the text is wrong. A snake is a snake, and it turns into a dragon. Why don't you just change the name to Urban Tianlong? It was so embarrassing that I couldn't pick it up several times! ! ! !

Can the heroine be written to death? Only if she is written to death will it be interesting.

As proof, if this book reaches 200 pages, I will eat up my phone📱! I welcome the author's slap in the face, I guess he won't give me a chance.

By the way, I saw a book friend say today that the protagonist of this book gets married too early. I feel that the problem is not that she gets married too early, but that the heroine becomes more useless as she gets older, and the gap between her and the protagonist is too big. Gao Wu's novels all have this problem. It was the same in the novels written by Tomato and others in the early years. The heroine has no sense of existence in the later period. In fact, the author Juggernaut's book handled it slightly better, and the heroine was able to fight side by side with the protagonist in the final battle. But then these two books are all late-stage soy sauce. This book feels like the elder sister is more like the heroine now, well, maybe it's my misunderstanding.

I've read Chapter 180. The protagonist is almost like a god or a devil. The biological levels of the mother-in-law and the protagonist are so different. They are like a sesame and a watermelon. How do these two get together? The pore mite body odor is very clear in the protagonist's senses. If the personal life level is too high, it will definitely produce a life force field, just like the pollution in Crusuli, it will definitely distort the heroine. Turning over at night can crush the heroine to death, especially since the protagonist actually follows the path of the earthly immortal. Isn't it a weakness in the universe to have a territory that cannot be given up?

Let me say, the fighting aspect is actually pretty good, but the love aspect is too white. What era is this? Pure love 😅, in this era of information technology, junior high school students no longer watch this kind of thing. You let people of all ages watch this scene...

The author's first book was at its peak, and his second book was at least above the standard. This one is not as good as before, and the writing style and setting are all going downhill. And the author is really incompetent in writing emotional dramas

The author's setting and fighting are his strong points. The intellectual combat and political description are relatively weak, and the emotional description is very weak. Have you considered using your strengths and avoiding weaknesses? Take the upgrade battle as the main line

The spirituality shown in the first half of that book was never seen again, which is a pity.

It's written and written, have you forgotten the title of the book?

What is the title of the book? It has a strong 2009 style.

I always feel that the author's books have the style of ancient Internet writing, and the good and bad are different in different opinions. But there are three points that appeal to me the most: First, the protagonist's training to become stronger is detailed. Different from the current rampant system of adding points, the earlier ones only broke through the layers of the system by blindly upgrading to higher, faster and stronger regardless of the realm. This book shows in detail everything from the skills to the understanding and mentality. Let me regain the wonderful experience of reading martial arts novels in the first place. After all, those who have read Jin Yong's novels will remember a few secret formulas, "Let him be strong, let him be strong, the breeze blows on the hills, let him be horizontal, let him be horizontal, the bright moon shines on the river"; "The way of heaven can make up for the deficiency when it is damaged." Second, the power system is rich and orderly. From the martial arts masters of the martial arts sects, the imperial court, and Aquamarine Star, to the venerable demigods of alien civilizations and interstellar wars, they can continuously improve the level of martial arts without departing from the original inheritance, echoing from beginning to end. Unlike some books where the power system collapses in the later stages and there are so many powerful people waiting for the protagonist to upgrade and queue up to kill them, I couldn't read it without thinking. Third, the setting is complete and realistic. I have read a lot of articles about martial arts. It is okay for the imperial warriors to fight in their own circles, which can be considered self-explanatory. However, when it comes to gang fights or even modern warfare, thermal weapons are more powerful and easier to control, so how can the flesh and blood warriors run rampant. I can only watch to pass the time. The author's treatment is much more believable. The country gives preferential treatment to warriors, and they can rely on fighting for beacons to export alien civilizations; if alien civilization needs it, warriors can drive mechas to destroy ships and defeat enemies. Moreover, while giving preferential treatment to warriors, they also cooperated and conducted preventive research at the same time. Unfortunately, there was a problem with the rhythm at the beginning, and the setting was too urgent, which affected the plot. I, who prefer settings, can't help but jump to watch sometimes, not to mention other people who are used to the routines of popular online articles.

Except for the book Sword Master which fell apart in the later stages, it is generally a very good book. This one feels rather tacky in design, and the Qinglong Continent is a bit of a drama.

Author, you are too fooled, the investment failed again.

There is a reason for the poor grades. After the first few chapters, the writing is very good, but! Generally speaking, the first three chapters are the so-called golden chapters. Most of the time, people read here. It depends on what you write. Not only is it not good to read, but it is also easy to cause drama in some places. The most important thing when reading a novel is to be immersed in it! It's okay for you to explain it in one sentence, which will make people feel less immersed. I suggest you revise the first few chapters and don't have explanations in the following chapters. If you have to explain it, I suggest you put it in this chapter.

I suspect you are letting yourself go as you write.

Broken my trust

I think the heroine's storyline is too much. I feel like I'm just watching the protagonist being a bitch. The protagonist also gives his master his own skills. Although it's acceptable, I still feel uncomfortable watching it.

Once you're convinced, let's see who invests in you in the next book! ! ! ! !

I can give you fairy grass in the first few dozen chapters of the author's book, but after that it takes a turn for the worse and I can only give you hay.

Fatty, today is August 2nd

I've read a few chapters, it should be a more conventional and enjoyable article.