Coming to the Wild World

The protagonist has too few scenes. Although you want to show us the world view, it is a bit fast. The description of spiritual practice is a bit lacking. For example, the main character who becomes a shaman is ten feet tall. Give it a good polish and it doesn't feel intrusive.

Come and occupy the building, come on, come on 😁😁😁

There are too many scenes with the son, and usually in a story like this, it's all written in one stroke.