Konoha Title System

The beginning of Kirigakure Orphan , Terumi Mei at the same time, rational (gao) wisdom (xiao) system flow The story jumps very fast, and the plot is very rich. Don't look at the 500,000 words, but there is actually a lot of content There are a lot of redundant things, the description is not detailed enough, the whole process is told in a straightforward manner, and there is no emphasis. It's a bit like expanding the outline In fact, if the author follows your story line, he can expand the word count to at least 200,000 words. If you don't want to write more, don't add unnecessary plot points. If you expand the writing, you can write about your emotions and expressions during the dialogue and fighting. For example, I was a little confused during the first battle and couldn't form a picture. Finally, there are a few points that you can't read with your mind.

Why do I remember that Uchiha Itachi was 13 years old when he wiped out the clan? 🙂

^_^ Not bad, keep up the good work

Come on, authorヾ(✿ﾟ▽ﾟ)ノ

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Very well written! Why isn't it recommended?

If the pace is too fast, you can actually write a lot more

The content is too fast, so it's not that engaging.

The author sets up the grading of ninjutsu. Level B will definitely not be able to beat level A. This ninjutsu must be upgraded to level A or even higher to win the battle. . . . .

It is poisonous, and many jonins know the teleportation technique. The kingdom of Time Vortex was controlled for four generations and destroyed.

Many of the dialogues and plot descriptions in the article really didn't feel like Naruto to me, huh!

A strong fantasy atmosphere. . . . . .

The writing is still good, but there are too many typos. You are not using the Wubi input method. It is better to use the Sogou input method.

It's okay to write, but it feels weird and I can't read it?