Sanya's Adventures in Another World

Ah! Gone! Not enough! ! !

The mortal stage is pretty good, but the part about cultivating immortals is really a bit casual. Such a good seedling can teach so randomly at such a young age... Why should he accept a disciple if he is lazy and afraid of trouble? It is not easy to cultivate immortality. How can you reach high places if you are lazy? Therefore, the character setting can be very individual and interesting, but the tone must be reliable... For example, the female master, from the appearance, has a transcendent status, and can't be suppressed by the leader. She has a weird temper and strong combat power. She looks like she can really take action if she wants to lift the Danfeng. But later, she doesn't like to discipline her disciples and likes to be free. Yes, some masters, I am strong but I don't know how to teach (but I should be able to spread them well. It stands to reason that the first few apprentices should be good too, otherwise I can just raise good seedlings?! If this kind of thing that is the foundation of the sect is not rigorous and serious, the sect will not be strong or long), but the later apprentices actually complained many times that the master is lazy and does not like to practice? ! Is there really any achievement in the world that can be achieved without hard work and dedication? Even the cultivation level produced by pills needs to be meditated and absorbed... Not to mention the fighting skills that need to be constantly honed. It's like the author invites us to travel together, but we just watch the people eating, drinking, and fighting in the tour bus, or looking at the scenery through the glass window. There is no sense of immersion, and the world presented is blurry, contradictory, and scattered. In short, the author's strength lies in the portrayal of characters, with distinctive personalities, humorous character interactions, good writing skills, and no strange writing habits (for example, some authors have a voice in everything they write. How did this oral habit be put into the plot statements? Others like to add inexplicable "smiles" to the characters) "You should smile when you find a place, smile before getting ready to work, smile when standing at the door, and smile when you are leaving; I am a little uncomfortable when reading and love to imagine, so I will say goodbye) The places worth breaking through are the rendering of the scene, which is a bit dull (such as the first time I entered the sect, the world of immortality that I have been thinking about, the first contact with it) Ah, the main scene of the future plot, there really is nothing to show for it, all I know is that there is a grand gate that makes children envious) The tone of the world is unclear, which leads to contradictory and unreasonable behavior of the characters (you see, if a cultivator brings his mortal relatives as servants, then the weakness is put on the bright side. If you want to protect this poor family with no foundation, you have to protect it. To be strong, you must not attract hatred. The character of this protagonist is very smart but loves to show off. Besides, she is a reincarnated adult soul. As for being so fussy with a group of real children, are you really not afraid of the evil behind it? If you can't touch you, you are not familiar with the place in your life. Development? You must first embody value before you can have status and privileges.) The pursuit of conflict and conflict is too much, and the plot design is not natural and smooth enough (one is the narrow-minded fourth senior brother. If you really care about it, it is bigger than the hatred of He Xiaocao and others. Xiaoli said that a 6-year-old child should not be put in danger. If it is older, it will mislead people's cultivation and hinder their path to immortality... If it were written differently, it would be a small punishment. Dajie was just playing tricks, putting her in the thatched cottage for the protagonist, but secretly observing and protecting her, occasionally teasing her deliberately, and then jumping out to snatch the food when she finally managed to get it to eat, and then making it so delicious that the protagonist could see that she couldn't eat it. Is the description more reasonable? After all, people who practice immortality are the best. This kind of thing must not be joked, otherwise it will be a feud! You can always make fun of them in your free time, but never harm them in principle. Such a senior brother is cute and reliable! In addition, the rich boy, with his bad temper, should have been taught how to behave before meeting the heroine. Besides, being able to be a younger brother with a single spiritual root is something that no one else can ask for! Third, after all, if a child from a wealthy family goes to cultivate immortality, at least one of his children should have a "brain" that can handle things and a "legs" that can handle things! Elders can't be so ignorant, right?) Sorry, I won't read it anymore. In addition, I think the protagonist really just wants his cousin to entrust his life to other immortal cultivators. I find it very confusing. Thinking about it, there will be endless troubles... Ugh

I feel average, the heroine is a bit virginal, a little incapable of looking at faces, she really feels like a 6-year-old girl, and the heroine's elder brother is also too strong.

I stayed at Qidian for many years and wrote several books. Although there were many mistakes, I persisted in finishing them. I am very grateful to the book friends who read the article carefully, caught bugs and put forward opinions. I also know that many people abandoned the article because they could not accept the character setting. To be honest, everyone is free to read or not read the article. I will seriously consider whether the article needs to be revised based on your opinions. However, if you make personal attacks because you feel that the article is not your cup of tea and there is something wrong with the settings, then learn about the deletion and banning package.

It's better to write it as a story about aboriginal cultivating immortals. It doesn't feel like an adult at all.

A super useless idiot! It's really too unfair to give (it) the single fire spirit root to the fire spirit root! There is not a shred of merit in the female pig in this book. But you can find all the flaws in her!

The strangest points of this book: 1. The character of the heroine has always been talkative, bitchy and thick-skinned. She gets angry when others and spiritual pets say this, which is a double standard. And it seems that he is outspoken, but it feels like he has no brainer. 2. Meng Yuchen, who likes the heroine, actually said that he would kill her sister-in-law. This is really shameful.

I hope there won't be any cp. The author can think about it, the world of cultivators with CP is gone, and there are not many people without CP. If this book does not have CP, it will be promoted in various ways in this circle. As for those who like to read romance novels, they have more choices. When it comes to a romance novel about cultivating immortality, they have a dispensable mentality.

Inexplicably, I find that family disgusting. It's my personal opinion. Please don't criticize me.

It is impossible for those who have traveled through time not to know the bloody cruelty of the world of cultivating immortals. So a newbie who just went to the world of cultivating immortals has to bring his family members who don't know how to cultivate? Can't you think about how to save your own life first? 😅😅 It's because of the invincibility and non-blood loss plug-in, right?