Reborn at Hogwarts

Some suggestions First of all, the Harry Potter world is not suitable for 'Gou', because he has other options, such as going to school in France or going to China as an exchange student, which can be avoided. Nowadays, there is no way to avoid the stability in Gou's novels, similar to the brother's book, because he is in the game and has no way to leave, but the protagonist is different, so the author's selection of materials has problems Secondly, to join the Harry Potter world, you can either gain benefits from the event line for the sake of profit, thereby giving up safety and actively joining in. In this book, I didn't find the benefits that the protagonist must obtain, nor the protagonist's goals, but just drifting with the flow Or there is no choice, similar to orphans, wizards from ordinary families have no chance to choose, but they have the opportunity to choose in the protagonist's family, but they still go to Hogwarts, and they still have to "go", which is very problematic I hope you will work hard.

I searched for the protagonist's name in my book and found this book. It's very interesting how the male protagonist's name collides with his name 😏 The writing style is okay, not like many HP fans from Qidian. I couldn't stand the first three chapters. It has a certain readability. As a fan of HP fandom for 9 years, the point of my displeasure is simply that I can't accept Ron being written as a Gryffindor who speaks and acts impulsively. It's so OOC that I can't stand it. (There are also NC stories that whitewash V and darken Dumbledore...) As long as you don't tarnish my poor kid Ron, I will continue to pay attention to this book. As for Hermione, the heroine of the popular male HP fanfic, let her be, but don't just praise her and step on her.

The author's writing style is okay, the words and sentences are not awkward to read, the characters are both online, and the plot and pitfalls are also quite good. It adds a suspenseful color, which is a bonus, but the novel is not outstanding enough and does not have that eye-catching feeling. Personally, I feel that there are three issues that need improvement: First, the name of Incarnation is a bit cliché and not very magical. Although the author gave the origin of this magic, it does not fit well with Harry Potter's magic system. Moreover, the incarnation spell does not have a spell, and it lacks the internal flavor. Every time this magic is used, the word incarnation spell is used instead. If there are some dramas, it is recommended to add a spell to see if it will be better. Secondly, because it was the first time to write a book, the author's handling of the first volume was too rough, and did not perfectly express what the author wanted to express. There was too much emphasis on the suspenseful horror style, and the magic flavor was lost. It can be reworked. Third, the man in black must not be the future incarnation of Pig's Foot, although it seems to be close to him at the moment. Because the author writes suspense, the most taboo thing about this kind of novel is for readers to guess the plot context and direction. If the man in black is not the future incarnation of Pig's Foot, I suggest the author say it in this chapter, which can also arouse everyone's curiosity. If it is what everyone guessed, it is best to write it directly in the chapter where Pig's Foot reads the elf's memory. If the author spends a lot of time laying out a trap and setting up a lot of suspense, and when the mystery is revealed and the readers have already guessed the identity of the character in the first three chapters, it will undoubtedly become a laughing stock in the end, and the reader will feel: That's it? ? ? Personally, these three points are minus points. What attracts readers to Harry Potter is the wild imagination and endless spells with different functions in the book. The style of magic battle in the original book is very obvious, that is, various spells shooting. In the author's book, someone else shoots a spell, the pig's foot disappears with the incarnation spell, and the battle scene directly turns into a fantasy horror style. In addition, the author may be too keen on digging holes and exaggerating the suspenseful atmosphere, resulting in losing the core of HP novels. Excellent HP fan novels will intersperse descriptions of Hogwarts School in the text, and will add moving stairs and towers between scene changes. , Black Lake, an auditorium with a view of the starry sky, moving portraits, armor, etc. These things are mentioned repeatedly in daily life, just to deepen the reader's sense of immersion and make the reader feel immersed in the scene. This book is much inferior in this regard and has no internal flavor. Work hard. I haven't written much so far and the problems are not big. It's easy to correct. I wish my results will get better and better.

A slow-burning work, it requires a little patience to slowly become fascinating. I support the author 🙏 and recommend it ~

As long as she is the heroine Hermione, I will support her unconditionally

As long as you don't follow those three smart fools, I'll give you anything

Recruiting for supporting roles~ You can post your own characters here, and the author will collect some of them to be used as supporting characters in this book. Requirements: Character design must match the background of the original work Format: Name: Gender: College: Wand: Appearance: Everyone is welcome to participate~

It's good that the protagonist still has his own ideas, but the plot design of someone who knows the protagonist very well digs holes in the protagonist again and again. Apart from being frustrated, there is really nothing to watch and it is very confusing. It felt like it completely eliminated the protagonist's small highlights in crisis handling.

The introduction was perfect, but after I finished the 350,000-word book, I didn't open it. Don't use the introduction to seduce people.

In your fight scene, the protagonist really doesn't know any spells except for the incarnation spell. A squib finally obtained the magic power, knows the plot, and understands the dangers in the future. That's it, that's it?

It is recommended that the author learn more about the matching of the wand material with the owner's personality. When choosing a wizard for the wand, the nature of the wand will have an impact on the owner. I hope the author can write better and better

I have never seen such a stubborn protagonist in an HP fanfiction. When will we realize the "butterfly effect" problem? Blindly escaping, passively starting a group every time, absolutely terrible

There is no feeling in the fighting, there is only one technique from beginning to end, and this technique is also used in conjunction with physical combat, so where is the magic? "Dual Wielding Battle with Gandalf"?

The writing is good and the plot has depth, but unfortunately, the more I read, the more I felt a little uncomfortable, so I re-examined the previous ones. It suddenly dawned on me: The protagonist, who had always wanted to be a good man, had unknowingly turned into a "dog" who could not live or die by himself. There are too many calculations and too many foreshadowings in the plot of this book... These are all aimed at the protagonist. Torture you as much as you want. Not dead though.

After reading the first volume, let me tell you my opinion First of all, the plot written by the author is very good, but the book is not good-looking The sadistic protagonist, conspiracy, shady story, all kinds of characters are off the charts, but the protagonist pulls his hips Maybe the protagonist will turn around later, but what does it matter, because I was persuaded to quit by the first volume

It's Hermione again ,,, Aesthetic fatigue

As long as you are in the harem, I will support you unconditionally.

After reading the introduction of Squib, I have been persuaded to quit regardless of whether the protagonist has an adventure and can use magic.

Say goodbye to the harem, please let it go! ! ! I like the current plot, even single lines are fine😭

It's good to read, it's rare to find a hp fanfic that doesn't look awkward

Those words for new authors are awesome.

Not finished yet. Should we clean up the book after the holiday? Otherwise, it would be too expensive to watch it for a long time without ending...

Which one do you think is better, a harem or a single heroine?

The brothers lifted the coffin and carried it away. . .

It's such a pity to finish the book like this. I was reading it with great enthusiasm. The characters of Zoe, Hermione and Ivan are all very well drawn. Does the author have a Q group? I can support it if I plan to write more in the future.

I went, but I didn't expect it to be cut, and then I saw this book.

Let me ask you a question, does the author cut it straight or give it a halfway ending?

New here. I saw it was about to be cut. I haven't read the content, but I'd like to know if there will be a new book? Come on＾0＾~, looking forward to it

I hope the author doesn't want eunuchs. It's not that your writing is not good. It's just that there are too many novels of the same type. After reading the title, most of them went to other genres.

Is this going to be cut? I still plan to chase it.