Cards Invade Another World

A little suggestion. The author's writing skills still need to be improved, so it is best to use strengths and avoid weaknesses and focus on shaping the characters. At present, the characters appear to be very flat, and the lack of writing style makes the routines very empty. If possible, don't rush to advance the plot quickly. Make the characters full first, so that even if the same routine is used later, the full characters can support you to write a different story. Example: What is the character of the protagonist Chen Qian? What have you experienced? What is your outlook on life? What's his quirk? What is the code of conduct? What is your attitude towards the heroine and other supporting characters? Only when these are fleshed out can the character stand up. When I look at it now, I feel that the character is not much different from the protagonist of the novel ten years ago, which is featureless and flat. In addition, the setting of the heroine Silly Baitian is relatively old-fashioned, and the plot depth of the supporting characters could be a little higher. I looked at the routines described in the book and "Can you make egg fried rice?" "The old routines are exactly the same. Authors should be vigilant. It may be helpful to read other authors' books to absorb some nutrients. The road to creation is long, and readers and authors are moving forward together. by. A reader

The connection is not good enough, it feels unnatural, and some jumps are like dropped frames, making it difficult to react Just give me some sugar at the beginning of this book, this is the best development. . . I'm a little afraid that the author will get tired of writing I didn't have a very good impression of this book at the beginning, but the dozens of chapters that follow are actually pretty good. Come on, I'll leave a vote for you.

The setting is really good, and the routine is always really old. For example, if you have an intersection with a goddess, there must be someone who is yin and yang. In reality, how can anyone be so stupid? Also, people around you must think that the male protagonist is cheating, and then pretend to be a slap in the face, which is shocking... I can only say that the author works hard💪

This book is the author's self-advocacy book. 1. In reality, passers-by have nothing to do with themselves, but in this book, every passer-by uses it to praise the protagonist. 2. Crazy descriptions of women's bodies (please wait until you get married to write this kind of thing, kiddos. Stop thinking about women and find a girlfriend. We didn't come here to read pornographic books, but to watch the plot) 3. It was written about a card game. I thought it was a witty novel using cards like Lu Shi, but how did the protagonist fight? Rush over, put a few cards, then the magic comes out and the monster is dead. Please, what's the difference between you and a magician? You just replace spells with cards. Skin novel

After reading the previous chapters, my personal opinion is that it is a poisonous point for the First Academy to share a dormitory with beautiful women and strong men. If there is such a school, the private lives of students will be very chaotic. Secondly, the routine of using delicious food to trick beautiful women to please the boss is a routine I read in novels seven or eight years ago. It is too cliche and too poisonous.

It's almost finished. There's nothing major wrong with it overall. It's good. Points were deducted because of the various beautiful female supporting characters and various special effects. The protagonist is very strong, and the world is set with normal people, monsters, and cult organizations [similar]. You can still take a look.

The author's setting is very good, but the writing is poor in comparison. I hope the author will take advantage of the new book issue to read a few articles (at least with fewer typos). Every author is a good reader. By the way, let me mention a combination plan: [[Expansion]+[Solidization]+[100% Psychic]+[Wave/Breathe]+[?? ?]=[Dharma, Heaven and Earth]](laughing and crying😂️) Come on, author (ง •̀_•́)ง! ! !

I think it is necessary to open a comment forum. If you want to criticize or criticize, please come here. If there are no useful comments elsewhere, I will delete them all. One more thing to add, I have hundreds of chapters saved. It is difficult to change the general direction. I will deal with the small details regularly. Thank you for reminding me before.                                                                                         ! ! I have hundreds of chapters saved! ! ! I have hundreds of chapters saved! ! !                                                                              So readers don't have to worry about me, the eunuch. I don't think the eunuch can even cut it. There are more than 120 chapters in total, and it will take a full two months to publish. If you like it, hurry up and watch it!

A good setting follows an old routine. I have ideas but can't write them down.

This introduction... Has persuaded me to quit at least three times. Every time I saw this introduction, I didn't read it**.

The author's emotional drama is not very good, and I wanted to skip it. If I continue writing it like this, I might dissuade a lot of people.

There was a previous book called "The Power of Cards" that had a very similar opening setting to this book. Unfortunately, that book was too eunuch. I hope the author wouldn't be so quick to get into it.

It's so cliche that I can't stand it anymore. What a pity it's such a creative idea!

I seem to have seen this setting at the beginning somewhere.

Chapter 16, wow, I was really disgusted and ran away

It is recommended that the previous embarrassing remarks be simplified. It is enough to say them once in one chapter.