I'm Going to Take a Step Forward

So far, the author's conception and outline feel a bit problematic. The main line is not clear enough, the sense of substitution is not strong enough, and the daily writing lacks interest, but the writing is still good. It is recommended that the author first sort out what the protagonist can gain in the sect for three hundred years, what is his mentality, what changes will occur in the modern social structure when the planes merge, and whether this change is reasonable.

Let's list some things 1. In my opinion, the protagonist's advantage of being three hundred years ahead of his time can be said to have been mostly suppressed by the author. In other words, so many unnecessary links have been written. (For example, going to the gym. Is it necessary for a monk who has been practicing for 300 years to go to the gym?). In my opinion, all day long, the protagonist will practice a little bit whenever he thinks of it, and then start wandering around. At first, I thought the protagonist would sell the talisman and then stay up and develop. Then, he inexplicably chose to join the logistics team? ! ? ! Okay, I went there, but I still didn't see the protagonist practicing hard. Do we really have to wait for others to slowly figure out the basics before the protagonist can get serious? It feels like a forced plot. A former outer sect disciple, given such a great opportunity, did not think about getting stronger first and providing a guarantee for himself and his family, but went out for a run. He felt not at all like a person who had practiced for three hundred years, but more like a person who had not yet determined his character after receiving the inheritance. 2. Conflict, the conflict in the Ran family is still barely acceptable, but I hope not to impose any competitions, bets, etc. 😥 3. The protagonist is still in the developmental stage, which means that the protagonist sometimes does not do anything serious, that is, he is really making up his words. 4. After looking around, I didn't see where the current protagonist's ability level is, nor did I mention what the protagonist is capable of in the currently displayed fields, and what standards he can reach. The earth in the book does not yet have a complete system, but readers need to know when you introduce relevant things, instead of saying, oh, the protagonist opened another spiritual cave, and then, no more, yes, I don't understand anything, and I am confused. These are what I want to say. If the author has other reasons for writing this, just pretend I didn't say it. 😐

The subject matter is good, the plot is good, and the writing is smooth.

Are pig's feet a joke sent by God? ? I have earned tens of millions of my own money! ! I didn't even give up on the martial arts lessons just for the ten thousand one-day period.

In fact, if you want to write about the vicissitudes of life and the taste of decay, the best starting point is Hua Hua Mao, the one who was born in 1979. There is corruption in the cracks in the words, and it is too easy to see through the world of mortals when reading his books.

4 Recommendation votes for Jiao Yang every day because my name is Jiao Yang