The Dark-Faced Brash Immortal

I tried my best, but even after changing it three times, 388 still crashed. There is nothing I can do 😭

To be honest, when I saw that I was deceived by my dearest people and was left penniless, except for having a slightly better doghouse, wasn't this what I was talking about?

The writing is okay, the plot is quite smooth, but the popularity is not very high. I can let this book be seen by more readers, Wowei: yaayaa335

The writing is vicious and awkward, and the scene changes are extremely abrupt. The process of rescuing someone was delayed for three chapters before being told, which completely disrupted the flow of reading.

It feels a bit like keeping a running account, Yazi who doesn't have a strong story.

The first few chapters are too confusing to read. They are confusing and confusing. It gets much better later on, but some descriptions are too much. Please work on the author and practice your writing more.

I came from a writer's academy. Well, what should I say? I once wrote a novel that was completely based on the ideas in my head, and it failed miserably. Now, I can sign a contract with just 8,000 words. Also opened a few vests. I have only read the first three chapters of the book, and I feel that there is no problem for the author. But for the Xianxia section, it may not be suitable. It is best to read through the first three chapters of all new books in the top ten lists in the section you want to write. I will just say one thing and you can think about it yourself. Why do you write novels? If you just want to build your own world, feel free to do whatever you want. If you have a little bit of utilitarian thoughts, such as money, I suggest you follow the crowd, although it will be uncomfortable. The starting point is no longer the starting point of the past, and millions of books are no joke. I haven't been signed for a total of 500,000 words, all because of my own leverage. I feel that I am obviously good at writing, but I am not being discovered. Writing well is for yourself, but for the market, it may be worthless. How can articles with no market be accepted? Think about it carefully, what is your original intention? Don't be afraid of utilitarianism. Who writes a novel and never thinks about making money? That's it. Whether you persist or not depends entirely on yourself. Come on

The plot is good, the descriptions are pretty good, and the little pits I dug first are used. It's good, but there are still problems. Think more about the characters. It will be better if you think and describe from his perspective. Come on, it's good.ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ﾉ~

I always see you recommending books on Writer's Assistant. I come here to take a look. The creativity of the book is quite good. You should be better at publishing articles on this subject.

Brother, you have a problem with your language expression. It looks so awkward.