Invincible Heroes Queen's Blade

I have to say that the author's interaction between the protagonist and the heroine is the biggest failure of this book, but the game plot is also really exciting. Except for the weak realistic plot, this book can be called a masterpiece. Finally, I would like to make some suggestions. In addition to skills and techniques, you can definitely add various sword skills as a setting.

I've read about the first 20 chapters and let me know what I think. The first literary test and martial test took about 10 chapters, which is really too long. Then I got a bunch of initial talents and it looked okay. I thought I could enter the game right away and seize the advantage step by step. Unexpectedly, you actually created a campaign mode for me? Then it was not easy to survive. The militiamen entered the game and brought the boss to upgrade, and then what kind of real girlfriend... Then I went into the campaign and fought 5 with a group of minions from the third class. 6 Chapters. . . . Really, I feel like I have put the cart before the horse and my patience has been completely worn out.

At that time, I was still in junior high school when I saw Mountain of Corpses and Sea of ​​Bones, and ten years passed in the blink of an eye...

This is a strong man who came out of a thousand-year-old tomb.

There is a word called being greedy for more and seeking perfection, wanting everything, wanting to write about everything, and in the end, I don't know what I will end up writing. The author made such a mistake. You have written the main game plot in the introduction. How many words are there now? Where has the game plot progressed? There is no so-called main vein or main branch at all. The whole book looks like a water-filled balloon. It looks big, but it is actually full of water! The author's writing, plot setting and other aspects are pretty good, but he failed to grasp the priorities and wrote nonsense. To be honest, the most taboo thing about a game like this with a grand world view and a strong main line is that the plot is slow to advance, and the author just doesn't advance it. The various branches are written to perfection! Is it necessary to spend so much space to pave the way for the strength of pig's feet? Don't you find it cumbersome and cumbersome to have two modes? ? Can you not write about Mad Dragon *** or something? Refining the main line and highlighting a sense of story will provide readers with continuity and a sense of satisfaction. What are you writing now? There are also many chapters that are just watering down, which made me really want to vomit. Summary: Now the number of words can be reduced to a quarter. If the main line is further advanced, it will be a small seedling of high quality!

My patience is running out. There are more than 500 chapters and I haven't even reached the climax yet. The Tomb Sect is really scary.

When I saw Mountain of Corpses and Sea of ​​Bones, I felt very sorry for TJ. After all, the idea was very good and the author's writing was good, but the circle was too small and it was too difficult to make ends meet just by doing this.

I hope the author will be less self-indulgent and more serious about the plot. Now is no longer the [era of pioneering web novels] that used to choose a little gangster as the protagonist and then add some boring moaning plots such as how lucky today is, how unlucky tomorrow will be. If the author could delete all the protagonist's self-proclaimed remarks and unnecessary moaning in this book, the author's writing style would at least be perfect. But the author seems to be getting more and more self-satisfied, addicted to telling a story about a life experience that he likes as an author, and it is also in the form of prose. . . Unfortunately, readers now, including me, an old bookworm, only like to read exciting stories about the protagonist upgrading and becoming stronger, and passionate plots. If the author continues to write, I met a ** today, and I felt very frustrated, but in the end I let him go generously. To be a human being, you must be generous, to be a human being, you must keep a thin line, and to be a human being, you must keep XX chattering. This is the result of this book. Finally, to summarize: Please write thrilling or refreshing or heart-warming stories. Don't write whole chapters of prose to express your feelings and teach us how to behave in a preaching way. We are here to read novels, not essays. Of course, the author doesn't care about the grades, he just writes to feel happy, and just pretends that I didn't say anything. But be prepared to make some extra money. . . Please remember that the current web writing industry is in the service industry, not the education industry.

There are more than 100 chapters of Invincible Heroes, Big Brother. You are just like this beginning, it is too slow to start. Why do I like watching Invincible Heroes? Apart from the emotion, there is also the battle. To be honest, I have only read roughly what you wrote before. I feel like I can read it or not. I will wait for you to finish the battle and decide whether I want to read your book.

After reading the free part, I feel that the writing is a mess. Most of the space is about ancient online game routines such as doing business. Changing the name has nothing to do with Heroes will not affect it. The real part is still poisonous, especially the first few appearances of the heroine. , The online game is also divided into two parts, and the sense of separation is extremely serious. It feels like the author writes whatever he thinks of, and his writing power cannot be controlled. After reading it, it feels like a city, a routine online game, and a seam monster in three books that travel through other worlds. It is uncomfortable. I just want to watch Invincible Heroes.

I came here because of the name Queen's Blade, but after reading a few chapters, it doesn't matter at all.

It was so unexpected that the heroine came out. There was no emotional foreshadowing before. She just appeared out of nowhere. If she really had feelings for her, she wouldn't have traveled back a month because she only remembered it after a phone call. It was all fake.

After reading more than 50 chapters, I couldn't stand it anymore. There is a reason why this book is not popular. The content is slow, the plot is bland, the emotional scenes are awkward, and there are often long paragraphs of useless explanations. The title of the book is "Invincible Heroes", but in fact it is just a sheep's clothing.

I kind of know why this game is so tepid. There are too many boring nonsense. The author completely treated it as an explanatory text. I had to read it patiently at first. But when I finished the copy of Wolf's Lair, I couldn't stand the explanations anymore. What I want to read is the plot of the game, not the author's spoilers.

Eunuch King, eunuch again, a mountain of corpses and a sea of ​​blood.

Brother, I am also an invincible hero, and I am at the same time as you. People have begun to set up a base camp, and you are still here with a stick and a hammer! ! !

The selection of the trial at the beginning is a bit unreasonable. Since Pig's Feet discovered that breaking through attribute 20 will reward talents, he actually didn't spend 3,000 points to try to break through 30. If the talent was to be rewarded, wouldn't it be much more cost-effective than changing the age? It feels like the author subconsciously set limits on Pig's Feet.

What you're writing about is a game, don't write so much about things other than games, okay?

I suggest the author cut off the realistic part, as the writing is brainless and embarrassing. We are here to watch Invincible Heroes, not to watch the protagonist get rich in real life.

Buying dog meat with sheep's head, I saw Chapter 300 with no territory, no troops, and no heroes. To be honest, this is called Might and Magic, not Invincible Heroes. I always insert some realistic things into it. Abandoned

It's a pity that Mountain of Corpses and Sea of ​​Bones, the genre of Invincible Heroes has been abandoned, and the author of the online game Judgment is still there

Why do you still recommend eunuch books? Start by being a human being.