Strange Young Man

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Historical writing requires a strong foundation. The narrative language must be literary without revealing any flaws, or it can be told in vernacular. An approachable story-telling will be more pleasing to the eye. It can also be more conversational and the narration is smoother.

Thanks for your great attention! I wish you will become a god soon! ——Yi Yanliu

I didn't read the first chapter, 1. The title of the book is not good, I can't see what the book is about, 2. The introduction, I can't understand, These two points are very important, but they are wasted. It's strange that no one can read it, because it can't attract people to click in. 3. There is a problem with the paragraphing, and it is very tiring to read, which leads to the dismissal 4. The language is cumbersome, not concise enough, and unnecessary Don't use words, which will increase reading difficulties and cannot express the meaning as quickly as possible. 5. The opening is quite satisfactory and not very attractive. It is recommended to polish the opening. The language is a bit straight. Don't be offended. I found this book by luck. I clicked in and took a look. I just say this because I don't want the author to follow the path I have walked, because it is really tiring. It would be nice if I have someone to give me some advice.

There are many people who write novels that are about history but also include martial arts, but most of them end up in the palace. Why? I personally feel that technology and martial arts are in conflict with each other. Just like the protagonist has worked so hard to create a repeating crossbow, and your enemy has an invulnerable Thirteen Taibo who practices a golden bell shield. What else can you write, other than the protagonist pulling out a cannon from nowhere? Come and blast, or maybe you are invincible in Qinggong and martial arts. If you don't kill the opponent's emperor directly, you are still in the country. There is no need to fight with you in the battle. The cavalry can't catch up, the infantry can't beat, and the archers can't shoot through. No matter how many people come, they are cannon fodder. Fighting = one-on-one. Martial arts are too mysterious. They are invulnerable to water and fire, and are invulnerable to all kinds of poisons through martial arts. Why do we need science and technology? All the people can practice martial arts. If there is light kung fu, there is no city that cannot be conquered. It's a shame. So history belongs to history and martial arts belongs to martial arts. It's like the originator of time-travel novels, "Xun Qin Ji". People go back in time and bring technology and knowledge back to the ancient times to make China stronger and richer in the future. This is basically the ending of the book. These are just my small opinions. If you like it, forget it. If you don't like it, just treat it as someone farted and ignore it. Of course, it's not that you can't co-write, but you have to have a certain degree. I hope the author can write a complete story.

I'm not a great master, but from a reader's perspective, first of all, this subject matter suffers a bit. There are generally two types of writing methods for fictional histories, one is the layout and plotting style of Qing Yu Nian, and the other is the humorous type like The Best Servant. But both of these are quite difficult to write, unless you really find the right direction and can do it with ease. Then again, this book can only be regarded as average in the eyes of old bookworms, but it is still a bit confusing for new readers. My writing control is pretty good, I think it will get better if I write more. The last thing I want to say in particular is that I must keep writing. The reason why I say this is because I feel that I can't continue writing, but I also feel that after writing a book, I will definitely give myself a way to grow.

Um, when did you change your name?

🤭🤭✊✊✊✊ Come on, Comrade Zou

The author is very diligent and signed the contract in less than a month; however, it seems from the comments that the author really needs to work hard to improve the story structure and writing style to make the work productive and high-quality! Collect it for now and appreciate it carefully later! Liu Qianyuan

The writing is pretty good, but the introduction is a bit off. As for historical literature, if I am serious, I like Yanjiu in July. If I am cheerful, I can learn from the Prodigal Son of the Ming Dynasty. At the same time, the relatively niche name you chose in this dynasty is not attractive. This is a disadvantage. Thank you for your attention. Come over and recommend it to me right away.

I am here to shamelessly recommend "Twin Demons: The Second Soul"