I Have a Virtual Universe

An online novel should not be written by you (the author) however you want. This book must be read by readers after all (if it is for love, I didn't say it). If a reader says there is something wrong with this book, it can be said that he has picky tastes, but what about everyone who has read it? Or do most readers who are willing to type those few words say so? It is a good thing that the author has a complete outline and complete plan, but he should also listen to the readers' opinions. For example, regarding the setting of Miao Yunxi, I don't think there is a problem. The forest is big and there are all kinds of birds. It's impossible for the protagonist to be the only one with such perverted and over-the-top talents. But I think you, the author, should add the ability to deal with this kind of situation. You can't even notice three F+ and advance to E- right under your nose? Is it a jump in life level after all? And there is also the previous causal line detection, which has been detected by people using talent and cannot be found? What about the intuition that strong people generally possess? Ordinary women have a sixth sense, but not even D-class bosses? Also because when readers read novels (such as me), they will subconsciously become involved with the protagonist, which is also called enchantment. It is often at this time that a plot that is not designed well will cause the whole person to feel uncomfortable😖. For example, I don't care at all whether the protagonist in the novel is strong or not, or whether there is a female protagonist, but I like some novels that are well-designed and the protagonist is cautious but not excessive. In that kind of novel, the author will strengthen the protagonist in all aspects before the protagonist takes risks, bring all the equipment, medicines, and a lot of various auxiliary props. He has thought of almost everything possible before going to fight. In this way, readers will praise the author for being careful when the protagonist encounters danger. However, I hate supporting characters plotting against the protagonist, because I read from the perspective of the protagonist instead of God mode, so just like me in reality, I hate others plotting against me (╯' - ')╯ ┻━┻ It will be the same even if I (the protagonist) are invincible. Of course, if the protagonist is not worried about being plotted, I will not make a long comment, just like being plotted by Gorol in the virtual universe, I think it is okay. It is useless to be unable to detect the enemy's tricks, especially when the protagonist has relatives and friends. The reason why Miao Yunxi is disliked by readers is simple: she is the mastermind behind the scenes. The protagonist should have a more advanced perspective, but she is obviously very powerful but is being plotted by others. What does it mean for a character to plot, but he is obviously very powerful but cannot find the enemy behind the scenes? {"NickName":"Book Friends 20180523172636454","UserI d":316854444} Take a look, don't delete it! I won't post a long review if it's not a good book. It's not easy to write words 😐😐😐

This book has a lot of loopholes. The protagonist doesn't know how to use his own abilities, and occasionally his IQ is overdue. There is a female villain who is quite annoying. Not to mention how high his IQ is, at least he has to be at the level of a normal person. The first is energy conversion. According to the author's explanation of how this energy is converted, I think eating soil and drinking water is much more cost-effective than this. I spent tens of thousands of yuan in the early stage to eat dry batteries and drink diesel. I just threw the protagonist into the river. There was not enough oxygen, and he went to the river again. To replenish energy, I thought, level up in one day, take it easy, and use that carbon element transformation, I thought, if you just open Baidu, you will know what it can transform, but in the end you are too lazy to even open Baidu, this is a very normal operation, ordinary people would not think of it, there are some more common carbon element transformations, the protagonist actually only knows diamonds, and the setting is that the protagonist is also a top student, such a rubbish? And he has a good word for returning water. The sea, you are all water, it really doesn't work. You can refer to the readers' opinions. Even if you don't know what the carbon element is, there are quite a few in the comment area, but the author is too lazy to use it. If it doesn't work, he just makes it up. Anyway, he doesn't want to use the comment area. Even if he relies on it, he has to rely on it. He just doesn't understand. What kind of operation is this? It's very confusing, the subject matter is quite attractive, and the imagination is pretty good. But with more than 500 chapters, why don't all readers appreciate it? It's not because the author is bad at writing. Some people in the comment area even said that the author has a primary school diploma. How can he write like this? Isn't this book relatively bad? He was dropped from the fifth list.

Upgrading and unlocking the planet is interesting, but the author forcibly lowers the intelligence There are a few things that feel particularly awkward and can't be tolerated: First, the information panel of the pig's feet allows you to see other people's status information. How come you can't find out that the girl next to you is lurking behind the scenes? You can even see the skills of the heroine but you can't see other people's? Then the setting of the planet is not to provide upgrade experience for pig's feet? Even if it comes with some technology and the like and the level is high, you can come back or just grab it directly (the pig's trotters have hacked a group of aliens to death). I can't think of anything that can control the basically invincible and resurrected pig's trotters. The last point is that the overworld has just emerged with super powers. Or create a villain who will be troublesome in the later stage and forcefully increase the difficulty? The summary is that the author forcibly lowers his wits, and the water plot is interesting. It is interesting to have a small universe setting, but I can't stand it anymore. The sea is all water

After reading over a hundred chapters, I just can't stand it anymore! The characters are too funny and there are too many bugs. The main character is like a fool. There is also the energy gained by eating food in the original star. Why not show the food and eat it? Wouldn't it waste a lot of resources? I have to say that the protagonist's cooking skills are not delicious every time, so he can't be too angry.

Water! Write down the two planet missions every time! Too watery, slip away

It's okay, you can watch it without thinking, but don't watch it if you have brains.

Many bugs should not exist in the first place. This type of work by the author has very strict requirements for "system". If it cannot be logically self-consistent, the book will be finished (you can't just set everything up with one sentence. After reading many comments, you will just say "setting problem", which shows that your overall structure and system have serious loopholes). To be honest, I haven't read a single word of this book. I prefer this type of book myself, but after reading the reviews, they kept talking about the character problem of "Miao Sha". One person said it might be a taste issue, and ten or hundreds of people said it, so we need to consider where the problem lies.                                                                          You have to rely on conspiracy and IQ to win the support of readers. 99% Of people have no such brains. If the author wants to know what it is like to rely on IQ to win the support of the audience, you can take a look at "Hunter" by Yoshihiro Togashi. Although this work is a comic work, its IQ is to completely crush 99% of ordinary people. So what does this type of work rely on to win? The simple reason is that when Akira Toriyama serialized "Dragon Ball" at the beginning, the results were not very good. The editor gave Akira Toriyama suggestions that "Dragon Ball" should develop in the direction of "gaining power". Sure enough, "Dragon Ball" has become an eternal classic. I personally also like "One Piece", so what attracts me? It is also very simple, just like what is said in "One Piece", the freest person, the vast sea, the character with faith, etc. Let's talk about "Hunter" alone. "Jin" once said that what he pursues and desires is the endless, invisible and intangible thing ahead - [Unknown]. Summarize three excellent comic works, which also have something in common when compared to novels: ①Broad "Worldview". "Dragon Ball" is due to collecting Dragon Balls: The World's Best Martial Arts Tournament, Big Devil Piccolo, Saiyans, Namek, etc.; "One Piece" has the East China Sea, the Grand Line, Sky Island, Fish-Man Island, New World, etc.; "Hunter" has Whale Island 🐳, Sky Arena, Friendship City, Greed Island, Ant Chapter NGL, World Tree Seedlings 🌱, the entire six continents, the huge dark continent, etc. ② Complete the "Power System" into a system. "Dragon Ball" takes "Qi" as the core system, including Wu Kong Technique, Turtle Style Qigong, Demon Sealing Wave, etc.; "One Piece" has physical skills, sword skills, devil fruit, three-color Haki, etc.; "Hunter" has the "Psychic Power" system, including strengthening system, transformation system, operation system, manifestation system, release system, and "trait system". ③The rigor of the system, as well as the upper limit, restrictions, conditions, etc. Of the system. AboutThe rigor and limitations of the power system:       ●For example, "One Piece" Devil Fruits are divided into natural, superhuman and animal types, and one person can only have one type of Devil Fruit power (except for the special case of Blackbeard);  ◆For example, among the three colors of domineering, the armed color and the knowledge color are the potentials that everyone has. The overlord color only has the awakening potential of "one person among millions of people. Only the armed color can come into contact with natural entities; ★The Overlord color can clear troops at low levels, and can cause damage to real things at high levels; the Hearing color can sense the enemy's movements at low levels, and can "shortly foresee the future" at high levels, and some people can even "read minds"; the Armed color can touch natural entities with a power bonus at low levels, and can be used to resist natural big moves like energy at intermediate levels. About Power limit: ■For example, the upper limit of power in "Dragon Ball"🐉, the lower one can improve physical fitness, strength, speed, etc., The higher one can enlarge the move like "Turtle Climbing Qigong", and the intermediate one can destroy an island (not to mention Kame Sennin hitting the moon), a mountain [●This is the highest limit of the "first level" in the "earth plane";●and then increase it The "second level" is the "multi-planetary plane in space" outside the earth. Vegeta estimates that he can destroy "a continent" as the highest limit; ●And the "third level" of the "cosmic galaxy plane", "Frieza" and the Saiyans can destroy a planet; ●at high levels, they can destroy galaxies The above is an example of the "power limit". In the "Earth" plane, it is only so big. You cannot destroy the continent or the planet. In the "Earth plane", it is like "Sauron": [Novice level: can cut people], [Colonel level: can "normally" cut iron], [Major General level: can use flying slashes "normally"], [Lieutenant General level: can " "Normal" to cut the ship in two], [Elite Lieutenant General Level: Can cut meteorites with "Ultimate Move"], [Alternate General Level: Can cut meteorites with "Regular"], [Admiral Level: Can open mountains, split seas, and split the sky with "Regular"], and "Pirate World Limit" can be [Destroy an Island with One Move (Sea King~Poseidon) level].  ④Reasonable division of forces "One Piece" example: ★Lower-level forces (mainly individuals): Rookies with a bounty of less than 10 million (Pirates), newcomers with a bounty of 30 million (Pirates), veterans with a bounty of 5-80 million (Pirates), supernova forces with a bounty of 100 million (Pirates), etc. ★Mid-level forces (mainly individuals): The Eight Treasure Marines are attached to the kingdom or individuals. ★High-level forces (Silver Medal 🥈Contestants): Doflamingo, the Lone Ranger Hawkeye, the Giant Kingdom "Elbafu", the Zowu Fur Tribe, etc. ★Top-level forces (gold medal contestants): Legendary pirates, Yonkou class, combined "King Shichibukai" class. ★Overlord-level forces: Navy headquarters, revolutionary army headquarters, etc. ★Dominator-level forces: World Government. In general, the entire system should be simple and clear, with internal reasonableness and stability, and should not be too complicated for ordinary people to control. Characters, plot, timeline, story background, plane level, power limit, etc., All need to be planned in advance. An outline may take several months, half a year, or even several years, so it must be "logically consistent" . Okay, I'm much more verbose, and I've been writing for a long time! You really shouldn't write about this kind of subject on the fly. You need to have a reasonable outline and system. I also hope that the author can learn from the shortcomings and not make mistakes next time. ※ I heard from netizens that the outline of [Mortal Cultivation of Immortality] took Wangyu three years, so the author needs to be patient. I'm not talking too much.

The more I watch, the more depressing it becomes. It's a waste of time. Compared with Miao Ruoxi, the protagonist is mentally retarded.

Let's discuss Miao Yunxi's problem. Why do people think this character is unreasonable? It's because the author's character setting itself is incomplete. Let's take a look at Miao Yunxi's ability. She can manipulate others by dividing her thoughts, and she has a pyramid relationship, that is, A>B>C. Is this ability strong? It is very strong in itself, but why do you think the description of the ability in the book is too outrageous? Because the author strengthened the villain. How was it strengthened? We might as well compare her with the protagonist.        ，，，？ Very strong, a natural enemy of carbon-based life, an existence with no solution. But why don't we realize that the protagonist is outrageous? Because the protagonist is still restricted, he can only control a little bit of carbon. To control the carbon of the whole person, it needs to consume a lot of energy. The word energy is the key point. In other words, the protagonist still has to abide by the law of energy. Comparing Miao Yunxi, you can see the problem at a glance. Her setting itself is wrong. Not only can she manipulate, but the people she manipulates can practice and be stronger than herself, and they can also be manipulated. And there is no limit on the number of people who can be manipulated. The most important thing is that the people being manipulated are all loyal. This is too buggy. It does not abide by the law of energy at all. For her, is there any difference between F level and A level? No! Anyway, the person being manipulated cannot escape control. If you manipulate a genius and let him practice to A level, wouldn't there be a free A level die-hard thug? This kind of ability to manipulate people can be roughly divided into two types according to reasonable settings. One is similar to a vampire and can control many people, but is not die-hard and can be easily betrayed and cannot control the strong. The second is that it cannot manipulate too many people but is die-hard. Unless there is a big gap in strength and cannot be easily betrayed, this ability should be a normal ability.

Not to mention anything else, the main thing is the 6,000 daily updates, which I like very much. But don't overdo it with numbers. Recommended votes are given.

Who can tell me when Miao Yunxi will die? The author of this article has written such rubbish about the government's IQ. He is simply mentally retarded.

I feel that Wang Mingming and Miao Yunxi are poisonous. The protagonist can systematically introduce Director Ye when he meets Director Ye for the first time. Why don't you read the first two? Are you ignoring them on purpose? This kind of plot where the boss stays by the protagonist's side and beats the protagonist in the end is very poisonous.

Desperate to control an ambitious man who is good at thought control, the author also couldn't move when he saw a woman. If only he were a man, he wouldn't be so disgusting. Subscribed to this point, you disgust me. Compared with those bugs, seeing a woman unable to lift her legs is even more disgusting. Killing cannot solve all problems, but it can solve the people who created them

The author limited the protagonist's IQ and combat effectiveness. The protagonist's talent is to manipulate carbon atoms, so why does he have to blow the enemy's brains apart? You can manipulate carbon atoms at the atomic level, so breaking some nerves or blood vessels in your brain would be a hundred times easier than blowing up your entire brain? And that's just as deadly. Or maybe a little bit of carbon atoms would be used to clog the blood vessels, or just a few moves in the brain, and the person would die instantly. If you don't use that much effort, your brain will explode. Where is your brain, author?

There is a question on the first page: what does the minute hand and hour hand point to 10 at the same time! Point to me

Sitting in a world or a time when technology is super advanced, you actually have to be reduced to fighting monsters yourself? Just get any of their outdated energy formula nutritional potions and you can eat them until you die!

This kind of novel is always about the main character being someone else's but not others. In the end, the protagonist's strength is always behind others! I don't know how to write this!

After reading Chapter 160, I felt that this is how hard it is to deal with a nationwide cult organization? A regional director brings a "radar" to solve the case here? What if the cult leader is not in this city? There is no nationwide notification of such an incident, which makes the protagonist look like a fool and has no effect at all. What else does the protagonist need to do in reality? Just let Director Ye be the protagonist.

Damn, watching daily life in the real world gives me a headache. What about the protagonist's viewing skills, and the villain, the more I watch, the more uncomfortable I feel. I stopped watching 😡

You can eat everything, so there's no need to worry about food expenses! Eat mountains directly, eat soil, and drink sea water. You must know that sea water is rich in many kinds of minerals. It would be great if you drink up the sea water and add land to the earth.

I have this talent. I can eat dirt in place and eat through the earth.

Can you not write a heroine? I'm really speechless. Do you think it is necessary to have a heroine in science fiction novels? It is not necessary, and you can't write, and you still have to write. This is a bit of a plot. Your position is not an urban novel, why should you insist on writing a love line? Adding a heroine makes me feel a little uncomfortable. The main reason is that I really don't know how to write. It seems true. Falling in love is just like playing house with children. They are all adults, please be more mature!

I started to see that now, the contribution is already ranked 10th in the total list. I don't think it can be crowned as a god in one book, but I can also say that I can read it for entertainment. It is still the same as before. If you have a vote, give it to me and add some highlights.

I have always thought that eating is a bug. Energy can be obtained by eating nuclear reactors, so why not eat nuclear raw materials? Then why not drink water? You must know that the sun is a four-proton fusion reaction. Hydrogen is said to be the highest energy substance, but it is not as convenient as drinking water. In addition, iron has the lowest energy. Eating a stainless steel dinner plate has no energy.

It has been sealed for a long time, and I haven't read Chapter 570. I came here to read it. Two chapters, the poison caused death, and it is still very poisonous. The author also forced the explanation at the end of the chapter. Now I feel sick.

To be honest, there are quite a few bugs. At the beginning, it was said that high-level people can sense low-level superpowers. . The protagonist is D-level and even Xiaoluoluo E- can't detect it.

Chapter 116: There is a little person with a C on his forehead. The protagonist is still complacent and thinks it looks pretty. Isn't it awkward to talk about? Treat yourself as a commodity? Too embarrassing!

The setting is okay, barely enough. I can read it when I'm in a book shortage and don't have any brains.

Is the author scared by Miao Yunxi? It's been a long time since he wrote about a female protagonist. Now the whole protagonist is single player.

In fact, now that it's written like this, it's better to open a new book and start writing it directly from the moment this book enters the universe. Just don't write about the inside of the earth, and the results won't be so bad.