He Shenji

Pointing to his heart: "But it hurts so much here..." I'm sorry, I'm just 👩👩 at this moment! ! I feel so bad for the male protagonist!

I... I also want to drink He Tian and Bian An (eyes wandering)

The plot is very good, very immersive, and the writing is very real. Come on

Very immersive and well thought out, looking forward to updates 😂

If you have already collected "Heart to the Peak", please go back and collect it when you have time.

After reading Chapter 5, I would like to briefly share my thoughts. Please forgive me for any inappropriateness. 1. There are no big problems. The main plot is very clear. The combination of the loser's counterattack and the old man's routine is not new, but if the conflict and the part of pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger can be well written, it will be very marketable. 2. There are some minor problems. (1) The writing of the first chapter is too rough. The emotional changes of many characters are very sudden. Not only does the protagonist feel like he has been struck by lightning, but readers may also feel this way. If you don't know how to write it, the best way is to write it briefly, for example, 'On that day six years ago, XXXXXX happened, the protagonist learned about XXX, and then life became XXXX.' There are many similar treatment methods in the works of big guys, you can learn a little bit. (2) The wording is inappropriate and the meaning of the sentence is repeated. I said this in the article 3. It must be seen that the plot and story design are still intentional. If the details are taken care of, it should be a good traditional work. Come on

Come on, don't give up, work hard together.

Good luck on the new journey! With the companionship of the little fox Bianan, our He Shen will definitely be able to get through the trough of life!

Hahaha, a piece of soy beef caused trouble... How will the situation develop in the end? Brainstorm ideas!

Many people said that the first chapter I wrote was too good, so Ningyang revised the first chapter. Everyone is welcome to criticize and correct me!

It feels a lot like Dou Po. The plot is too rushed and it ends without any narration. I hope you can polish it up~ Come on

Come on＾0＾~ I'm here to test the poison.

I just took a look and found that the protagonist was so ignored because he was not the clan leader's biological son. The clan leader also spoke on behalf of the protagonist, but the protagonist's popularity seemed to be unexpectedly low? It feels like everyone has no brains to target If the talent is gone, forget about being targeted, why is there the intention to target the protagonist from the beginning? And it feels like the clan leader doesn't have any prestige at all.

Come on (*'▽'*)♪

So fresh, lick your lips and wait for the next chapter

I read eight or nine chapters. I think it is more meaningful for the author to put forward some opinions from a reader's perspective. In the fairy-xia genre, I feel that the more important point is how to divide the realms and the levels of each realm. This needs to be sorted out clearly so that readers can have an outline. There are also some magic weapons, uses and functions of elixirs that also need to be described clearly. In this way, readers will look forward to the protagonist's growth based on this information, and will look forward to when they will enter the next level every time they advance to a higher level. I think these things in the first few chapters are a bit vague. My own feelings, I hope the author will get better and better!