Arcadia

It would be nice if the length of each paragraph could be shortened. If each paragraph is very long, it will feel tiring 😁

Change the name, otherwise it will be easily 404

Coding is not easy 😭

The plot setting at the beginning is good, come on Enhance the sense of involvement of the characters as much as possible, accumulate routine descriptors of the characters' expressions and actions, and the creation will be smoother Slightly increase the description of the surrounding environment and details, and you will have a better reading experience

Conceive a big framework, and then polish the plot of each stage in detail. Don't update constantly. Persistence ✊ It may be painful at first, but it will get better gradually as you become more comfortable with writing.

Brother, please change the previous paragraphs. You will dissuade a lot of people as soon as you come in!

Already collected, we encourage each other and ask for a return visit!

I suggest you change the paragraphs. There are too many words in one paragraph. My personal opinion.

The writing is great. It has been collected. Welcome to visit again!