Pursuing the Dao Across the Heavens

The writing is quite good, and I would like to mention a few shortcomings that I personally think: 1. The pace is a bit slow and should be accelerated; 2. Since it is Zhutian Liu, the layout can be enlarged, Xiaoao is almost written to death; 3. Zhu Tianliu will definitely have a heroine, or a vase type, or a co-progress type, which is about it; 4. The most important point is the issue of realm. Realm is the place where Zhutian Liu is most likely to collapse. I hope the author can make a clear distinction in advance.

I used to like martial arts in junior high school, but later I couldn't stand martial arts novels anymore, because every time I read them, I kept thinking about a question: These people are obviously only enemies of ten or a hundred, and their force is not strong enough to break the rules. They don't do anything every day, they go around killing people and creating criminal cases. Where are the officials? And where do these people get their money from? Is this the agricultural era? Haiyue, who writes history and rewrites martial arts, writes about the sect from Xiaoao's background and from the perspective of writing about the country's military, political and economics. It is surprisingly to my liking, and martial arts suddenly becomes more interesting.

It's a very novel way of writing and worth a look. There are too many traditional ways of writing now, and the online literature world needs this kind of innovative spirit.

The author should switch to writing historical novels. I feel that fantasy is not suitable for you. You are either messing around or scheming all day long. You have such a golden finger, is it difficult to become invincible in the world? The essence of fantasy novels is very simple. Cruelty, no need for a heroine, killing Buddhas and Husbands, and unparalleled magical powers. These G-points are captured in a book that is not well written. There are so many things going on every day that it is not interesting at all. It is more fun to read while skipping. If your protagonist is decisive in killing everything, there is absolutely no need to skip reading, because every chapter is a classic!

What did you write? Is this heaven or history? Or is Li Bumu of the Huashan faction going to rebel? What embodies the protagonist's sense of existence is the conspiracy throughout the story. Although you stated in advance that you wanted to write about this, I really didn't expect you to write it in such detail... As a result, I still haven't discovered the meaning of the protagonist's existence! What I saw was the love, hate, and resentment of Shaolin, Wudang, Huashan, and the imperial court. The characters in it were like a fleeting glance, not profound, even the protagonist was dispensable, and the idle colleague was worried about trivial matters every day... Five words to describe it: wearing a loneliness.

Volume 2 is so boring. 1. Only qualified opponents can show normal stories. What is the pride of college students playing in kindergarten? The second time traveler was too mentally retarded and the whole story suddenly became uninteresting. Dramatic conflict is an important prerequisite for a wonderful story. Weakening opponents and teammates is weakening conflicts. The protagonist's cheating requires weakening the opponent, so how failed is this protagonist? 2. The pattern cannot keep up. Although the general environment has been given, human nature is changing, but the result is still wait and see, and the pattern suddenly becomes petty. In reality, since there is no protagonist halo and there is only one chance, there is no problem in reality. But as for the protagonist of the story, do you like Oda Nobunaga, the demon king of the Sixth Heaven who died in the Honnoji Incident, or Tokugawa Ieyasu, the green-haired old turtle who took over the world?

Why not historical? I quite like your writing of history

The Xiaoao chapter at the beginning is still very good, but then it slowly declines, especially the prehistoric chapter is completely watered down and has no intention.

Readers are welcome to leave valuable suggestions. The bigger the idea, the better. Haiyue will adopt it as needed😘

I read it, and many people have some opinions on the author's setting of similar cultivation levels. In fact, in my opinion, this is the difference between classical martial arts and online martial arts. Classical martial arts is about the love between children; about grievances and resentments; about the hatred of country and family; about who you meet in the vast rivers and lakes; about who passes you by in the vast world of martial arts. They don't pay much attention to combat power, which leads to many bugs, such as two people whose descriptions of strength and skills are similar. One of them was instantly killed by the protagonist on the front foot, and he fought with another one not long after. Not to mention that the fight was inseparable, and it was also very anxious for a while. I think this is because the main purpose of martial arts at that time was to express the feelings I explained above, and also because the system was in its infancy at that time and no attention was paid to its improvement. Modern online martial arts is different. It pays more attention to many details (many of them are fan fiction). The protagonist just killed a person in an instant. He was a senior with some fame. Why did the protagonist kill him in an instant? Better than him? I don't know? What should I do if I don't see it or understand it? So a lot of foreshadowing needs to be done. How many people are willing to look at the background foreshadowing of previous classical martial arts? (How to describe modern background foreshadowing, I can't remember it at the moment, so I can't give an example. Maybe I won't be able to remember it for a long time, otherwise I would write a book 😭). Anyway, I can't stand most of the "front-end" foreshadowing in the past, and the same goes for some supporting characters. Now I just go to the next level. As long as the setting is slightly more reasonable, I can completely save a lot of foreshadowing. For the author, it may be a thought that the hairline has receded, but it is impossible not to write, and what the readers see is that they think it is a low-level number. Also, modern martial arts, to put it bluntly, depends more on the protagonist's outfit, and the combat power system cannot be ignored as before. These are all my personal opinions😜