Zhenjun Avenue

Your writing is too loose. I originally wanted to read it, but after reading dozens of chapters, I really can't stand it anymore.

The writing is too piecemeal, every key point is included.

What is the use of the protagonist? He was defeated and fled, but he didn't hide his name. Telling his real name was too risky for his life. I don't know what the so-called meddling in other people's family affairs is, just because the protagonist has a big face? Without seeing any main line, the book collapsed and slipped away!

Speaking of luck novels, the author can consider Jing Keshou's Yi Ding, which I personally think is okay, and The Great Way of God, which has good content, and the human and immortal aspects of luck are also okay. Because the main god Dao likes to use China as a chicken, killing the chicken to scare the monkeys and so on. First he was asked to type and revise the content, then he was asked to force the ending, and finally the book was sealed directly. Not many people have this ability. . Master Gu seems to just modify the content and then seal the book. The starting point is violent and lustful and likes to show off too much. You can look at the top 100 and analyze it. What do readers like to read? It is recommended to open a new author account. The results of three books of this account are not satisfactory, and it will be difficult to open another one.

The plot collapsed at the beginning of Chapter 8 and I didn't understand what was going on.

😵😵😵 After reading more than twenty chapters, I still don't know what the protagonist is doing! After all, I was an expert in spirituality in my previous life. To transform my cultivation in this world, I didn't seek out the true method or modify the method in my previous life. As a result, I kept wandering leisurely in the mortal world without getting any benefits. 😅😅😅 Doing things that have nothing to do with your goals is also a weird thing.

The naming of counties in ancient times was too hasty and confusing. I would like to share the map of counties and counties in the Han Dynasty. I hope it will be useful

The main line is unclear, the purpose is unclear, the purpose of cultivation is unclear, and chaos

The writing is sparse, writing here and there, then suddenly the scene changes, and there is no main line.

The power system is unclear, the main line is unclear, and it is chaos.

What the hell, you didn't want to join the army at first, but you insisted on joining the army, and then it was a matter of family affairs in the cottage. When you see there is a problem, shouldn't you make it clear and get out? Others don't believe you, so leaving as soon as possible is the right way. This protagonist is too indecisive, how can he cultivate the way?

After reading forty chapters, the protagonist appears in less than five chapters. . . .

If the protagonist of the Qi Lun Xiang Huo Liu novel does not have the overall structure and qualities to achieve great things, you will not be able to read it at all.

It's too slow to warm up and you can't see the main character's strength.

This protagonist is completely useless and has no sense of existence. It's so uncomfortable.

This description of the war drags on too long.

I just finished reading The General Trend of the World, and I am really speechless for the author. I really like the subject matter, luck and plug-in time travel, but the author's writing is too scattered, and it doesn't matter if you join the army. He leads the army to retreat, and can't get anyone to join him. He runs away alone, with an official in the camp, and four to five hundred people around him. What can such a person do if he just thinks about running away. It's really not possible to go ahead when you see benefits and run away when encountering difficulties. And the county captain has also been in the war for a long time. There are thousands of county soldiers, and four or five hundred of them can run away even if they are gathered in a hurry. After being an official for many years, he must have dozens of cronies. Needless to say, the thieves only have a few hundred elite soldiers.

Who is the protagonist? There are dialogues between supporting characters. Is the protagonist dead?

After reading the first two volumes, I feel that I haven't entered the Tao at all in practice. I fought a war and killed everyone. I wasted so much time and didn't grow at all. I don't know what the meaning of these two volumes is?

When I saw Chapter 23, I found that the writing was a bit strange. The author's writing style may not have much to say, but there are problems with the content. Look at how many times the protagonist has appeared in these 20 chapters. You can write foreshadowing and supporting roles, but can you make some mistakes? What is a protagonist? Why is it called the protagonist? Personally, I think the protagonist in your book should just be called a douchebag. Anyway, I didn't have the energy to read anymore after reading the beginning. I hope the author gets better and better as he writes more, but I don't have the patience to read anymore!

To be honest, if you pick any 30 chapters, most of them are about other people, and sometimes the protagonist doesn't even appear once in a few chapters! I don't understand why you wrote this protagonist

I seem to know the reason why there is no spark. I probably like the Golden Three Chapters or something like that. The plot is **** and the pig's feet are tortured into ghosts. . Difficult

You can take a look at the part about Lin Zhenjun's siege of cities and territories, and I feel like you can learn from it in the next book.

In fact, the author's writing style can still be read, but the author has many ideas but not enough writing power. The author wanted to write a plot with multiple lines of development, but the level of expression was not enough, and it made people feel that the plot was scattered here and there. If the author wants to write a book about multi-line development, it is recommended to write a physical book. Based on my experience in reading online articles in the past ten years, there are no more than 5 online articles that can write about multi-line development, but there are still many physical books.

The writing is okay, but I can't write the main character. Fast forward a few dozen frames.

The author's writing style shouldn't be like this. Unlike some books, this book's writing quality is not good enough to read it at first glance. But how the author conceived it, there is no reason to write dozens of chapters without the main character occupying a few chapters like Yi Ding. .

The front part is pretty good. There are very few novels about luck flow. Since the leader stopped writing, Yi Ding read it over and over again. I've also watched The Immortal Journey many times. The author. Do you want to write it down?