Ask Emei

After seeing the recommendation from Mistaken Path, I came here to read it. It's really good. But in recent chapters, the sword-learning and sword-fighting plots feel more and more like the old version of Shushan Swordsman Legend. On the contrary, I feel that the plot written before entering Emei is more interesting. The master calculates and arranges everything with his fingers, and the protagonist, the time-traveler, is like a puppet, following the steps step by step. It is difficult for readers to empathize with this kind of learning. In addition, the conflict in the novel is laid out in one stroke at the end, which is a complete failure in writing a novel! The above is purely a personal feeling, I hope the author Jun Yue writes better!

I hope that the protagonist of this book will always keep the appearance of an old man, and not become younger and more handsome with Shou Yuan, and not have a female protagonist. After wandering the world for half a century and living for more than 60 years without a heroine, what kind of heroine do you need? Um?

How to say it? The writing style is the same as the protagonist's temperament, calm and sophisticated. It is different from the modern style that is popular today. It has a writing style from the Republic of China period, but also adds modern elements. Very comfortable to read. Recommend

When Zhu Jiuyin appeared, I thought the book would collapse. What a pity.

Did you really write your sister to death? The ready-made water mansion turned my sister into a river god. Wasn't that Luo Xian also an ordinary person who became a god?

I have read more than a hundred pictures, and I would like to share my thoughts here! First, this book belongs to the Shushan stream, but it does not tell the story of Shushan. The protagonist has his own complete story that is different from "Shushan", and it is more pyrotechnic and closer to life. Second, the author's logic is quite strong. At least for now, there are no problems with the continuity and logic of the story. Third, a word to the author: Please have more words in each chapter!

This book, about entering cultivation in one's sixties, has new ideas, but after about ten chapters, it is so mindless that I can no longer read it. Can only exchange books

The story is really well written and the writing is really verbose.

Looking at the author's writing, one feels like the rebirth of Huanzhu Louzhu. The type of work matches the type of readers, which just adds a touch of color to the current starting point. I hope the author maintains his style and continues on?

I don't understand what it means, and the description of family affection is unclear. Like brotherhood. A bit nondescript. Even if you cultivate immortality, you won't be able to cultivate anything like a bird. After so many chapters, it's still a bunch of shit. Don't know what it is.

Here comes my brother🤓

Here comes my brother🤓

This article is similar to "The Good Father-in-Law of the Tang Dynasty", both of which have elderly people as the protagonists. However, although the plot of "The Good Father-in-law of the Tang Dynasty" is bland, there are many conflicts, and there is also a hint of love, which makes people continue watching. This article gives me the feeling that it is just about the protagonist's journey since Emei. I really can't arouse the interest to continue reading. I hope the author can design the framework well before writing. I also wish the author will write better and better in the future.

I feel that the writing style is very simple, with the atmosphere of a fairy rather than a spiritual leveling up. There are just some typos that affect reading.

Although there is a golden finger, the author still writes traditional fairy tales, and the writing style is relatively classical, similar to "The Legend of Shushan Swordsman" by Huanzhu Louzhu. Personally speaking, the author has profound knowledge and the content is close to life. I like to read fairy tales, which can be written in plain language or in this ancient style, but I refuse to read. Most of the fairy tales are relatively naive and adulterous at the beginning. Many so-called great gods are only superficial, and their works are just to cater to other people's inner desires, so I hate that kind of cool writing. In fact, the author's sense of immersion in this book is relatively strong. The novel comes from life and is higher than life. The principles are the same all over the world. If you don't have great perseverance in cultivating immortality, you will only turn into a handful of loess. Isn't this true for decades of life? I gave the author ten yuan as a reward. From then on, I worked hard to do what I wanted to do and no longer muddle along.

Here comes my brother🤓

Here comes my brother🤓

The content is rigorous, the human feelings are sophisticated, the writing is simple, and the ancient Chinese skills are profound. It is a rare good article. Will continue to pay attention

It's rare to find such a good-looking novel. Why isn't it updated? The plot is too slow and the updates cannot be slow.

Although Shushan is the originator of Xianxia novels, if online novels are imitated, they will die. Let's talk about why. First of all, Shushan was written in the Republic of China, and the articles were updated with newspapers, and the update speed was monthly. This is very important. Why do you say this? In the Republic of China, newspapers were consumed by wealthy literati, and readers at that time were very willing to buy newspapers. This prompted Shushan's writing style to favor literature. So now, web articles are updated on the website, what is the audience? Netizens, students, porn fans, etc., Prefer leisure and entertainment. What are the characteristics of this group of people? The first is relaxation, the second is entertainment, and the third is fun. So, Long Aotian, Mary Sue, harem novels, The Big Stallion, Xiaobai novels, online reading has been accumulated for almost more than ten years, and only then began to appear profound, that is, sophisticated, logical, beautiful, and story-telling. However, there is still a big gap between this and Shushan. In the original text of Shushan, there are poems, clouds, and such things abound. Secondly, there is the literary foundation. How difficult is it to write a full-length group portrait novel? Looking at the novels of the Ming and Qing Dynasties, how many full-length group portrait novels are there? There are only a handful of them. First of all, the four great masterpieces, Journey to the West mainly depicts the four masters and apprentices, with group portraits, but unlike Shushan, the Western number only has Water Margin, Dream of Red Mansions can be shortlisted, and Dream of Red Mansions is comparable. Why is this So, the full name of Shushan is Biography of the Heroes of Shushan. In order to highlight the heroes, the author also specially wrote a short biography of each hero, which is now called the extra chapters. The extra chapters are more than the main text. It can be said to be a novel without pig's feet and group portraits. Internet writing does not require literary skills, and even goes the opposite way, requiring it to be more understandable. The article can be written in an ancient style, but it cannot be adapted to the ancient style. This will make people uncomfortable. For example, in the clothing field, there are fake Hanfu and Hanfu. The difference is craftsmanship. The same is true for furniture. Antique furniture and antique furniture are also different. The writing is the same as what Kong Yiji wrote, except that you are wearing a long gown and drinking wine, and you are intoxicated by the way. But what do the people around you think? What Internet articles require is easy to understand, with a strong sense of inclusion, a pig's foot, and a main line. Think about it, the story has been told for thousands of years, East and West, tragedy and comedy, are there any routines? Like martial arts, whether it's ancient or modern, is it just summed up by the saying "sons and daughters in the world, grudges and hatreds"? Like romance, can it be summed up by Juliet? Why is it still thriving? Isn't it true that each generation has a sense of involvement? Who among the young people today will still feel that a great hero is excited for the country and the people? Nowadays, Internet articles all start with farming and then become promiscuous. Isn't this what young people are pursuing nowadays? Get ahead.

Here are some suggestions for the author... Although it is a Shushan type novel... It can be written in a single character biography mode... Some are like most of the novels nowadays... Written only from the perspective of the protagonist... Then you will die when you get hurt, and if you want to continue writing, you can reincarnate... This way you can write more easily and retain some favorite novels. Readers of Baiwen... After all, they look very similar... As for the main body, it is best not to deviate from the current framework... There should be something that should not be forced... And it should be told lightly, especially the protagonist is still an old man about 100 years old. Some things should be shown to be indifferent rather than spoken or written in the text. This is better. It doesn't require everything to be fun. After all, how many ups and downs can there be in a life? It's not like terrorists destroy, smash, loot, burn, kill, and plunder every day, right? There are more humanistic things, so that it can be different from the current white-knuckle writings and make people feel comfortable to read.

Asked about Emei, I finally want to go to Emei

I think this book is quite good. I came from the wrong path. The background of the protagonist is a bit new and interesting. This is often the case. The more you pursue something, the less you get it. If you don't want to pursue it, you get it instead. This is fate. The characters in it are also well drawn, and the division of realms is also quite good. I read it in one sitting. How should I put it, I have a bad feeling, it just feels too bland, or there is no sense of immersion. Of course, it depends on how the author wants to write it. If it doesn't want to be written from the perspective of the protagonist like ordinary online articles, I think it's good. However, if this kind of bland plot is too long, it won't be interesting to read. I think the plot needs to have ups and downs, and a certain amount of conflict and contradiction, so that I can keep following it. The author is probably a fan of Wrong Tao. I think the most exciting thing about Dao Zheng Zheng, especially the plot of Jiuzhou, is that it has a complete and grand main line. From the moment Da Yan opens the pulse, every plot of his plot is related to the human calamity, and the plot is introduced through the conflicts between the two mysterious and demon factions, the conflicts between various sects, the conflicts within the sects, etc., And highlights a theme of contention, making readers feel nervous, excited, and want to keep reading. This book feels that the author may not have a particularly complete idea of ​​the main plot. After all, he also said that he decided on Lu Xuan as the protagonist at the last minute. I hope to see a more exciting and diverse world of Xianxia. The methods are not only flying swords, but also formations, spells, strange beasts, etc. Similarly, I also want to have a certain understanding of the background of this world. How many sects are there? What camps are they divided into? What is the purpose of cultivating immortality? Etc. This way I can better introduce the protagonist. So I hope to show more content from the world of Xianxia, ​​rather than just wandering around in the mundane world. I also hope that the author will not rush to update. Good works will not come in time. Most of the updates a day are unfinished. I think the author also wants to write a good book, rather than simply relying on this to make a living. We old bookworms are also patient and will not give up because of slow updates. I think quality is more important than speed. I think as a new writer, this book is already well written. I also hope that the author can write better and better, continue to improve, and write better works😁😁

A good book, I should say very good. I have been reading for about ten years. I usually read books by old authors and popular books by great masters. I feel that this book is very interesting. I stayed up late until 10 in the morning to read it. I hope the author will update more. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

This is a new work with many shortcomings. I hope you will bear with me and thank you for your support!

Don't just write about strange people and strange things. There are great rivers and mountains along the way, so many strange mountains and rivers, and ancient and modern travel notes about various secret places and animals. Traveling and exploring are extremely interesting.

It's a very real book, whether it's family or love, it's described very well. But I think the best thing is to write about the essence of cultivating immortality. The essence of cultivating immortality is to seek immortality. No matter how sanctimonious it is, this purpose is essentially selfish. There will be many regrets and reluctance on this road, but in order to seek the great road, you must have the determination to let go of everything. This part of the book is very descriptive. On the other hand, the plot progress is indeed a bit slow. This does not mean that the writing is not good, but if there are no ups and downs in a book, it will often feel like a running account. I hope that the subsequent plots can be more compact.

Finally, I arrived at the foot of Mount Emei. It is estimated that there are 50 chapters at the bottom of the mountain, 50 chapters on the mountainside, 50 chapters at the top of the mountain, 50 chapters as a disciple, and 200 chapters later, Lu Xuan will reach the first level of Qi Refining.

The writing and narrative are very long-winded. If the author's target readers are novices who are not familiar with the world, your theme and plot will be as old as the street. If you say that you are writing for novices, then there is no need to explain the simple human world for a long time. It is really annoying to read! ! ! Chapter 27 XX, it's so long-winded. I don't even need so much nonsense when telling stories to my children. I feel like my IQ is being insulted at every glance.

I hope the author doesn't write about a female protagonist. Don't you think it's strange that a person who has lived for so many years likes women? What's more, the protagonist is a monk, and how tenacious his will is! ?