Phoenix Man with One Punch

I have read a lot of One Punch fanfics, and most of them are finished with 300,000 to 500,000 words, and only a few have broken this limit. Because it's really difficult to write a one-punch fanfic. As an invincible cool-style anime, the background details of One-Punch Man are completely inferior to those of Naruto, Bleach, One Piece, Battle of the Sky, etc. One-Punch Man's attraction is the "coolness", but if it were written into a novel, there wouldn't be much to expand on. After all, fans will either write protagonists, supporting characters, or villains, but. . . Protagonist: A hero driven by interest. . . Supporting characters: a group of rookies. . . Villain: So embarrassing~ (punches the street). . . (Author: It's too difficult for me!) So after this word count, it is foreseeable that the author will not update much (🔪). After all, writing the Phoenix Man line is more original than a fan novel. It is almost as difficult as writing a fantasy novel with a completely new format, and it also has to take into account the world view of One Punch. Since reading this book, I have thought that the author has entered the palace many times, but the author still appears suddenly many times. I think people like me who can continue to read this book have a great mentality 😡 Finally, I would like to send my sincere wishes: Come on, author (ง •̀_•́)ง Come on, reader (ง •̀_•́)ง, let us endure this book to the end 🤭

Author, could you please not let Fubuki and Tatsumaki be the heroines? If they were the heroines, it would look too dramatic 😥

Meow meow meow? Isn't this gone? ? Too much

I seem to have discovered the prototype of Tatsumaki, she is a Pokémon! 🤭

Rewriting Chapter 35. Sorry, letting yourself go is a bit powerful. I would like to express my special thanks to the reader "Like a Fish in Water". Although I don't know if you have deleted the book, but if you come back one day, I hope you can see this sentence, "You are right!" Because I rushed to catch up with 3 chapters in one day, but the author is a newbie, and there must be many deficiencies in the considerations, which may cause the plot to collapse!! I would also like to express my gratitude to all readers who have made suggestions here! This post will always be at the top and will not be deleted. If you make a mistake, you should admit it. Thank you! (Bow)

Saw it. There are some newbie issues in the work, obviously. First, the work is very unfriendly to non-original parties, and the basic settings are not explained, such as why there are weirdos and how the Heroes Association was established. Secondly, there is a problem with the character design of the work. Some characters appear without explaining their image. For example, Genos can only be described with three words: "reformed man", which could be described more. Then there can be more psychological descriptions of the heroes, because One Punch is originally a group portrait comic, and if the supporting characters are not well written, it will appear too disparate. Otherwise, even if you have read the original work, sometimes you forget, and some characters have to read the original image again, which is not only unfriendly to those who have not read the original work, but also those who have read the original work. Third, there are some problems with the plot design, and some of the original plot choices were not done well. For example, Genos was called away by Sweetie Mask for a talk, and there is no description in the work. This plot can highlight the characters of Genos and Sweetie Mask, as well as Saitama's attitude, and the attitude of the Hero Association. It is a bit regretful that there is no description. There are many similar scenes and plot choices that are not enough, which makes the work not so exciting. The integration of the original plot part with the original work has not been seen too much, so there is not much evaluation. Suggestion: The author should not lose the beauty of the original work just because he wants to add original plots, characters, and settings. The goal of a good fan work should be to highlight the spirit of the original plot and characters. My fan works also have them, and my fan works use side descriptions and add character plot settings to enrich the original work, or describe a spiritual core that is different from the original work, but is equally worth pondering. It is recommended that you slow down the pace, describe more of the original characters and plot, and slowly add original settings and the like. Because even hegemonic comics like One Punch and Titan, and universal comics like Naruto and Pirates, have not reached the point where everyone has read them. The novel must serve the original work and extend the original work, so the description of the original plot, characters, and settings is essential. Because the original work is the basis of a fan work, if the settings of the original work are not explained clearly, the fan work will appear inexplicable, and those who have not read the original work will not be able to understand it. Generally speaking, the writing style is a bit immature, and the plot and setting are not clearly explained. However, because there are few fans of One Punch, based on the original plot shown so far, the work is still watchable and has potential for the original party. What I want to say: Come on, author, Saitama, he can insist on doing one thing and keep doing it, and no matter how others look at him or scold him, he will not be moved. I hope you will not be shaken by negative comments from the outside world. With good suggestions, you can make changes according to your own ideas as appropriate. I think there is a reason why the editor of Qidian did not sign the contract. He did not want the work to become the ravings of a fantasy patient.

In general It has been updated to more than twenty chapters The rhythm is smooth and steady It has a bit of a daily feel Phoenix Man has steadily improved his strength The relationship with Saitama is very good It feels as bland as water Maybe it's because the emotional description is dull Looking at this chapter, the fighting is somewhat lacking (I'm usually the kind of person who jumps to watch fight scenes). The author can add more damage or effects caused by the moves. To supplement (water word count) For some people, the contact with Hell Fubuki is toxic, but I think it is also a good laugh point And the original character of the old shadow man will also expand the worldview The author is a newbie, and it is very, very good to be able to write like this I hope you can work harder ps: Is there any emotional drama (friendship, love, father and son, teacher, family...) After all, no book is complete without a blade. Book~ |ω) |ω) |ω) |ω) |ω) |ω) |ω) |ω) The author, please update

Why can people like Hungry Wolf be cleansed or still somewhat popular? Because of beauty☞charm. Plus his strength! In fact, in that world, although the strong ones have more or less opened the door to evolution, there are differences! For example, the so-called S-level comparison between Boros and Tatsumaki. In terms of the degree of activation, Boros is much stronger! The effect is that if they touch Boros, they will be killed instantly. Human beings actually don't have many strong people available!

Even if your writing is not the best, even if your grades are not very good, you are one of the two authors I admire the most after reading books for so many years. Along the way, I am waiting for updates every day. When I open qi. Com, I hope to see updates. But as time goes by, I slowly find that you update less and less, and the update intervals are getting longer and longer. I even thought you were a eunuch and deleted the book from the bookshelf. Later, I added it back by chance. According to my many years of reading experience, the performance of this book would have been far worse if it were written by another author. Updates have been intermittent since then. You must have thought about giving up many times, but you still persevered and spent several hours every day writing this book that will hit the streets. Isn't it good to spend a few hours to distribute leaflets in first- and second-tier cities for about 100 yuan? As a reader, I feel hard for you No matter whether you succeed or not, and what the score of this book is, I hope you have a happy life and good luck in 2020. 🌹

The teacher's name is Saitama, not Saitama

Phoenix Man has a new form in the One Punch Man remake, which has been recently updated and revised, and his level of wolf is not yet full 🤭.

So Saitama appeared, and he was powerful enough to defeat those so-called chess players! As long as they pop out of the dark corners!

It's been a few months and the investment has failed.

Everything else is pretty good, but wouldn't it be nice for the protagonist to be a happy salted fish? Why is it necessary to form a force? I still hate novels about the formation of a force. Because I have read too many novels. Before I finished reading, I saw the seed of something, which is for undocumented knights. From there, I can see that the protagonist has already had the idea of ​​forming a force.

I've read Chapter 55 and it's pretty good so far, I can give it four stars! It follows the main line, but does not get too entangled in the main line. It is mainly based on self-created plots, so it is worth encouraging. It is much better than those who can't write once they are separated from the main line and only rely on system flow. Anyway, depending on the author's settings, the protagonist's combat power is second only to Saitama. In this way, there will basically be no situation where the protagonist's combat power is too high, the world will be destroyed in the later period, and the combat power system will collapse. As for the emotional line, does the author have a wife or girlfriend? If you haven't been in love before, don't describe it too much! As a person born in the 1980s, I read a book two days ago. A forty-year-old man traveled through time and became a junior high school student. He would have feelings for a teenage child, eh😓! Looking at my eldest daughter, who is in the second grade of junior high school, I can't think of anything else, unless she is a lolicon! Ah, I am writing so much mainly because this book is currently good and worth reading. I will post a long review after I see the latest chapter (ಡωಡ)hiahiahia!

The power of the monster in One Punch mainly comes from obsession, right? If the protagonist becomes Phoenix Man, can he still have the original Phoenix Man's abilities? Can the salty fish idea at the beginning activate the ability to resurrect from the dead?

I feel like the front part is okay, but the chaotic forces in the back part and the lack of action of the protagonist make it feel like it's written like a historical novel.

After reading more than 30 chapters, it suddenly occurred to me that the male protagonist does not look like a normal person, right? Is it like in the comics with big wings on the back and a bird hood on the head? Still can't take it off. So how does the protagonist sleep? He probably can only sleep on his stomach. . . .

Did I make a mistake? I just ordered it all and it became the tenth one.

It's a pity. I originally planned to feed them all and order them all for slaughter, but it ended up being gone 😂😂😂😂

I have ordered them all. I have read more than 60 chapters. I feel that the book is good and to my taste. Come on, author.

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I think being undocumented is not as great as everyone thinks. He knew that Baldhead had solved the problem of Undersea King But he didn't stand up and speak for Baldhead and didn't tell the association What he still thought about was his reputation Some people said that Baldhead didn't care. Isn't it the reason why you made this choice that others don't care? It is his business not to care about others. The choice you make is yours.

There has been no update for five days. Does the author want to be a eunuch? No, I think this book is pretty good

Why did you die again? . . It's rare to see a good one-punch fanfic. .

Actually, I'm curious, can't the doll suit on Phoenix Man's head be turned off...

Ahhhhhh! Don't be a eunuch!

Who is the Phoenix Man? If you know me, send me a picture to check it out. ^3^🤭

If there is no bald devil, who are there that are god-level?

Does the author have any more updates? Is it a break or something?