My Fighter Is a Pocket-Dimension Treasure

There are high-tech fighter fusions and high-fantasy martial arts. As a result, a pair of sisters came out of nowhere, and the effect of persuading them to retreat was immediate. It's a pity that this idea is out of the question. . . . .

The concept is okay, but a bit verbose

I wrote a bunch of useless psychological descriptions. Is it appropriate for you to start with this? Also, the description of the twins is really not very likable, and there is also a forced logic that pretends to be a pig and eats the tiger. Finally, there is a Star Wars novel that is really not good.

This book has a good idea, but the biggest poisonous point is the twins S and B. The orphans can be kind or selfish, but how did the characters of S and B come about? They treat ignorance as cute from beginning to end! Farewell

It's baffling to see. What is the specific function of Goldfinger? There is no detailed explanation at all. I have said a lot before and later I learned that I have obtained a inheritance and an evolving fighter But what is your original Goldfinger's ability?

I think since you are devouring materials to upgrade, I think there is something wrong with your starting direction. Anyway, you are devouring and then molecularly reorganizing, so just buy scrapped parts. Why do you have to use new ones that can be used normally? You are so poor. Saving money to buy accessories by yourself feels like building a fighter jet. It's too low and doesn't have any gold-finger quality at all!

Brother, put it in your place, what do you think about two inexplicable women spending your money? It's so deadly! Do you know that you are a time traveler? Do you want to write about warmth? It's obviously a torture of pigs!

Just write down all the women in a few chapters and train them to become assistants like Jarvis, and it will be perfect...

The relationship between childhood sweethearts is not well written. If the author is not good at writing emotional dramas, you don't have to write them. Nowadays, books without female protagonists are still very popular. The author can delete the previous emotional scenes now, or reduce them a bit, otherwise it will be very discouraging. This is my feeling after reading the first 10 chapters.

This novel tells us a fact that a good subject may not necessarily lead to a good novel. The fusion of fighter planes and caves, the encounter between witchcraft and the interstellar. However, Que collided with two stumbling blocks, a creature called the licking dog, and the powerful water emperor who shook the world. It's great🙄