Harry Potter: the Forever Corridor

The plot is very scattered. It gave me a huge headache. And can the character names be unified? Your Volume 1 gave me the feeling that it depicts a very dark medieval period. Except for the heroine, everyone else has a pathological, dark and destructive tendency. My subjective impression of the male protagonist is that he is pathological, dark and even a bit self-destructive. I think the author wanted to write a dark novel.

After reading more than 20 chapters, how should I put it, the description of the protagonist looks a bit like the male protagonist in Japanese comics. However, there is no explanation of the male protagonist's past, and no introduction to the reasons for the formation of this character. It is impossible for readers to continue reading. This is not a question of kindness or kindness, but a question of whether there is brain. As long as the protagonist is a normal person, he would not behave like this.

I hope the author will drive less, at least not so obviously. On the one hand, the characters and plot of copper smelting make people feel sick and guilty while reading it. On the other hand, it feels like this book will go 404 at any time. . Other than that, the story is pretty well written.

I'll keep it in my collection first, hoping that I can write it until the time of the main storyline o_O Come on💪

Brother, your writing is too loose, and you like to do some in-depth digging. The method is a bit stiff. On the contrary, it weakens the story. . . Wouldn't it be easy for authors other than great masters to do this?

The plot concept is very good, but it's a pity that the pig's feet are a failure.

Ahem... That's right, I'm fine

The gentle and innocent little witch of sunshine

I was scared to death. I was still raising it, but when I took a closer look, it showed that Chapter 84 was unread. I clicked in and found out that it was a display error...

In fact, I quite like this kind of principled protagonist, but sometimes it is unbearable to forcibly subdue one's intelligence.

If you think there are any bad points, you can come here and complain, I will adjust according to the situation... After all, I am still a newbie and don't understand anything_(´ཀ`‖ ∠)__ Thank you all

Come on author, I will collect it first to respect you. . .

The author gives you some advice. This kind of time closed-loop novel is very difficult to grasp. If you are not careful, the circle will collapse and you will not be able to go back. To give a simple example, generally speaking, time travel is linear time, which means that everything you did in the past was done in the future, and your future is determined by the past. . And it seems that the protagonist has lost his memory later on, and still wants to change the world. If you do this, you will have a lot of holes to fill in at the end, and there must be no logical loopholes. Then it will be great fun to squeeze all the juice out of your brain and fill it up. Hehehehe, don't ask me how I know 😰

Is this a eunuch? . . .