Online Gaming: The Imaginary Number Puppet Master

I hate the setting of giving away a girl at the beginning, and it's a virgin. It's so disgusting to watch.

The author has a lot of ideas and wants to express the content of the game world that he likes. There are no problems with the plot and game content. The biggest problem is that your book does not have any cool points. Even the cool and pretentious points are skipped. This is a taboo in writing books. When you write like this, it is easy for people to lose the sense of involvement and feel that they are reading a running account. What you like only makes others feel embarrassed and does not move you at all. For example, the first 1-for-6, the first world announcement, and the operation of the Skeleton King's Cave. You did not write a description of the surprise or envy of the characters next to you. This will make people feel that you are writing your own story and have no intention of showing it to others.

What is the master-disciple relationship between the protagonist and Zhang Ju? We've only known him for less than a day. He's a bit poisonous. I hope Zhang Ju is really dead. If he is resurrected later, he will be really poisonous.

Let's put it this way, the structure is quite good and the layout is okay, but the most important thing to pay attention to is sentence fragmentation and typos. Nowadays, most novels use the Pinyin input method, so typos are inevitable. But it is wrong after all. There is a big problem with sentence segmentation, and it is obvious that I am not very good at it. However, if I cannot segment sentences well, it is just like today's people reading ancient prose. Some places seem to have a bad mood, and some places are completely incomprehensible to what is being said. Don't underestimate this sentence segmentation. Whether it is a comma, a pause, a question mark, an exclamation mark, an ellipsis, or a period, it all expresses content. Other things like writing, imagination, etc., Can be done slowly, but this sentence fragmentation needs to be processed urgently. Adding a few more commas will make the difference immediately.

Chapter 10: Dissuading people from quitting without paying any attention to the balance of the game. In the early stage, the protagonist's gold level was relatively fast with only 5 silver, which is 0.5 Gold. However, after someone explored the new map, the whole server announced a reward of 1,000 gold. It's ridiculous 🙂🙂🙂

After reading Chapter Seventy-Six, it can be seen that the author wants to write a grand world view, whether it is in the game or in reality. However, the protagonist's strength has improved tremendously, and there are no other players with the same strength to compare with. As a result, my current impression is like a novel novel. The protagonist is too super-gamey and mindless.

What is this other world now? The protagonist wants to wear a woman's skin and wander around there. What is the background of the world before? Are you looking for the princess to retrieve the doll that was taken away? Are you ignoring it at all? Don't write anymore? The plot transition is inexplicable. It's a one-size-fits-all change. There is no transition and the map is changed directly. It's even dressed up as a woman. And the names are changed directly. Is it a direct collapse or the author's account is changed and the person is changed?

The beginning part is okay, and the imagination is okay, but in the end it turns into a lot of new puppets and new skills that come from nowhere to fight against monsters who don't know how strong they are. It feels inexplicable while reading. It can be seen that the author wrote the fighting very high. I don't know about others, but I couldn't feel the sense of graphics and excitement at all. Instead, I was confused and basically could only skip quickly. Maybe it's because I'm not an experienced 2D author, nor a science fiction and military fan, so I often don't know what the author is talking about.

Believing in the evil tentacle monster in the group who updated 15,000 times a day, I made an outline and pulled out more than thirty strands of hair. Someone wants to read the Summoner article. I just don't know what you like, a traditional online game, or a branch from the current world line.

If there is something wrong, he is still a eunuch 😰😰😰