The Different Paths of Qiankun Continent

Overall, the article has a clear center and highlighted key points. The distinct images of the characters are well expressed. There is room for improvement between sentences, and there is huge room for improvement. Come on, you can do it.

I feel that the ideas are okay and clear, but there are many parts. The author should learn to revise the manuscript and not just publish it after typing it. Including typos and basic punctuation marks, you still need to check them clearly. In this way, the reader's reading status and comfort level will also be improved, and repeated parts should be as few as possible. In particular, mental activities and spoken words should be distinguished by symbols. Although it is an online text, it is better to use as few swear words as possible. This may also be helpful for you to sign a contract. Then the outline of the entire work is very important. The author should think carefully about it. Although it is not something for readers to read, some books whose outlines are not well written will make you read the end at a glance or you will not want to read it. Well... Anyway, come on, the author can read more good articles and practice his writing. And, ahem, please author, please take a look at mine (๑>؂<๑). By the way, one more thing, writing a novel is very tiring. When you really decide to write a great book one day, and your words are good enough (emphasis added), you must not do it, or read less comments. Because many times the influence and negative energy brought by comments can easily make you unable to persist. But in the stage of serious study, reading more criticized comments can really improve yourself. Come on! (I am right now,,, and everyone around me is trying hard to find fault hahahaha)

This is my first time writing, I hope everyone can support me

Collected. Welcome to visit and collect, let's work together!

Dear readers, if you should complain, please do not show any mercy.

It's very beautiful, I like it so much, don't miss it! Author I am the second brother!

Come on＾0＾~, support!

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

Big cheers to the author! I took a quick look at the first few chapters, and the writing was pretty good. Let's collect and fatten first, hehehe. . .

Come on, it's really interesting! I hope it doesn't stop! I feel like it's going to be hot!

It's okay, but there are too few updates per chapter.

A very thoughtful work, I hope the author will be diligent in updating it! Expect. . .

If the writing is not good, you can tell me.

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