Professional Cultivator

I threw it away when I saw the part about Shi Shaojian's apprenticeship. Did you mention becoming a disciple when we first met???

A great monk at the Golden Core Stage is still just a dwarf, but you, a novice, have only been cultivating for how long and how long have you grown?

The writing is very good, the writing is smooth, the logic is smooth, and there are no poisonous points yet. Come on, don't collapse.

Let me tell you what I think about your book. I just started reading, and I feel like it's okay. I don't know why, but sometimes I just feel less and less like reading it, until I see almost 100 pictures and I really can't stand it anymore. No, I don't know what it feels like. I don't want to watch it anymore.

To be honest, every time I see scenes that praise Qin Shihuang so hard, I feel bored. If Qin Shihuang is so powerful, then our great *** is not the Lord of the world. The parallel world used to be just an ordinary world, and the historical figures in the past were just ordinary people. What you are writing is not the return of ancient myths. It's better to write about the present as much as possible. Human beings are constantly moving forward. Modern times are definitely better than ancient times. This is obvious.

This kind of protagonist is really a white-eyed wolf. Whoever trains him is worse than raising a dog. He also deliberately found a disciple of the Eight Banners to lead the nominal master into evil, haha. I still think I don't teach you, because he's not your father, he owes you!!

Although it is not written explicitly, the aura of Long Aotian is revealed between the lines, brother, beauty, close relative, Nilin...

Author, don't write about teaching people, and don't write about classmates, especially female classmates. Otherwise, even if what you write is not poisonous, it will give people the feeling of being poisoned.

Ang, first of all, I have watched the first copy. Although Shi Jian is more annoying in the movie version, I can still accept the behavior of the protagonist. But back to reality, what is the protagonist doing, fat man? Zangzhuo, vampire, netizen? Seeking Taoism Group? What is the protagonist doing, other than doing business? Fatty can barely accept it. Does vampire have anything to do with you? If you don't seize the time to upgrade, what are you doing? Now I really doubt whether the first copy was written by you. A person who can write that Shi Jian is arrogant and has a good face, and can humbly hold his breath to apprentice with a guy like Shi Xiaojian, will he use this kind of thing to disgust me when he returns to reality? Yes, to be precise, I think this is called character collapse!

It was okay at first. What did you write in the middle??? Can you decide on a theme?