Ancient Sword of Nothingness

In fact, the writing style is not bad, but from the lines, I feel that the author is not very old, right? He should be less than twenty years old It is a matter of punctuation that you need to pay attention to, sometimes it is not used well It is recommended to read it again after writing, there are some mistakes Other words (The other thing is to put yourself into the perspective of the protagonist. The farmer's child is called Xue Yi, which feels very inconsistent. The name should be more down-to-earth, right?) It may be a bit venomous, because I also hope that your comments to me will be a bit venomous 😊

Author, come out! ! ! The front foot is still wandering around the world with one person and one sword! ! Why did the style of writing suddenly change into a good-for-nothing prince + a stunning diva! ! Are you planning to create a hegemonic empire?

Let's complain 1 There are too many typos (it has affected reading a bit) 2 There are some punctuation problems (but it's not a big problem) 3 The sentence descriptions in some places are a bit weird (it is recommended to revise them) 4 Suddenly switching to the first person (although I know it is in memories, it is still weird) 5 It's still a problem with the sentences. Although the setting is to awaken memories at the age of eighteen after reincarnation, the writing is actually a bit closer to the soul-transportation direction, such as the sentence "a gift left by the original owner of the body" 6 Although it should have been changed, Xue Yi can still be seen as the protagonist in the article That's it for now

Well written, keep up the good work, keep it up and believe in yourself. Suggestion: The language can be more concise I hope you can read the novel I wrote: World 502 If you have time, you can comment and give me some opinions

I deleted a book yesterday on the 3rd, and the first three chapters were similar to Brother's problem. It tends to be stream-of-consciousness, with too much inner drama, and the description is not objective enough. I originally wanted to make major changes, but then I thought about it. If I changed it, I would already be at a disadvantage in the website. Second, this logical thinking style is difficult to change. The first three chapters should be one chapter, but the following chapters feel like an introduction to a city map. There are too many things to remember. I wrote a trial paragraph based on your content. The underworld, the Wheel City. One of the ten palaces of Yama, the palace of the Wheel-turning King. The reincarnation of souls and the condemnation of evil spirits take place in this wheel-turning city. Zuanluan City is a quaint city, standing like a big mountain on the brown land. The tall red-black city walls and the wide bronze-colored city gates are all majestic and majestic. There were four rows of Yin soldiers guarding the door, with black armor and black sickles, looking around silently and solemnly. In front of the city gate, ghosts lined up in long lines, quickly passing through the city gate and walking into the Wheel City. If the ghost in the team is in a daze or stagnates for a moment, he will immediately be scolded by the patrolman in green armor next to him. If he does it again, a black whip will be whipped hard on the ghost. At this time, Ji Wuhen suddenly appeared out of thin air behind one of the ghost teams. The ghost team, patrolling Yin soldiers, city guard Yin soldiers, and the three characters "Whispering City" came into view one by one. Ji Wuhen immediately understood who and where he was. "Ji Wuhen! Ji Wuhen!" At this moment, two thunderous explosions suddenly sounded in the sky, and the echoing sound continued. The Yin soldiers were as usual, and all the ghosts covered their ears tightly with their hands, looking up at the sky in fear. On top of a black cloud, two weirdos, one white and one black, stood. They wore long robes and high hats. The white hat has the words "Wealth at First Sight" written in big black characters, and the black hat has the words "Peace in the World" written in big white characters. The white man is tall and thin, with a weird smile on his face. The black man is short and fat, with a sad face, as if he is crying in mourning. This strongly contrasting image was again in front of the Wheel City. Ji Wuhen and other ghosts took a look and knew that the two weirdos were the legendary black and white impermanence. "Your Majesty, Lord Yama, please come out quickly and follow us!" Hei Bai Wuchang stared at Ji Wuhen, spoke in unison, and spoke again. Suggestion: See the Queen of Yama and quickly trigger the ancient sword. Take it through Huangquan Road, Naihe Bridge, Bianhua, Sansheng Stone and the fight between Meng Po and the Demon Emperor. Directly describe the accident of reincarnation, seal the body for protection, and complete the time travel. Personally, I think: The image of the King of Hell is better as a middle-aged majestic man, and the image of an old man is suitable for a god. Also, the King of Hell sees all living beings in all shapes and forms, and does not have so many emotions or words. He won't communicate much with the unawakened God of War. He will only meet once and provide some convenience and help in a subtle way as a show of goodwill. The level is limited, please forgive me if there is something wrong.

The writing is very good, the writing style is good, very novel ideas, the plot is vivid, and the characters are well portrayed. Come on, the author, try not to interrupt updates, wait for the signing, I believe there will be better results after signing the contract,,, has been collected, please return to visit, just click on my avatar, thank you, "Accidentally Created an Era", help each other. ,,,, Will come back if you visit!

There are innovative points in the book one after another, and the writing is excellent. I have saved it for reading. Come on.

At dawn, the sky was just bright, but the young man was already walking on the street before he woke up. Today is an important day, I am going to meet a book friend. Although it was still early and people probably hadn't gotten up yet, the young man had already arrived at the book friend's door. Standing outside the courtyard, waiting quietly... After waiting for a long time, the courtyard door finally opened. Hello! This book friend! Do you still remember me? Let me stop by and check in! I have been collecting your books for a long time. You don't even know it. Today I made a special trip to see you. Oh, by the way! This is my book "Remembering China", do you want to read it too? Come and sit at my place if you have nothing to do, have some wine and some tea, we can talk about life and ideals. Okay, I won't disturb you anymore, you can continue creating! It's time for me to go back. Stop giving it away! Why are you so polite?                                                                                                                                                                                                               stay.

Well written and engaging. There are many typos. I hope the author will take time to check them carefully. By the way, is this a single heroine, or a harem of three thousand beauties...?

Come on, collected, well written