I Am a Mortal

Chapter 22 has been read! I would like to express my personal opinions here: I have written more than 60,000 words here, and the biggest mistake is not having fun! Missing points of contradiction! The writing is too slow! A knockout match has not been written yet from Chapter 3 to now. Generally speaking, one to two chapters is enough during preparation! It took a lot of time and wasted a lot of chapters! The biggest reason is that the protagonist is not strong! Speaking of a strong protagonist, here comes the problem. The protagonist should have swallowed the dragon spirit within three chapters, so that the protagonist can start to develop and let the readers have something to look forward to. However, it took a long time. The development of the protagonist is too slow, which is what readers and editors do not want to see! Especially the editor, he wants to see your cool points, selling points and novelty points! The other one is the contradiction. Apart from seizing the dragon spirit now and provoking Mr. Shao and Instructor Hong, there is no other contradiction! If Dada completes the devouring of the dragon spirit in the first three chapters, the protagonist can gradually grow, create many contradictions, and bring excitement! For example, starting from Lin'er, you can write that a young master from another big family likes Lin'er, and then threaten the protagonist with the power of the family. Although the Shanjian family has no desire to join forces, you can't stop the young master from a big family from liking Lin'er. Then the contradiction arises! After integrating Feng's power, you can show off and slap in the face! The next step was the knockout round. The protagonist's skills shocked everyone and led the team to first place. Everyone looked at the protagonist with admiration. At this point, the contradiction comes again. It can be written that there were people who were dissatisfied in the elimination round. They thought that the protagonist relied on Wen Peng and others. Afterwards, they continued to provoke the protagonist, but were slapped in the face by the protagonist for showing off! Step by step, be more comfortable, and the contradictions will come out! Also, it's best not to let too many people know about the protagonist Goldfinger, such as the Mountain Family! Lin'er's father thinks that the protagonist is a waste and is not worthy of being with Lin'er, so he steps in to stop him. You can write that the protagonist goes out to practice in order to gain recognition, make a name for himself, and impress the mountain family! These are all ways to create conflict and have fun! This is what the editor likes. If you don't write about it, the editor won't pay much attention! Above! This is my personal opinion! Represents only personal views! This is what I came to after carefully reading all the chapters! Don't spray if you don't like it! Thanks! Finally, I hope you will continue to work hard!

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Although it is a book about a male protagonist, the female protagonist also has a very strong sense of involvement, which shows that the author has a strong foundation and good literary talent! This reading trip has really benefited me a lot🙂Thank you!

Shan Jian Lin'er is quite cute, with novel ideas and fluent writing. The novel is also very comfortable to read, and the character creation is full. In short, I am very optimistic about this novel. Keep up the good work!

It's late at night and I'm tired of writing, so I come over to visit. Clicking on the books casually and lingering over them, not bad! It's just a little bit less flavorful than the great master, come on!

My son took first place in the 100-meter run. I was very happy. "Finally, there is an athletic talent in the family." My son said sheepishly, "Everyone in front of me fell down." I was stunned and speechless. But if you think about it carefully, success lies in the fact that the son did not fall, which may not be a victory. Isn't that true for writing? What about those who signed contracts early? All the eunuchs and eunuchs fell down, didn't they? As long as I persist, I will become a god! 🤭🤭

"Taoyuan Suppression of Bandits" The soldier passed by to study and stayed behind👣

The great master's achievements probably came from an impulse back then. There are many authors like me who also started writing on impulse. I know now that I regarded impulse as talent. After I put down the pen, I sighed: It's too difficult for me. The feeling of constant constipation is very uncomfortable. Fortunately, after countless sleepless nights and not giving up when I was lonely and wandering, I finally got a contract, which showed that I was not useless. I did not succeed. Everything has just begun. Without that impulse, I would still be just an ordinary reader. But the impulse is only temporary, what can make me move on? That's your encouragement! The recommendation votes that you often ignore, the insignificant and sometimes very stingy rewards, the heartwarming words, or the complaints that come to your lips but are unwilling to be written down... To me, these are as rare as fine wine. I have a story, do you have wine?

This idea! No one left! 🤭🤭🤭

I am an ordinary person, but the first sight made me think wrongly, why is my machine gun so ordinary, haha

Read it every day. This is the most beautiful book I have ever read. All the stories about great and small gods are just floating clouds. This book is the most down-to-earth. The story revolves around the growth of the protagonist Wang Fan. He is not perfect, but he is kind, brave, and sincere. The story has ups and downs, the characters are rich and full, and the language is vivid and interesting. He is deeply attracted by the fate of Wang Fan and Shanjian Liner. The more the story goes, the better it gets. I look forward to Wang Fan merging with dragon blood and becoming a real warrior! Come on, Wang Fan!

Wang Fan is destined to be an extraordinary person with an extraordinary story. It's a very interesting story. I read it in one sitting. Please keep reading! Collect and invest together. You have stories, I have wine! Come on! ✊

The beginning of the story is compact and full of suspense. It starts in the mode of mortal flow. It can be seen that the structure of the world is grand. Please read it slowly at first.