Studying at Hogwarts

The author's writing power starts to dry up from the Goblet of Fire part, and it goes completely downhill from there. It is recommended to rewrite directly from the relevant chapters onwards. The author himself seems to have no ability to grasp the direction of the plot, and forcibly "corrects" the plot according to the original world line. If we talk about the protagonists of other fan fiction, they need to worry about the collapse of the main line, so they do not change the general direction, so as not to be unable to "foresee the future". 1. You, the protagonist, have unlocked the ability of prophecy and divination! After the game is over, you, the protagonist, actually know more about "Harry Potter" than Rowling, okay? 2. If you, the protagonist, are "chaotic evil" and egoistic in order to gain skill points, although you can't be called a good person, it still makes sense. But your golden finger skill points will be almost useless during the Goblet of Fire! The protagonist has directly become "Little Dumbledore", and the system panel is only mentioned once in ten or twenty chapters, so the experience points are almost the same as without him! It's completely inadequate to support the main character's motivations. 3. In the part of Order of the Phoenix, the protagonist said "busy, no time" throughout the whole process, but what was he busy about? So busy and lonely! There is no mention of what the protagonist is busy with when he is "busy". It's simply that the author couldn't control the direction of the plot, so he had to "block" the protagonist and transcribe Rowling's original text instead. Actually, you have a branch plot that you haven't developed yet. What's going on in Ravenclaw's second secret room? What happened to the bronze book? Does Hufflepuff have a Chamber of Secrets? These gadgets can be a good explanation of what the protagonist is "busy about", but until the protagonist graduates, there will be no more. 4. In the following part, the protagonist's operation is also very confusing: You can say that he doesn't care about the life and death of other people, he trains and equips his teammates. Tell me he cares. He threw his three roommates in a conspicuous place like Diagon Alley as bait (who has studied in the same school for 7 years, who doesn't know that the four of you are best friends?!) Tell him his identity is mysterious. Everyone in the school knows that he is a prophet. Without a nose, he already knows who he is by name and knows how to divination. You can say that he has a prominent status. When Sirius revealed the news to his own people, he only said "mysterious fortune teller". You said he was wary of Snape, because he made prophecies with his face crossed (Malfoy and Snape, the Philosopher's Stone) You said he believed in Snape, he wouldn't even enter the Order of the Phoenix. Including the latest chapters, You said that the protagonist is trying to train the savior. What this person does seems to be a pure fool. He knows it and won't tell it. I haven't seen any improvement in the savior. You can say that he is hiding the truth. He has basically destroyed the Horcruxes. To put it simply, this book can be read, but it needs to be polished after the Goblet of Fire chapter is finished. The writing power in the rest of the book is greatly reduced.

The whole plot of Order of the Phoenix is ​​confusing. The protagonist, as a time traveler + a master of prophecy, secretly added fuel to the flames through various spoilers, but as a result, there was no change in the plot. Umbridge was kept jumping around in school until the end of the original plot. The White Terror of Hogwarts and the Death Eaters' escape from Azkaban, two major political mistakes that could bankrupt the official credibility, could not bring down Fudge and Umbridge. In this extraordinary world view, ordinary wizards are still playing tricks. . . If the wizarding world is really so powerful, is Fudge still afraid of Voldemort's return? Regardless of whether Voldemort comes back or not, no one is allowed to oppose me, and I will kill anyone who opposes me. Anyway, ordinary people let me prey on them, and I have put the Cruciatus Curse on your children. What can you do to me?

I have been following this book for some time a long time ago, and then I put it away for a while because I felt that the pace was a bit slow. Now that I have come back to read it again, I still feel that it was more comfortable before I was in third grade. There isn't much to comment on in terms of the plot. It's just the emotional line... It's really hard to describe in one sentence. It feels like the female protagonist is responsible for cooperating with the male protagonist to show affection. The so-called genius, erudition, and natural telegrapher are almost useless (of course I didn't watch carefully during the period from fifth to sixth grade). Then there are a bunch of miscellaneous female supporting characters. It feels like they are just to highlight the charm of the male protagonist. While writing according to the tone of the harem story, she also asked the male protagonist to say "If I don't have a girlfriend, she will indeed be my dish, but I have a girlfriend", which gives people the feeling that... The male protagonist is a scumbag. Since we decided to have a single female protagonist, the male protagonist is like a central air conditioner and treats all the girls around him as a "gentleman"... And the male protagonist flirts with the female protagonist at the beginning and is like "Do you like me more?" Anyway, from my personal point of view, if he wasn't handsome, he would be really oily... … Katrina, I actually liked her very much at first, and I can understand why she is not suitable for Albert, but from the third grade to the sixth grade, she was beaten every day by her sister and the male protagonist. How could she still have thoughts about Albert? ? Um... It's a bit outrageous to be so infatuated. (I even doubt whether she likes the male protagonist after all) Especially since she is the female protagonist's sister, it is impossible for the male protagonist to stop seeing her, which is very detrimental to the relationship between the male and female protagonists... On the contrary, it is the relationship between Hermione and the male protagonist that I personally I think it's quite normal. It's normal for Hermione to have admiration for Albert. There's nothing wrong with the male protagonist having the original filter to like Hermione. The gap between the two has been quite big from the beginning, and it doesn't constitute a strong emotional scene. On the contrary, I think... It's quite reasonable? Finally, I would like to point out that this is just my personal subjective opinion on love lines. I have no intention of offending the author, and I also maintain a respectful attitude towards readers who hold other views on love lines. I hope this book will get better and better.

This book was okay before I got engaged to the heroine. After the engagement, the only remaining emotional line that could barely hold on was settled, and the whole book completely collapsed. I personally think there are two biggest highlights of this book. One is the emotional line in the early stage, including the relationship between family and the battle against the top school sister and jointly dealing with the Defense Against Dark Arts professor. The other is the expansion of the world view and the addition of some descriptions of other places, but it is limited to the early and middle stages. The later stage is pure water. Almost all events are repeating the same template, and the main line is unknown. After the title of the book was changed, it was completely decoupled from the main line of alchemy in the early stage. "Alchemy" is only a big and vague noun, and its specific meaning and step-by-step research are not described at all. The protagonist is always a nobody in the eyes of others until the protagonist appears as a saint and is astonished to the heaven. Every seemingly high-end game is full of mentally retarded supporting characters and almost public inside stories. However, other characters still seem to be very valuable when mentioned, and the contrast between the before and after is uncomfortable. The positive characters in the original book (especially the protagonist's best friends, the Weasley twins) have completely become the brainless protagonist's pendant. Without the protagonist, he can't do anything well. When the protagonist speaks, he will say that he will do exactly what Albert said, and he will often arrange for a few people who were forcibly reduced to intelligence and despised the protagonist to suffer as a foil. In the eyes of the villain of the original work (named Lucius), the protagonist has Schrödinger's fame. He just said that it is not easy for the protagonist to have a lot of titles. At one moment, he said that the protagonist is a little kid and not worthy of attention. At another time, he said that the protagonist is so scary. The key is to repeatedly jump around. This kind of slap in the face process is repeated in every plot. There is no sense of wits and it is boring. In terms of the protagonist's research, refining potions is like cooking according to Western recipes, without any own opinions. In the plot of the iconic Buffy Brain Refresher, the quality inspection process for this dangerous drug, which is said to be defective and can cause permanent brain damage, is to dip it in with your hands and taste it, which is simply "amazing". The alchemy mentioned repeatedly in the early stage seems to be a legend with only one name rather than a subject. The protagonist finds a pile of items with the name of alchemy, and says that these items have nothing to do with alchemy. Even Nicoléme said that he has no attainments in real alchemy, which is very confusing. I just want to say don't make alchemy too mysterious. Blindly praising it without giving a specific definition will only make people bored. Breaking a big goal into small step-by-step goals is the way to do research. I would like to put forward a statement here for reference. Alchemy is a science that combines magic with creation. It solidifies magic into items in the form of magic spell arrays and other forms, thereby achieving effects such as strengthening or compounding spells. In this way, how to solidify the spell, how to combine functions, how to optimize the effect, and how to use the finished product can all extend the plot, and the amazing academic heroine in the early stage will not be reduced to a vase in the later stage. The author went too far in highlighting the protagonist's awesomeness, and it was too much. The wizard card, which is an extremely important plot prop in the early stage, obviously invested a lot of energy in the protagonist and the efforts of the protagonist's best friend, but it was handled purely to reflect the attraction of the protagonist, so that no one cares about the club without the protagonist. I can only say that if this is the case, then the protagonist's design ability is a piece of scum. There are so many things about women that I can't complain about, and the description of the single heroine is okay. In fact, making love with the heroine is the only chapter I will subscribe to now. But a beautiful girl will fall in love with the protagonist, and then a bunch of losers will seduce various teas, and finally arrange for the heroine to appear and show off, but it will be boring if it happens too often. As I said before, if there are no new routines, I don't recommend hard water. This book can still be read in half the length. Although the supporting characters only have online IQ in the early stage, it can still be regarded as a short article. With such a dull look now, all I can say is that my favorites should be thrown into the dust.

What attracts me the most about this HP fanfic is that itis full of the flavor of Aunt JK's original work and also has the author's own style throughout. In other words, this is a true fairy tale. Since the third part of the original work, it has gradually transitioned from fairy tales to reality. Harroch and other students have realized that only sacrifice and dedication can protect this fairy-tale magical world. They have all made choices and have grown up. The protagonist knew this from the beginning, but he chose to let the savior save the world. He just wanted to be a happy salted fish. Therefore, there is no urgent sense of fate in this book, only the experience of poetry and the warm daily life in the distance (🐶). At the same time, the plot of the full text is unconventional, the characters are flesh-and-blood, and the emotional tone is very relaxed. It is a masterpiece among this type of fan fiction, and it is highly recommended!

Personally, I think this book is very well written, and it ranks among the top three HP fans I've read. Why? 1. The setting is very good. The time it chooses is three years before the story was released, which breaks away from the routine of many HP fans from the beginning. 2. The originality of the story is very high. From the beginning to the present, many of the author's contents are divorced from the original work. Many of them are the author's own thinking and creativity. This shows that the author has put a lot of thought into it. Thank you 👍🏻 3. The author's character setting and plot rhythm are very comfortable, without too many poisonous points and flaws. It reads very smoothly. The plot progresses in units of years, with natural transitions and one word. Great reading experience! 4. The author's world view is very grand. I read what the author posted and it divided the entire content into three parts, the first three years, 6 years of hp, and the magical world. This is a wonderful magical world for more than ten years. This gave me great expectations. Where are the Fantastic Beasts? The love and hatred between Harry Potter and Voldemort, infinite imagination In addition, the author, I don't want eunuchs, I say the most important thing three times, I don't want eunuchs I don't want eunuchs I don't want eunuchs

I just paid to read a few chapters, and I don't want to waste my money anymore. I could actually read it when I first read it, but the further I read the novel, the more awkward it became. The typical way of writing fan fiction doesn't even make up for the setting. This is a reference, and that is a reference. I don't see that the author has made any efforts to establish the world view of the novel. Instead, the miscellaneous things often make up a chapter. The problem with the protagonist is even more serious. He is completely the author's puppet, as if he has no soul. One moment he does this to reflect the character's character, and the next moment he changes his face to suit the development of the plot. Now there is not a single character in the novel that left a deep impression on me, except for the twin brothers, but they were successfully portrayed in the original work. As for the others, they really quit the novel and can't even remember their names. It's okay to submit it to light novel fan fiction. The author adheres to the concept of deceiving people and not breaking the law. He chose an insignificant title and submitted it to the fantasy category with more traffic. You can use your toes to figure out why. Isn't it just hanging a sheep's head and selling dog meat?

It's so well written that as a Kazakhstan fan, you won't feel like you're in a drama at all!                                                                                 Chapter 350, there are no OOC, dead logic, harem for the sake of harem, out of outline, forced settings, infantilized interpersonal relationships and a series of problems that appear in other HP fans. This is the best fanfic I have ever read! And the author's writing style is very smooth. It seems like ordinary words, but it depicts a complete world, which is almost seamlessly connected with the original work! The new settings in the article are also very systematic, logical and not abrupt. Maoda, if you have a recommended monthly ticket, I will give it to you! Looking forward to the exciting follow-up🙏!

I just want to ask if the author's "he" syndrome has been cured... I have read more than 200 chapters so far, and a lot of "he" really affects the reading experience. From the characters to the narration, they are all like a pretentious little girl.

This book was started two years before Harry went to school. It is one of the few HP fans that I can write with a content of more than 1 million words and still have a stable rhythm. A few points I like: 1. The protagonist has his own core story content, so it is not a plot that completely revolves around the trio; 2. Some points in the original plot that are not directly described will be reasonably expanded from another perspective; 3. The protagonist of Goldfinger is extremely talented, but The growth in strength is not too exaggerated (I have read a book before which was quite good at the front, but it was said that the collapse in the back was so bad that a first grader could make a portal); 4. There are many small details of the magical world; 5. The protagonist does not play Quidditch... Something that makes me feel regretful is that most of the time the protagonist I was too bland at the time, just saying that when I received the Hogwarts admission notice, I didn't feel particularly excited. Even after the system panel appeared, I feel that as a Harry Potter fan, when I discovered that there is magic in the world and I am qualified to learn, the excitement is probably far greater than that of discovering the golden finger. , After all, cheats are only for the skills you can learn. If this is just an ordinary world, then your cheats will at most allow you to quickly learn a few foreign languages or become a scientist. But precisely because this is a magical world, you have the opportunity to fly into the sky and escape. It is a pity that this excitement cannot be expressed as a Hamburg fan.

The only shortcoming of this book is that it greatly compares to the Buddhist system and jumps between the beasts of the first watch and the hands of the second watch. The rest is very good 😁

Come on! Author, your book is very beautiful

A good book about delicious food The details are arranged very delicately, the plot arrangement is natural and interesting, the way friends get along is comfortable, and the growth of the protagonist is just right. The original part is also worth liking. To describe it as a dish, it is like a West Lake vinegar fish, full of flavor. The only flaw is that I looked too fast😂

I feel so bored, the language feels so awkward, and I'm always with the twins

When you see a wizard in the future, you can go up and say, hey, do you want to play a game of wizard cards?

I've read a lot of Harry fandoms recently. 1. The Poisoned Egg starts out invincible. I just flip the table and set my own rules, abandoning all kinds of conspiracy theories. It's quite cool. 2. Connor's Hogwarts unfolds the magical world through paintings. It has a novel angle, is very funny, and has a very graphic feel. 3. The Alchemist is this one. I didn't watch it at first. It was very bland, but the more I watched it, the more it became more interesting and had the narrative characteristics of the original work. However, I came here too early and couldn't get enough of it.

You want to be popular! I'd better lick it earlier 😍

British Wizarding - A micro-society of about three thousand (legal) wizards. There are also a small number of illegal wizards. As the only wizarding school in the UK, the number of people in Hogwarts can determine the number of wizards in the UK. "Enrollment is now compulsory for every teenage wizard," he replied, "announced yesterday. This is a change, as it was never compulsory before. Of course, almost all British wizards attended Hogwarts, but parents have the right to homeschool their children or study abroad. And now In this way, Voldemort can put all wizards under his surveillance since childhood. This is also one of the ways to eliminate Muggles, because students must have a blood certificate to prove their wizarding ancestry to the Ministry of Magic before they can be admitted." Chapter 11 of the original book. There are only three wizarding schools in Europe and only thirteen wizarding schools in the world, so we can have a rough idea of the scale of the wizarding world. In the first part Gryffindor, Harry Potter's grade, boys only have five beds in the same dormitory, and by the second year, the dormitory door is marked "Second Year", there is no second grade number 1 or other dormitory numbers. When Gryffindor and Slytherin took their first flying lesson together, there were 20 broomsticks on the ground, and the professor asked "everyone stand next to the broomstick" - this is the original work, which also proves that this data is correct (Philosopher's Stone, Chapter 9). Potions class: When Gryffindor and Slytherin took Potions class together, they set up 20 cauldrons (each student bought them when he enrolled). Part 2 The Secret Room Chapter 6 Gryffindor and Hufflepuff take Herbology class: Professor Sprout prepares twenty pairs of necessary isolation earplugs. The following students appeared in Harry's Gryffindor class: Lavender Brown, Parvati Patil, Hermione Granger, Seamus Finnigan, Neville Longbottom, Harry Potter, Dean Thomas, Ron Weasley. The only male dormitory in the first part only has five beds, which can be used as a contrast. There may be two unknown girls, but if there are more Gryffindor students in this year, wouldn't it be strange that we have never heard of them in 7 years? They never speak in class, never participate in activities in the common room or elsewhere. Judging from the situations in the Herbalism, Flying and Potions classes mentioned above, they are not even in the same class. If there are other students in this grade, where are they? There is indeed evidence that there are two other girls, but they rarely speak. So it can be at least inferred that the number of Gryffindors in Harry's Hogwarts was 10, and from the number of earmuffs, brooms and cauldrons, it can be inferred that Hufflepuff and Slytherin were also 10. Assuming there are 10 new students in each college every year, then there are 40 new students in the school every year, and a total of 7 grades are about 280 students. With the exception of a few wizards, the life span is the same as that of ordinary people (the pure-blood families do not live long. The Malfoy family, the Weasley family with Ron, the Potter family, the Black family and the Lupin family have only one old person, Grandma Neville. Note, the original book only appears in pure-blood families, and there is no pure-blood nobles). Assuming that they all die at the age of 80, then there are a total of 62 students from 17 to 18 years old. This is the number of wizards living at the same time, roughly 2,480, plus 500 wizards who may have a way to live longer, the number is less than 3,000. Extended further, the study of the number of wizards in the world. There are two aspects: 1. As one of the thirteen schools in the world, Hogwarts has only 40 to 50 graduates every year according to my above inference. Judging from the background in the article, British wizards are not weak, and even as a "big country" that can influence World War II and the wizarding world, its background is absolutely high. Then the other twelve schools either have poor student ability, or the number is about the same as Hogwarts. Judging from the appearance of the two schools, they are not strong but not too bad. So the maximum number of students in other schools is three times that of Hogwarts, that is, 120 to 150 people graduate every year, and the total number of 12 schools is 1,440 to 1,800. Then the total number of wizards in the world, that is, the graduates of 70 years (it is estimated that all will live to the age of 87 and study before the age of 17. There are wizards who live for centuries, but there are certainly not as many wizards who died early, so it is roughly balanced.) There are approximately 100,000 to 126,000 wizards in the world. 2. One hundred thousand wizards came to watch the Quidditch World Cup, which made many readers feel that there were too many wizards. But this requires careful reading. First, the tickets are not expensive. The Ron family is not rich but they can get "first-class tickets", let alone the "top box". Mundungus Fletcher is so poor that "I know he actually spent the night under a cloak supported by a stick." He can also come to the game. Secondly, the journey costs less. You can fly to the UK via the Floo network and then use the key to get there directly. You can live in your own tent. Muggle flights and accommodation are not available, and if you buy cheap tickets and come two weeks in advance, you can make money as a hawker. Third, the Wizards are not broadcast, and you cannot watch the game unless you are on the field. This is equivalent to the only world game that is not broadcast, and there will definitely be a huge number of people watching the game. If the Muggle World Cup plus the NBA and the Olympics were combined, the tickets would be as low as Quidditch, and the accommodation and air tickets would be the same as taking the bus. In addition, there would be no way to broadcast it, then the number of viewers of the World Cup would definitely be horribly large. So the vast majority of wizards in the original book may have come. After all, there is only one entertainment competition in the world, so its attraction will be quite terrifying.

The condescension and arrogance of the time traveler like Pig's Knuckle makes me extremely uncomfortable! And bad conduct! Stealing Snape's potion ingredients on the grounds that it was difficult to collect them yourself. Snape owes you? And he did it in a crude way, throwing mandrakes directly into people's bedrooms! Don't be afraid of problems! Extremely arrogant! And he also stole mandrakes from the school greenhouse on the pretext that they were difficult to collect! He still has the arrogant attitude of going to engage in finance after graduation! He can't face even the slightest difficulty. After graduation, he must be directly confusing ordinary people with the soul-stealing curse! This is a bad behavior in finance!

I have read more than 1,200 pictures, and I feel that I am a bit out of shape now. My favorite is the protagonist's original adventure in the first or second grade (before Harry comes to Hogwarts). From that year on, Umbridge became a little bit unbearable. The main reason is that the protagonist is objectively too strong, cheating the opponent to death and adding various buffs, but the plot arrangement insists on telling you that the two sides are in a stalemate and you go back and forth. It gets more and more exaggerated as you go to the end, and it feels like 40 Death Eaters + Voldemort vs the protagonist + Dumbledore + Harry and his team + the entire British wizarding world. However, they also tell you in various places that the wizarding world will fall into darkness next, and the situation will be worse than ever before. It's like drawing a target while shooting in the void. Moreover, this protagonist is super strong and super cautious. Sometimes I feel pity for Voldemort. There is also prophecy. The protagonist's language ability is so invincible that he can predict everything and explore everything without any restrictions, and the plot tension is largely lost. But having said that, I have written more than a thousand hp fanfics, so I don't expect any plot. Let's wait and see how it ends.

Really, seeing Dumbledore die at the hands of Snape once again, I can only say that the level of this novel is probably second-rate. I understand that fan fiction generally cannot deviate from the main line of the original work, but since you want to follow the plot of the original work, at least don't be so stupid. First, it was repeatedly emphasized that Dumbledore was not in good condition, and that he and the Minister of Magic were doomed. In the two plots from Order of the Phoenix to Half-Blood Prince, the supporting cast spent at least dozens of chapters incompetently analyzing the protagonist's prophecies, and then hit them one by one, and then continued to commit suicide in various disbeliefs. Since the Magic War, we have either been hiding in safe spots to hide from the Death Eaters, and then the protagonist has been taught various skills for a long time, and has been caught in various ways, and the protagonist has been rescued in various ways. There is no sense in the plot of Shui's side characters. Potter asks for his memory, and the entire novel is devoted to his annoyance. Little do we know that we are also annoyed by it. In the fan fiction, Potter is no longer the protagonist. One or two scenes would be interesting, but it would be boring to write it in ten or twenty chapters. It's too obvious to fool the readers. If you ask me, this whole Half-Blood Prince should focus on the magical confrontation outside the school, guerrilla warfare, you and me from both sides, various outposts and intelligence operations, and then end with one or two big battles. Then Chunqiu's writing style brings the plot of the original work, ending with the Death Eaters defeated in the battlefield, Dumbledore betraying his butt, Snape's plan to cheat, and Voldemort being deceived and successfully stealing the house. It not only enriches the plot, but also embodies the protagonist's strategizing commander's character, while keeping the word count in line with the original plot. It is enough for Potter to show Hermione's admiration for the protagonist from time to time, there is no need to give too many scenes. The same goes for other supporting characters. What about the Defense Association and the Wizard Card Club? It took you a long time to write it, but it would still be of no use to these rookies. Even if you wrote it, it would be useless and scattered plots. Anyway, my feeling is that there are too many side plots, the main plot is unclear or the conflicts are not prominent enough. All the salty fish are trying to show their presence, but it directly dilutes the tension of the main plot of black and white. The daily life is also too much, and the rhythm is not well controlled. One moment, he transforms into a Night Walker and beats a Death Eater with a stew stick. The next moment, he squats at home with his wife and sister-in-law to heat the kang. This atmosphere is difficult for people to imagine. The last pain point: the protagonist's system has been hidden for too long, the tasks are unclear, the rewards are unclear, the protagonist's strength standards are becoming more and more vague, and there is no quantitative comparability between him and Voldemort. At first, I was following the author's preface about minors outside school. The setting of the trace of the spell caster is a pitfall. I think the author is a fastidious person and has a very good understanding of the original work. Unfortunately, it is a bit difficult to write an original plot by himself. The first and second grade students performed well in the past, but after the trio of saviors entered the school, their control of the plot has been on a downward trend. Maybe this is a common problem with most fan fiction, that is, they can't break away from the framework of the original work.

I have a solution for the previous protagonist who wants to conjure an umbrella from a magic wand

After reading more than two hundred chapters, I still gave up. I don't understand why the author's protagonist always makes people feel uncomfortable in very inexplicable places. For example, he received the crown mission in the first grade and the reward was extremely generous. Well, you may be cautious, but all the preparations have been made to turn around and abandon the mission. When he was in second grade, he saw Scabbers and took on the preliminary tasks to gain some experience. However, he stopped doing the follow-up task of rescuing Sirius. He even wrote out his feelings and told the readers that Sirius deserved to be detained for what I had to do. You, the protagonist, don't need to be a good person, but you really don't need to tell the readers your feelings to explain that the reason why the protagonist doesn't want to do this task is that he thinks that others' life and death has nothing to do with him. Although it does not matter, there is really no need to say it. We readers are not familiar with the protagonist, so there is no need to tell us his feelings. You only need to make the protagonist's behavior conform to the logic of his character. Another thing that makes me uncomfortable is that in the description of the relationship between the protagonist and his sister, the close relationship between brother and sister does not need to be reflected by applying sunscreen to the sister. Moreover, the sister is still a child of about 10 years old, and there is also a subtle hint that she deliberately found a reason for him to apply it instead of her mother helping to apply it. Don't say that I am wrong. When you read a text and feel that it is sexually suggestive, it must be deliberately designed by the author.

It was okay in the early stage, but after the third grade, it became bad. Later on, it was no longer a magical story. It felt like the old man and old lady in the alley had a naughty parent, or a children's version of the naughty parent. All kinds of grievances and trade-offs were made in order to successfully complete the task. In the end, the task was completed, and there was no gain. There was nothing later, so why are you struggling? Just for all kinds of grievances? My balls hurt! I can't stand it anymore, it's a waste of emotion, my money didn't come from the strong wind! So confusing

Well written! Telling it eloquently, I don't care about the three golden chapters. The three honest chapters are also very good! Come on! 👍

I just discovered this book and finished it in no time.

When I saw Harry in seventh grade, the plot started to slow down, but I felt that I had already seen it and it was almost coming to an end, so I just kept reading. However, I didn't expect that the lower limit behind would be so low. I originally thought that the love between the male and female protagonists was pretty good, smooth and steady. However, the author insists on writing a good love into a harem novel. Obviously the male protagonist has been insisting on loving the female protagonist exclusively, but it was the female protagonist who personally persuaded the male protagonist to take his sister as his lover because she felt that there were too many temptations around the male protagonist, and even claimed that she loved her sister. Moreover, he must make unbreakable contracts with all his lovers. This is simply the most ruthless, scheming and disgusting heroine I have ever seen. I can't understand it at all, and I really can't stand it.

Finally I couldn't help but complain. No matter how talented a fourteen or fifteen-year-old boy is, he will not fall in love with a beautiful woman. It's really yy. It's a bit greasy to always tease a beautiful woman about having a crush on him. No matter how handsome the protagonist is, it will make people feel a little disgusting. Maybe this is a common problem in most Qidian male videos. In addition, the pacing is too slow, the villains are stereotyped, and the protagonist always feels like he has a chance to win, but in fact it always feels a bit anticlimactic.

The Sorting Hat is really blind. This protagonist has nothing to do with Gryffindor at all Selfish and cold-blooded. If you get the cheat, let alone kill Voldemort in the first grade. At least save a few unlucky ones. Just watch indifferently. It has nothing to do with it. If you take the cheat, you should follow the original work. Give Wormtail the cheat and maybe he will dare to send Avatar to Voldemort.

The early stage is pretty good. Although the protagonist is systematic, he can still see his own charm. The original plot is also very interesting. Entering the secret room chapter suddenly changed, and it even felt like a different author. The protagonist was already very capable, but he forced the main plot to not deviate from the original work, as if the author would not have written it if it separated from the original plot. The protagonist's explanation was also very logical, and he also made other characters smart to make others believe in the protagonist. The protagonist himself has also begun to become more and more disgusting. In the plot of the past few years, he still looked like a flesh-and-blood person. In the secret room chapter, he began to look more and more like a slave of the system. The system ignored the classmates and friends who had lived together with him for almost four years without rewards. After he angered Riddle's diary with his scratching operation, he deliberately sent it back to Ginny when the diary was already in hand. He planned to make the plot of the basilisk attack and Ginny being taken into the secret room happen again, without worrying about whether the plot would deviate from the original "True Dead Man". In this way, the protagonist is asked to evaluate Dumbledore, saying that Dumbledore will overturn sooner or later with so many tricks. The same goes for the emotional line. The protagonist says that he only wants a female lead and wants to get married as soon as possible to settle the female lead. At the same time, he behaves in various ways to tease the girls around him, and psychologically he wants to have sex with other girls. I feel that the protagonist has changed from a smart, rational, courageous, capable, ambitious, and hard-working person to a hypocritical and cowardly scumbag. Personally, I think the previous part is quite interesting. I barely finished the secret room chapter, but I can't stand it any longer. Goodbye.