Once Again, Beneath a Brilliant Galaxy

I'm just dropping by and checking in! Nice, I've added it to my favorites. Oh? You added it to your favorites too! Talk to you later~ I'll come visit you often, no need to see me off!

Your writing lacks vivid descriptions of physical appearance, and you use too many words, making it somewhat flowery and impractical. After all, readers are looking for the story, not the vocabulary. Writing a novel is different from writing an article.