Positive Energy Cultivation System

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Brother, your setting is good, but it is also a bit popular. There are many people who write this kind of setting. For the first chapter, you can completely condense it into one sentence: I am the protagonist, my life experience is miserable, and I obtained the system. Yes, I think you only talked about this in the first chapter, and it was all about settings. It can be seen that you want to take the humorous route, but it is obvious that you have misunderstood humor. Humor can't be used everywhere. As a normal person, you will have different reactions when encountering various situations. For example, in your first chapter, you should be nervous and scared, the surprise after getting the system, the disappointment of discovering that the system is cheating, the horror of being injected with venom, and finally the excitement of regaining a new life. No one is unafraid of death. If there is, he is definitely not a normal person. Secondly, you haven't been able to explain the function of the system in the first chapter. Also, the writing style seems very Western fantasy (I just read the first chapter), and the two words "cultivation" in the title of your book... The pace is too slow. Of course, I am a lot better than when I was just writing articles. Come on! Try to write down two points in the first chapter, especially the function of the system. The protagonist's affairs can be introduced later, and the key points should be mentioned less in the front. Come on!