Ask the Blue Sky

Hello there (the circle is so deserted QaQ) Time is limited, I can't read a few chapters. The main thing to look at is fluency, etc. Da Da's writing style is... Above average in the new book It can be seen that Da Da Da has written with great care. It is not a novice, but it is not some "magic grass" with bad writing. I believe the author can write better in the future! After that, there are some basic punctuation marks. Actually, I think the author is not used to using ":", right? In all character dialogues, ":" is not used. Just directly: xxx said: "..." Personally, adding ":" would be better and look more comfortable: xxx said: "...." In addition, it is a segmentation problem. Some newcomers will have this, but some will not. This may be related to the author's usual habit of dividing compositions into paragraphs, but this is an online article. The two are still different. It's better to divide it into more segments, and divide it as much as you can. It is easy to cause visual fatigue, after all, it is a long novel. And it will also cause readers to ignore some important points hidden in long paragraphs. Come on!