I Have a Fallout Shelter in Doomsday

The idea is good and the writing is okay, but your arrangement of events is too tight, which will make readers feel bad. Some events are not arranged reasonably, and the theme of radiation is not reflected enough. The pace should be slower and more steady. Try to narrow the circle of supporting characters and consider the IQ of passers-by. Overall, I like it and hope it can be improved.

The idea is very good, but the plot progress is too slow and the preparation time is a bit long. My personal suggestion is to increase the progress and enter the apocalypse quickly!

The cover is the other way around

This book seems to be my favorite type... But the protagonist is silly and either cooperates with the country or a large group. You can go it alone if you want, so just make money... But what is the protagonist doing? Make money selling barbells? Collecting people in a grinding manner? Is 1 year a lot of time? Building a medium-sized shelter is not enough. It takes time to buy land, time to get approval, and time to build... The most important thing is that it doesn't matter if you don't have money. Seeing as bugs can eat cement and iron, you definitely can't build above-ground shelters. It's better to find ready-made shelters. There are so many underground fortifications and air-raid shelters (there is an abandoned air-raid shelter in my house with intact facilities). And don't deliberately lower the IQ of the supporting characters... In the age of information explosion, thinking others are stupid is a way to die!

Let's not talk about the protagonist telling his secret to a bunch of people. I am convinced that the author can write a post-apocalyptic story about a gang fight. It is true that he shot people in the street when the apocalypse has not completely broken out and the government still exists. Fortunately, this lj book is a eunuch. I will use some brains when writing books in the future.

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I have one year left to write Chapter 445 and the end of the world has not yet come. The author is also a water ninja.

You are so tired, you are so tired, you are so tired, you are so tired. Say important things three times. Ken is too shallow. There was too much water inside, so it floated out. I really can't fall into the trap.

He robbed hundreds of millions and killed people, but then he deposited the money in the bank and was wanted by the authorities. This protagonist's IQ is worrying. He is treating the official power as a kindergarten. Once the bank account is frozen, no matter how much money you grab, it will be of no use? Instead, it caused a lot of trouble.

This novel gives me the feeling that the protagonist has nothing to guarantee the loyalty of others. He is trusted by everyone and can be given guns at will. If it weren't for the halo, I would have died eight hundred times.

Wow, this writing style. . . . Newcomer?

Originally, I liked the author's subject matter very much. It can be seen that the author also wrote it carefully, but the protagonist is really unlikable. He puts dumbbells and pistols when he disagrees with me... He is just a fool...

We have finally reached the end of the world. Other wasteland novels, whether they are rebirth or time travel, can at most briefly write about the end of the world. Fortunately for you, I have waited for more than 400,000 words, and finally it is here. You know, when I saw Ang Lee talking about sixty years, I had the illusion of a finale.

Py more with other books 👍

When will the end come...

It's better not to have a system, but to give a few codes corresponding to how long it lasts, and then limit the code to how long it takes to be refreshed and the number, and give a stupid construction template, so that a series of problems that arise later will be unknown, and the plot will be smooth.

Barbells appearing out of nowhere really poisoned me. Forget it, bye ( •̥́ ˍ •̀ू )🙂

The author is too extreme. After reading about 90 chapters of your book, I feel that you treat readers as fools. Your logic is that the system directly collects the items and then stores them in the system space. Please refer to the several routes analyzed from the reader's perspective. The first is to cooperate with the country to build a shelter. It is easy and relaxing. You may have no rights but a high status. The national reputation is unprecedented and you have no worries about food and clothing. This is a way of writing. Second, if you are selfish and want to dominate, ride a bicycle to the steel building materials warehouse and steal directly. It is easy to avoid surveillance and no physical evidence can be found to convict. If you are arrested, there is a lot of room for maneuver. This is one route. Third, you want to write about dominance, solo career, and extreme selfishness. The most important thing is that your writing style is not enough to describe the personalities of multiple characters. Personally, I suggest that you try to write a single protagonist and supporting role first with one less tag each.

I've been watching Kill Kill Kill until I'm tired. The author doesn't repeat what he writes. It's a talent.

The author greatly updated and updated +1