Ordinary My Extraordinary Story

After reading it, there are not many problems with punctuation, typos and unclear sentences, but they still affect reading. The author can refine it if he has time. Then I would like to talk about something that I feel is not appropriate after taking a quick look around. The writing is in the usual light novel tone, which is relatively relaxed. The first chapter introduces the protagonist at the beginning, enrolls in school, and also plays with Han Chan's jokes, which is very good. But starting from the second chapter, Elder Chen wanted to revive the cultivators. By the end of the matter, it was a bit baffling. This incident, apart from introducing an organization and introducing a few people, does not have much use. Moreover, in the second chapter, the narration is directly changed by different people, which can easily confuse readers. All the stories you tell must serve to shape the characters and promote the main plot. Putting your incident here is very abrupt. Moreover, many people appeared in this incident, and there should be many important supporting roles in the middle and later stages, but it was just a stroke of grace and had no effect. Then one thing I want to complain about is the level setting. Why is level 7 just a student, but level 8 can destroy the world 😥. Although the setting is that level 7 to level 8 is extremely difficult, it cannot be said that after three years of junior high school, you can jump directly to a professor. I think this point can be modified. In this article with a combat power system, Energizer should not have people with too high combat power appear at the beginning, although in the later stage, there may be a problem of being so terrifying to the powerful Douzong. Then there are cultivators, swordsmanship, magic, and heraldry. Chinese and Western fantasy settings are mixed together, which is a bit weird. Finally, and what I want to complain about the most, is that the golden finger given to the protagonist is too casual 😒, as casual as if someone suddenly stuffed you with a five million lottery ticket every day when you go to work and class. Goldfinger does not have to appear at the beginning, but if you want to write about goldfinger, you should either carry it with you from the beginning and keep silent about its origin, or make it as reasonable as possible. Grandpa Jin Yong knew that he had to jump off a cliff to pick up the secret book 🤤 It doesn't matter if the early plot is bland. As long as you persist in slow-burning articles, there will be readers. Come on! (The last warm reminder, some place names in the article should not be so direct, otherwise it will be easy to get 404)

I raised my hand and felt like I had no hope.

It may be a bit cruel to say this, but the advice is hard to hear I suggest you cut it off and start a new book.