Yuanshi Jade Urn

The writing is fancy, but the basic story logic and background explanation are often confusing. Can the author go back and read it several times? The protagonist is constantly going back and forth, distracted and using pseudonyms, so the reader can't even figure out who is who. Moreover, as the author, you always show off your skills in long paragraphs. You probably know the background you set by heart, and you seem to know a lot of relevant knowledge, but what about the people reading this book? I need to explain the background carefully. Even I feel annoyed after talking so much... Sigh

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It has a fairy-like feel but the writing is messed up. I read the first fifty chapters of the three worlds, including the Yin world, the Yang world and the spiritual world. Every time I changed the world, I had to think about which world it was for a long time, which made me upset.

To be honest, I have been following the author's books since his last book. The author's books have always had the feel of a fairy tale. The plot is not creative and novel, but it is not cliché either. However, I have to say that the author's writing style is really dry. It always makes me read without wanting to continue reading. There are also the author's recent plots, because I have not read Zhu Xian, so for I don't know anything about the plot in it, and these chapters are very unresonable. I would like to make a small suggestion, because the copy of this book is a work of various magic modifications. Can you briefly introduce the protagonist's chain of actions in the article? For example, I have no idea what Lu Ping has encountered, and what kind of people Daoxuan and Yuanxin are. It seems a bit stiff for the protagonist to directly criticize them. Also, I felt that sometimes the plot jumped a bit from the previous book. I also said that certain characters seemed to appear very suddenly. In this book, for example, the "Tian" in Fengyun dungeon suddenly appeared and was suddenly beaten to death by the protagonist. I found it very baffling (there were too few things to read). In short, the author's novel is still very interesting, and I will always support it. However, it would be great if when writing it, I could clearly understand why the protagonist wants to help someone or why he wants to kill someone. Come on!

Is the next book called Lingbao Talisman?

Collect all the supporting players, or the world. Example of a trap: Cang Haoqian: Nicknamed Tianmo, he is the number one demon in the world of martial arts. His cultivation level reaches the sky, almost to the level of a sorcerer. Later he turned to Shintoism and became the god of Yuan Qingwei. (World: Martial Arts World) World example: Martial Arts World (self-created) Inheriter: Songxi Taoist (Cause and Effect: Inherited Taoism)

I endured reading 100 chapters, it was too confusing. Author, your writing skills are not clear enough to describe events in one world. Who gave you the courage to intersperse the story lines of four or five worlds? (It seems that there will be more and more world lines in the future) If you imitate the human paradise, then imitate it seriously. When great gods write books, they write worlds one by one. Liang Jingru gave you too much courage, making you so promiscuous.

Whether or not the protagonist travels through time will not be of much help in improving his strength. Help is limited. No matter how much you practice or practice, it is still the same as before, and there is not much change. A little too grindy. The newly written one is also very ink-stained.

I won't talk about the protagonist, but let's talk about the power system. I only looked at the front and back of the chaotic batch (the essence of power is white, red, gold, blue and purple). The power of the gods is weaker than the one written, but it is actually used as a power bank. The protagonist has a golden-blue Shinto avatar and says that his full power is at most equivalent to a person who is not even a mage. It makes me laugh. The weakest golden righteous god is equivalent to the strongest yang god, who is an earth immortal. The nature of the power is golden and can affect the reality of matter, transforming stones into gold. The golden color is ghosts and gods who cannot interfere with reality. The pure yin wuji is only dark red at most, and the mage is only red with gold. All gold is the yang god level. For example, monks below the level of immortals generally cannot defeat gods of the same level in single combat without any other means, because monks of the same level only have the power of their own cultivation, and gods generally have the earth energy accumulated in the spiritual pool or the power transformed from faith. The concept of golden cyan is equivalent to the half-step god of Taoism and the half-step god of Shinto. Once all the power is transformed into cyan, it can lift up the kingdom of God (blessed land turns into a cave) in the sky. The power illuminates the earth and turns it into stars. In the West, it is called weak divine power.

How do you write something like a hammer and a stick here and there? One time I went to this world and another time I went to that world. I went to a lot of worlds. As a result, I couldn't feel it. The system's combat power was also in a mess. It made people uncomfortable to read it.

Does anyone still remember the protagonist's immortal cultivation, what magic weapons he has, and what spells he has practiced? 😏 Those who are dissatisfied with their integrity are practicing Shinto. It would be much better for the author to write Shinto from the beginning. Even if Shinto wants to write in Cthulhu style, it would be more harmonious. On the contrary, it is nondescript for Shinto to write like this 🤫

A very simple journey through the heavens, but so many frameworks set by the author make it self-contained. The more I read, the more confused I became.

It's very good. I like this book very much. Keep up the good work! !

It's so messy, it's dizzying to see. It was very painful to watch at the end. The three worlds were a mess, and I didn't even know which world the protagonist was in. The practice system is also messy and looks complicated. It's a pity that it is a good book, but it is destined not to be popular. I hope the author learned his lesson and look forward to the next book!

I can understand this messy batch. It really needs to be read carefully, but the problem arises here. Who has the patience to read online novels? So basically everyone who has watched it will say it's messy. In addition, the title and chapter titles are quite attractive, but that's about it.

The author should strengthen his storytelling ability. The inner artistic conception is so high, but he lacks the ability to transform it into a story that others can understand. It feels like a pity If the story can be told well, it is not impossible to raise the average level of online articles.

The first thing that needs to be affirmed is that the author's writing is very good, but when it comes to some minor flaws, has the author carefully thought about the use of the protagonist's golden finger? The division of world levels is not very clear. Without a standard, there is no way to measure others. The world line is a bit confusing. Although I can see that the author is trying hard to talk about one world after another, it is still not enough. Secondly, there is a hole dug in the protagonist's main world, but it is too deep. You can't explain it clearly and the readers can't see it clearly. Also, the force value is somewhat unclear. Is the protagonist a warlock? ? Shinto? ? ? I think the author should take the time to sort out the world gains for the protagonist, and then integrate the resources to give the protagonist a clear realm, such as immortality:? ? Shinto:? ? It stands to reason that the protagonist is taking the path of seizing the heavens to support himself, but now it is easy for us readers to forget your settings, and you have dug pits in every world, and you have forgotten it ㄟ( ▔, ▔ )ㄏ Finally, I hope the author will work hard (ง •̀_•́)ง, your creativity and ability are great, you have to believe in yourself

I open the bookshelf every day just to see if this book has been updated.

I saw that Chapter 98 was not working anymore. The author did a good job, but in a few well-written chapters, he added a little bit of trouble, and then the cycle continued. It's really not working anymore, it's like eating a few pieces of cake and then having shit in your mouth 😅

The idea, world setting, and writing are all good, but I just can't tell a story, and reading this book is like chewing wax. The author learns how to tell stories and has the potential to become a great fairy.

After watching it, I always thought it was pretty good! But some people commented that it was too confusing. I think there may be too many concepts, not popular enough, and the storyline is not "consistent", which is why it feels chaotic. 🤭🙂🙂

Author: The plot of Fusang in "The Supreme Treasure" written by you is great! It is one of the few books that I read with gusto even though the main character has a small role! The setting is great too! Your setting research is by far the most attentive author I have seen! The detailed settings are very impressive! Come on! Looking forward to your new book!

In some places, the main character is so written that it makes me speechless.

Jade Qing Bao Gao The gift of sincerity. Above the three realms, Brahma Qi Mila. The highest is the highest, the heaven of heavens. Yuluo Xiaotai, Jingshan Jing. The Miaomiao Golden Tower is filled with lush greenery and clear water. Xuanyuan Yiqi, the first of chaos. Among the orbs, there is mystery and mystery. The three enlightened scenes transformed into the heavens. Billions of innocent people, countless in number. Swirling buckets and calendar buckets, returning to the Wuchang. The majestic Fan, the sect of all Taoism. Daluo Yuqing, nothingness and nature. The most wonderful way, Yuanshi Tianzun.

We say that we are cultivating immortals, but we are actually cultivating gods. It is better to just say that we are cultivating gods.

When will the author publish a new book?

This book starts off much better than the previous one. And looking at the chapter names, it seems that the author's several books are all based on the same world view. This setting is very big.

I finally understand why this book is so difficult to become popular. It's because there are too many typos.

The New World is the Legend of Shushan Swordsman from Huanzhu Louzhu? Or the movie and TV series version?

The opening style reminds me of "Nine-Liu Idle Man". I don't know if the author is Jiucheng Junmajia.