Origin

Ahem. Let me clarify that I am a female video author, but I prefer male videos. The suggestions may not be very good, I hope the author doesn't mind. First of all, the plot of the book is good to read. But there are two bad points. First, because we use electronic reading, long paragraphs can easily look boring, so we can break them into paragraphs slowly and appropriately. Second, the use of author symbols is not very appropriate. Change the angle. For example, here you use a question mark to set up a question to make readers curious, but you use a period to end the association. It doesn't seem like there's that much newness. Secondly, the novel's conception and writing style are good, but there are relatively few or inappropriate foreshadowings, which somewhat affects the overall story. You can adjust and modify it appropriately. Well... No more... That's it. Final words: Come on, keep an eye on you!

Newbie, new book, I hope everyone will take care of the seedlings and give you a lot of support~

The title of the book is too weird and useless. The time travel directly at the beginning is okay, but too little is explained about the protagonist. It is completely unable to give people a concrete and intuitive image of the protagonist. It makes people feel that the protagonist is too fictitious and not concrete and real enough. The development of the plot is also a bit strange, and the logic of the events is a bit strange, which makes people feel a bit stiff. The novel lacks a strong and logical main line to guide the plot, so it always seems like something is missing.

The new introduction has been submitted, and it roughly describes the possible plot in the future. This is considered a spoiler... I hope my clumsy writing can bring you a wonderful story! Thank you to every book friend who has collected and paid attention Thank you to everyone who watched!

The title of the book needs to be changed, and the direction is: readers will be able to understand the main line of the novel at a glance; the introduction needs to be changed, and the direction is to extract the exciting content of the main line of the novel; the text: there is a problem with punctuation, and it is estimated that you do not have a clear main line, so I suggest you start with the most basic ones.

Not bad, support and have collected it.

Everyday two tickets are cheering. Keep up the good work!

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