Light and Shadow in the Writings of 80-Year-Olds

I'm actually not very good at reviewing urban genres, and I haven't watched much of them. I have read three chapters. In fact, there is a lot of text, and the writing is very detailed and realistic. It also uses some trivial things to flesh out the character image, which is very good. There are some problems in that the character image portrayed in all parts from the beginning is seriously inconsistent with the popular and professional event chosen. It is completely impossible to see that such a person would do such a thing. And it was very sudden. I have worked with people in the government for many years, and I know very well how difficult it is to write a red heart message that can attract nationwide attention. The protagonist just consulted the information on the Internet and wrote it, and did not excerpt some of the highlights to resonate with readers, so it was very unrealistic. Secondly, I read the first three chapters three times, and I really didn't find where the 1.2 Million came from. Did I make any omissions? Urban writing is both easy and difficult to write. Because everyone has life experience, it is easy to resonate with the writing. However, the disadvantage is that it is difficult to convince others if you rely on imagination without actual experience. I am still writing reviews very seriously, and I am still using my mobile phone. So, please review [Shen Nian Heavenly Kingdom]🙏

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C. [Too high emotions] The emotions in the article are too straightforward and passionate, lacking some deep and restrained expressions. For example, when seeing the national flag being raised at the same time, soldier A shouted loudly, I love you, the motherland, and soldier B saluted with tears in his eyes (chestnut raised inappropriately | ω)). However, when expressing emotions, in addition to being conveyed impassionedly, there is also a silent and deep contrasting expression, or a contrasting expression by others, or from shallow to deep, or allowing readers to experience a past event with the protagonist [such as the Republic of China student patriotic movement parade], in order to understand the emotion. Direct expression of patriotic feelings is too high compared to life emotions, so it is difficult to find feelings about the article from direct description.

The author's writing is quite difficult. In the first chapter, you need sailing experience to be so realistic, but after that, the protagonist's environment changes drastically. Whether there is a deeper meaning in the writing depends on the follow-up, but the intensity is not yet grasped. There must be a clear line between exposing society or playing with the world. I didn't understand the deep meaning after reading Chapter 10. Maybe there will be more developments in the follow-up. Mutual fans of my humble work "No More Regrets YF" ~

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B. [Plot fragmentation] Generally speaking, the editor may read the first few chapters when reading the article. This is the case for most novels. I will use the previous chapters to predict the commercial value of this article, what its general direction will be, and whether it is in line with the market. So the first few chapters are particularly important However, judging from the first few chapters of this book, you will feel that the setting up of events is a bit too [thin]. After reading it, you will find that it feels more like a mature man with certain social experience, smoking quietly, recalling the past, and then recounting his life, joy, anger, enthusiasm, and feelings. It will lack the sense of story of a novel. Most people who choose to read novels are pursuing those things in novels that are out of reach in life. Whether it's the thrill of success, the dual sense of being a scumbag, or the two things you can't get at the same time, or maybe your life is too dull and you want to experience a magnificent life in a novel. This makes it difficult to study the essence of novels on the market using reality

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