Ancient Romance

Awesome, I searched for Chen Dong and this novel came up. I thought it was a new book by Chen Dong. I didn't expect it to be the protagonist's name, which directly attracts traffic to this book. This operation is irritating.

After reading too much written by great masters, I have become very discerning. Not great, but not bad either. But I just don't have the same enthusiasm as when I first entered the pit. But after ten minutes of reading, it said that you can invest for free, so I will give you a recommendation. There are 6 votes in a day. I will basically forget to vote. I will give it to you when I think of it.

Search Chendong, why is this the first one?

Overall it's okay, but would it be better to revise the first chapter? It could be simpler before the time travel, but as the first chapter it still needs to be written well so as not to be too dissuading.

It is indeed a rare and good book! It is recommended that after writing 100,000 words, go through it again, this will make you progress faster! If I write too much in the future, it will be a troublesome thing when I look back.

Everyone feels that there is no need to be so busy putting it on the shelves. The great masters in Ergen only put it on the shelves after 100 chapters. Although they are not short of money, the feeling given to readers is very different. New authors need to improve in all aspects. Although it is indeed possible to put it on the shelf, it gives the impression that they are busy making money and will lose fans! Early failure!

I came from the Holy Ruins and have already finished two chapters. After reading the novel for more than ten years, I have a small suggestion here. The plot twist is a bit hasty and not well prepared. The emotions of each character are a bit explosive and abrupt, such as the section about the ruined Dantian. If the beautiful lady from Zhenbao Pavilion can say something later: "I hurt him and he shouldn't talk about that sword." It's his, and then the emotional expressions of each character after that will be reasonable. The rational indifference of the Bai family, the loyalty of Mr. Bai, and the tears of sympathy and regret of the young lady are all reasonable. Maybe the author has a full sense of substitution, but the readers don't have enough sense of substitution. In the future, the psychological expressions of the characters in the book can be referred to Jiangnan's works. This monk is very dangerous and very good, but no matter what, I still support new authors. I hope that our meager strength can create a platinum master and add a few more classics to online novels.

My nickname is Heiqing, and I was originally going to be a heinous character in the book, but our great Dragon Turtle writer (nicknamed God Demon) didn't write it as I wanted 😭 Regret

I would like to give the author a big heads up. It is best not to introduce the big picture at the beginning of a new book. Generally, it is difficult for readers to be interested in reading. The pattern must be unfolded step by step to arouse readers' interest in continuing reading. Of course, this is just a suggestion...

To be honest, I didn't want to read it until I finished the first chapter.

From Uncle Tong. Which epiphany plot in Chapter 4 is too embarrassing? The whole description is an old routine from I don't know how many years ago, and the two slogans should be changed. It's so cliche. Mao Lin looked at the stone and thought: Qiqi, are you blessing me? Don't worry, I will definitely live well. Thinking of this, Mao Lin's depression eased a lot. When his mind relaxed, a cool feeling spread from the Niwan Palace above his head. It turns out that Mao Lin was lonely in his previous life and had many obsessions in his heart. Now he has just experienced the cycle of life and death, and coincides with the loss and recovery of his lover's relics. Under the great joy and sorrow, his obsessions suddenly disappear, and he has no desire and no pursuit, which has a sense of the unity of nature and man in his previous life. Although it is only a few points, it is still a realm that many people dream of. I can't see anything now, but it will be a big help to Mao Lin's future cultivation. As a scumbag, I can only write like this. Anyway, just see what I mean. Now let's write a story about being reborn and yelling that I want to defy heaven, and then having a clear idea and enlightenment. This kind of plot is really unacceptable. Not to mention you made two such cliche sentences. I think the word "this is a sudden feeling" is wrong. It should be a breakthrough.

The first chapter seems to go smoothly. Although the time-travel plot is very conventional, the author wrote it carefully. As for the sensational part, it is a matter of opinion. I personally don't have much feelings about it. And the words of King of Soldiers have a strong military style, but the military is the romance of men. (Look carefully, I don't mean to criticize.)

I wonder if there are people who have entered Taoism through literature. If not, then poetry in this world only cultivates sentiments and is completely inconsistent with the law of the jungle.

Is that okay if you bring Chen Dong over to be your male supporting actor? Be careful that Ye Fan will cause trouble for you! 🤭🤭🤭

You are really good at pulling off strong men😅 In that case, let me say a few more words. If you are going to write online articles, you should know more about online articles. Read more novels, you don't have to read them in detail, but you should at least have an understanding of some basic routines. To be honest, it took me 2 minutes to read the first few chapters of yours. Why? It's because the routine you used is so cliche. From the second chapter until the end of the first conflict, all the storylines and characters are exactly the same regardless of their names. I've read at least a dozen books. The characters you describe are all standard templates. I want the defiant Long Aotian protagonist, the mindless and provocative dogleg, the fussy rich kid, and the self-righteous villain boss. It is right for newcomers to write books according to routines, but blindly writing according to routines will only lead to failure. It doesn't matter if the routine is a bit old, as long as the main characters and the development of things are reasonable. It's like the protagonist having an epiphany. You just said, "It's my fate. I can't help it." The protagonist has an epiphany. This is absolutely unreasonable. My suggestion is that the protagonist has experienced life and death, and has been sublimated by great joy and sorrow. Although it is ridiculous, there is still a trace of rationality. The same goes for Li Ke. Why he provokes the protagonist is because he has doubts about the protagonist's resurrection from the dead. Bai Yunfei stopped Wang Hu because he wanted to use this to attack the Wang family. I got to know the protagonist because he is young and has rich experience in actual combat. He is calm and calm in situations and can easily fall into trouble. The purpose of giving the protagonist the identity jade pendant is to give the protagonist the identity of the Bai family. In this way, although the routine is a bit older, the actions of all the characters are much more reasonable. Nowadays, many new writers only know how to copy the routines when writing books, and the characters they describe are all mentally retarded. Why? It's because everything develops in a reasonable way. If you want to change the previous chapters, I will give you a suggestion. You can change it according to my ideas, but do not copy it. You need to think about the characters you write. Let me tell you about the characters of these people when I wrote them. Take a look and pay attention to where there are any conflicts. Protagonist: I conceived it based on the Shushan leader Li Xiaoyao met in Sword of Sword One. There is a bit of indifference and a touch of master's demeanor. Li Ke: A selfish villain with a little cleverness. Bai Yunfei: A strategist who thinks he can master the protagonist. In his mind, the relationship with the protagonist should be that of a chess player and a chess piece. That's roughly it, you decide how to do the first few chapters. I can only give you some advice.

Dragon Turtle, please keep updating. I like this book very much. You can't give it to the eunuch. I once pursued a book I liked, but unfortunately the author gave it to a eunuch. Now, I have finally found a good novel. I hope Long Gui will stick with it. As long as you code enough 1 million words, I will give you a silver alliance immediately!

Why can't I join the book club group?

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