My Youth Love Story Is Very Problematic

[Non-professional] I am also new to writing. I have only submitted a few manuscripts to magazines before. I have wanted to write this fanfic for a long time because Mr. Hachiman always resonates with me, but for various reasons I always end it before I even start. It wasn't until I read the author's book that it made me want to write again (old love revived)? Let me share my humble opinion. First of all, the protagonist's character positioning is slightly distorted (actually, I'm not much better), and sometimes his actions are confusing. Secondly, if it is written in the third person, please remember to change the "I" in front of it to avoid poisoning new readers. The original plot can be added in the middle! Sorry for any nitpicks, and please point out anything wrong! Finally... Please give me one too! Bah Welcome to visit each other! I hope you can write what you want to express like Mr. Zaimuzha! (Your writing skills are probably much better than his) I wish you success.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

The writing is okay, but the role of the big teacher seems to have been taken away.

This book will be available on June 1st, so don't put it on your bookshelf and forget about it! Pingxia said, I'm so cute, how could I not make a first order 😌

My book was actually released... However, all the ***** vests were recycled 🙂. I was so angry that I deleted all my saved manuscripts, which made me stare 😐

So far in this book, this protagonist is considered the weakest time traveler in history. After traveling for so many years, his body is extremely weak and he has no abilities in all aspects. He has no strength in interpersonal relationships. Moreover, this protagonist still has a golden finger. This protagonist is very pitiful. He does not work hard and is artificial to death. He lives in his own world every day. In this world, people are narcissistic and find various reasons to escape reality. They think they are a time traveler and are superior to others, but at heart they are humble and cruel... I don't know why the author wrote a time traveler protagonist into such a walking zombie with no ideals, no goals, no hard work, and a contrived way of life. What is there to write about such a protagonist? I really don't like people. As a human being, no matter whether you travel through time or not, you always have to be attentive to life, and you can't be too pretentious. Can't you live a good and attentive life? Now that you have golden fingers, can't you improve your abilities in all aspects? It's time to make money, it's time to show off, it's time to open a harem and open a harem! You have to have a certain personality as a person, right?

Are you finally calling it quits? This kind of love affair usually doesn't succeed

I just want to say something about this way of opening and entering ministry that it is visually tiring. This kind of layout can only be said to be unpopular and can wait until it hits the streets. If this novel was written to make money, it would definitely be read, but if it was written just for fun, there would be nothing to say.

A year ago or two years ago, there was a shunwu fanfic that I was fascinated by... But it turned out to be TJ. I hope the author can finish it. Give Yukino and the hero an explanation and a result! No matter BE or HE, I will chase you until the end and spread the flowers!

I created a reader group, but why was it deleted by the backend after I posted it 😢

What a long title! There should be no mistake.

I imagined that the minister would be waiting for me at the school gate after school (´△｀)

I have gone bankrupt for the sake of the minister

What did you write? What is the heroine Yukinoshita still doing with Hikigaya? ? ? Is it the best arrangement to bring a cuckold to watch him? ? ? It's so funny and so poisonous☠️

It's very nice I'm looking forward to the foreshadowing and self-destruction

The first chapter gives people the feeling that there is no difference except that there are more people. Then, if the male protagonist realizes that this is a two-dimensional world but does not realize that it is a spring object, then how did he realize it? It can also be said that the male protagonist at the beginning cannot even be said to be the male protagonist, because at this time Dango's Gou has been rescued by the great teacher, and their intersection has begun. If the leader's spring object is missing, it will not be a spring object.

As a "god", why must he change himself and merge into the ants? ? ? Can't the protagonist stick to his own life? ? ? Must change? ? ? Even with a mask on? ? ? Friends - it's just because they are linked to interests.

I am afraid that I will never see the author Jun Shuanggen again in this life. . No daily update😭