Building a Ninja Village in the Yokai Era

I'd like to give you some advice. I don't know what the author thinks. Whether it's for fun or as a half-professional job, at the very least, please correct your basic attitude. Let's not talk about the writing, plot, characters, etc. Let's talk about the most basic things. Typos and omissions are the biggest taboos. No matter which novel it is, too many typos and omissions will never last. No matter whether you can succeed or not, please keep your attitude correct. At the very least, read it yourself and check whether the sentences make sense or whether there are too many typos.

I like this book very much, but looking at the way the author has updated it recently, I feel like it will be a book sooner or later.

If you don't want to read expository text, there should be no more than 5 dialogues in a chapter. What does this say? There are no character descriptions. After reading dozens of chapters, ask the readers who they remember except maybe the name of the protagonist. The character appears in Chapter 2 and then disappears. Are you really serious about playing a single-player game? There is no main contradiction, and readers are confused. Go directly to build a village at the beginning, and then watch you draw cards. It's on the shelves. Why did you get such a card?

I will just say three points. The protagonist is a person who has been good for nearly 40 years. This performance feels like a twenty-year-old person who has lived in vain for ten years in time (the 6-year period of youth is not counted). Author, you specially created a reputation setting for the sake of progress. What the hell is it for your own people? Reputation is more important, shouldn't it be recruiting people! Since you think that all the soldiers have souls and have problems with the title, why bring out the Iwa ninja? As long as Konoha's ninjas are not good enough, just to dig holes and create conflicts later?

I have endured the first update of the beast, but if you stop the update, eunuch, you are so fucked, you lied to me for several days of recommendation votes.

Come on 😍😍

This fan novel is good and very interesting. I hope the results will not be too bad. I also hope you will support me. I hope the author will persevere. Persistence is victory. I will give you all my recommendation votes. Come on, author, come on (ง•̀_•́)ง

I used to think that controlling insects is very powerful, but it's a pity that Aburame is too good at it. I wish the author could write more (｡ì _ í｡)

This author. . . If something happens to you, please let us know by posting a single chapter or something. If you don't update anything suddenly, you are really a Buddha.

Relaxed without losing the content, enjoyable without losing the content, keep it up!

The journey is getting better (⁄ ⁄•⁄ω⁄•⁄ ⁄) Well written. Keep writing. I will always support you (ಡωಡ)hiahiahia

The protagonist personally participates in eliminating the rebellion. In fact, it is just 5 qualified genin, plus one unqualified genin who may be a hindrance.

Such a young book, I would also recommend it to Pi Pi Jia. Is there any py deal?

You start with only one Madara, and you have to grab all the equipment.

"The courier is here!" The courier boy delivered the goods to your door "Oh, okay, it's here, here it is." The young author signed for the courier "So light? Who sent it?" At this time, a certain author remembered his profession. "I've long heard that Sha Diao book friends are so scary, but I didn't expect it to actually come." The young author was a little frightened. "Forget it, just die." The young author did not dare to express his anger and carefully opened the package. Sure enough, there were five silver flakes inside. At this time, the young author discovered that there were words on them. He was curious and saw three big words written on them, and read them out. "Recommended vote!!?"

Damn it, labor and management paid for this book to be fully booked for the first time and even sold tickets. Are you using it to punish the readers who like this book? Don't write if you can't insist on starting. Giving up halfway is the most disgusting thing. Even if something irreversible happens to you and you can't continue, you can at least say something. Is the inexplicable eunuch just teasing us? ?

The topic is okay and the writing style is fine. But a lot of psychological descriptions and logical descriptions are too procrastinating. Even if you say one thing in different words over and over again, it will already look like a bitch if you don't exaggerate it. To be honest, this actually affects the reading experience. For example, the camp chosen here is just about why the protagonist was chosen. It was mentioned three or four times in the previous and subsequent chapters, interspersed during the plot. After the end, a large section of content came out and was mentioned again. These few things were dragged out for a few hundred words. It's quite uncomfortable. I instinctively want to skip it quickly, but there are one or two sentences related to the plot that are very abrupt.

Why doesn't the protagonist let his subordinates teach ninjutsu? Does it have to be given by the system in order to practice?

As long as the author maintains this status, it doesn't matter if I order all of them!

Waiting for the update floor Please take good care of your health, and then update ten times! Recommend regular updates! For example, there will be an update at 10 am, an update at 12 am, an update at 3 pm, an update at 6 pm, and an update at 9 pm. This will save us from saying: Why hasn't it been updated yet? .

From the super god, I look at the eunuch now, and he returns in defeat

It's very beautiful, a very good idea. I'm fascinated by it. I hope there will be more updates every day.

Everything else about this book is good, but when will this damn fat servant get rid of him? He is lazy and has nothing to do, and he doesn't even have the most basic loyalty. Why should this fat man be so vicious and let him go back to be despised and starve to death! In other books, the fat man is at least loyal, caring for the protagonist, and has special skills, such as collecting gossip information. However, the fat servant in this book is not even grateful and loyal, and he has no ability at all. Can he get out?

To be honest, the name of the main character alone discourages me a lot. A wild girl on the roadside? ? ? Can this name also be used? I read so many books in Qidian that I was poisoned and died when I saw the name of the protagonist for the first time. Can you be serious? Farewell

Not bad, not bad. The image of the protagonist as a fool has been deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. Author, please take your time and enjoy it. Farewell! !

I heard that the author is a master of external websites? It's true that foreign monks are good at chanting sutras. The various recommendations given by Qidian seemed to be free of charge. I have been a eunuch for a month now, and I still have a recommendation position. It's a pity that the author's public chapter is not good enough. He went to the border to build a ninja village. It also reminds people of the plot of building a city on the edge of the Warcraft Forest more than ten years ago. Then there was the eunuch.

Author, can we update more?

The fat man at the beginning is greedy for life, afraid of death, disloyal, incompetent, only knows how to eat, likes to shirk, and is lazy. The protagonist likes him very much, dotes on him, and never forces him.

Dear author, will you dismantle the CP of the original work? In various senses, I think it is better not to dismantle it. Let's use people from the real world as the CP of the protagonist. I have an opinion in this regard. After the Ninja Village continues to grow, you can consider expanding your territory and transforming the abandoned fief below you into a city of the original world's indigenous people to provide shelter and form part of the indigenous army. Spreading to the indigenous world, whether it is cannon fodder, or maximizing profits without system restrictions (to avoid insufficient recruitment of system personnel), it is always better to have indigenous ninjas) You can't stay in the village forever. People like Senju Hashirama will definitely have peace in all senses. If there is no unity, wouldn't such a huge power be in vain? Also... Also, these are just my opinions. The author, please don't do anything. Your book is great. This kind of alternative Naruto is really good-looking (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡As a Naruto fan, I can't say why I don't support it. Come on (ง •̀_•́)งCome on (ง •̀_•́)งCome on (ง •̀_•́)ง! ! ! !

It's a novel with a good intention, and both the author's writing style and imagination are within the standard. It's a pity that the golden finger is too wide, so I don't know if it's cool or not, but from my point of view, it's a pity! I don't know if the author is a ruthless person. If so, if I overhaul it, I think it will definitely be several times better than what it is now. At least it should be no less than the 50-50 version of Uzumaki~ Let me give you some suggestions that I don't know are useful or useless. Of course, it can be regarded as my personal opinion~ First of all, it depends on whether the author wants to write a two-dimensional fan fiction or a fantasy novel with a two-dimensional skin~ If it is the latter, then It is best to eliminate the appearance of Naruto character cards. After all, this kind of cross-dimensional character exchange is really exciting. Those who want to watch fantasy may not necessarily like this setting, so only the core of Naruto (chakra, blood succession boundary, jinchūriki, etc.) Will be retained~ If it is the former, then it is best for the character cards that appear in the early stage to be relatively funny, but with moderate strength, and will not affect the plot~ For example, Hidan, his strength is okay. It's still funny. The most important thing is that his main immortal ability is just in line with the needs of the protagonist in the early stage~ Of course this is just a matter of self-perception. Anyway, any other character can be used, but Uchiha Madara is definitely the worst choice. The king of bombs at the beginning is really not suitable for this book. It is a pity that you took such pains to introduce the background. Introduction, and pave the way for the world view~ Okay, that's a bit exaggerated. After all, the premise of all this is whether the author will reopen~ If not, just think that I have to complain~ Anyway, the setting king in Dianniang is not short of the author, and it is not news that he finally fell into the street~ Although Dianniang's imagination is Wang, but the design and writing of the plot are also important. Think about it, those great masters don't care whether the plot is cliched or whether they are trying to trick you into reading the book, but there is absolutely nothing wrong with the plot layout~ ps: It is best to have an outline when writing a book. You can't go very far just relying on your own yy. If you write and write, you will get bored~ If there is an outline, even if Madara appears so early, it can actually continue to be interesting. But judging from the following plot, it is obvious that the plot only cares about having fun~ Sweat, it is a bit too much to say, but the wish is good. I hope to see this book (or the remake) on the homepage again~ The above~