A Butcher Roams the Martial World

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[Book Review] "There are people slaughtering in rivers and lakes" - Liu Mei Where there are people, there are rivers and lakes, and where there are rivers and lakes, there are right and wrong. Where there are right and wrong, there are more knights. Where there are knights, there will be rumors and fame. "The Massacre" begins with the "Huxin Island Incident" as the starting point, bringing out the treasure of Emperor Hui, the murder of the Yao family, and the tragic death of the deputy escort of the Zhenwei Escort Bureau. The main characters are arranged to enter the scene one by one - Yushu Linfeng, the chivalrous and tender Ling Yufeng, the talented and talented Ling Yufeng. The unparalleled and secretive Chu Jiangyu, the suave and affectionate Shen Yang, the young Nangong Jie who has a clear sense of right and wrong, the taciturn Yan Peiwei who has a clear distinction between love and hate... A series of characters with distinctive personalities emerge from their lines, actions and styles! Advantages: The author lays the foundation layer by layer, peels off the cocoon, and explains the cause and effect one by one. Linked to each other, advancing step by step, it is fascinating. The author is very successful in portraying the main characters' personalities, mainly because the author has a profound knowledge of martial arts and has a perfect grasp of the characters' lines. The martial arts moves presented in the article are novel and unique, and the fighting scenes are described in detail and flowingly. There are many quotations from scriptures in the article, and the naming of characters is very particular about the choice of words and sentences. These are places worth seeing. Disadvantages: As a pure martial arts novel, the storyline is a bit cliché, and some of the extra-scriptural descriptions are quite modern, making it a bit easy to get into trouble, resulting in a slightly weak Jianghu atmosphere. With orderly origins and different wills, the image of rivers and lakes is naturally a matter of benevolence and wisdom. The bloody storms are the rivers and lakes, the right and wrong are the rivers and lakes, the rolling chivalry is the rivers and lakes, and the tenderness and affection are the rivers and lakes. "The Rivers and Lakes Are Slaughtered" shares with us a world where the trees are quiet but the wind is still blowing. Ignoring some flaws, this is a book worth reading. Due to time constraints, I will only read Chapter 17 of this article for the time being. Since I have agreed to update my review today, I will express my opinions here. Moreover, I have rarely been exposed to martial arts works, so I hope you will forgive me for any misunderstandings!

Initial evaluation: 80 points. Number of words read: 50,000+; 25 chapters. 1. Basic perception Traditional martial arts, Jin Yong Gu Long's style of writing. This book tells the story of the young talent Ling Yufeng. Because of his great fame, he was involved in a conspiracy. In order to remove the suspicion, he went to Yanyu Tower alone to defend himself, but all the heroes in the world wanted to get rid of him, including Jin Yiwei, who were hostile to him. At this time, there are also some people who believe in him and are willing to follow him to uncover the truth, so the story begins here... 2. Highlights of this book 1. After consulting a lot of information, I chose the period of Wei Zhongxian, the same period. I chose a familiar city, and my words are meaningful; 2. The character creation is generally good, including Shengxue Ling Yufeng in white, Chu Jiangyu, the owner of the misty rain building, Yang Nianru who speaks uprightly, Yan Peiwei, the protector in black, Chu Jiangyan, a tricky girl, and Liu Wanqing, a talented woman in the world, each with their own characteristics. , The combination is reasonable; 3. The plot of the first act is generally smooth. Although there are some flaws, it is generally quite good, and what needs to be explained is also explained; (Xiaobai may not accept such a complicated appearance method) 4. The visual sense is quite strong, and the fighting scenes It's quite complete; 5. It starts with a weird conspiracy and has a certain degree of suspense (it would be better if the introduction could be a little more polished, it's too short) 6. The original martial arts is not perfect, but the atmosphere of the martial arts is quite strong, at least the direction is correct. 3. Several flaws 1. In the dialogue in the first chapter, names such as "Li Ping" are not familiar to everyone. Without proper explanation, people's faces will be blurred. Even the characters passing by must be described, not just a joke; 2. In the story of the third chapter, "he" is used in several places without clear reference. The story is the story, try to use the name; the whole story is too perfunctory to protect business and eliminate theft? If the story is told like this, it would be better to call the whole book "Slaughtering the Rivers and Lakes" and complete it; 3. The falcon stares at the chickens, but the young man in black only faces Ling Yufeng. This problem is universal: the wording is not precise; Nangong Jie uses the female idiom of "sharp teeth and sharp mouth"? Isn't it better to talk with each other? 4. "The laughing knife, the undefeated murderer twenty years ago?" This sentence seems to have no problem, but given the context, the laughing knife is obviously a kind of sword technique. This may be the biggest problem of the book, which is specious, ambiguous, and unsatisfactory; 5. There is no special description of important objects, such as a certain letter or some kind of physical evidence, which is a bit left and right, resulting in discrete scenes. Although it is not easy to detect, you will feel that everything is the focus; 6. The martial arts moves still seem a bit thin, and it is difficult to feel where Ling Yufeng's unique skills are, and they are not prominent enough. 4. Personal Suggestions 1. The most outstanding thing about Gu Long's articles is the dialogue, commonly known as "fighting the machine". This is a very superb skill. If you want to write it, you must listen to the dialogue between the two people from the perspective of the third person present, and every sentence You must listen very clearly, otherwise it will be counterproductive, become a failure, and make the reader confused; it is important to use precise words and clarify the semantics, and the first chapter is still a little short of success; 2. "Rush to Hangzhou" and "rush to Hangzhou" are completely two usages, one is modern and the other is In ancient times, since it is about spreading martial arts, it is recommended to use all ancient vocabulary; 3. Please use dividing lines when changing scenes. The spaces will be automatically deleted, which affects the reading experience; 4. In Chapter 11, a dialogue like "I still want to rely on you, can you still rely on me?" Is not consistent with your identity. I hope you can use your heart. Ask, at least "Do you still want to deny it? Can you still deny it?" People of every age group must consider what they will say; 5. Although there is no problem with the characters introduced in the dialogue, if there are too many and they are only touched upon, it will make people feel confused. 5. Overall evaluation Score: [80] (For details, please refer to the second edition of the roadside evaluation circle scoring rules) Suitable for: (senior) Lao Bai, physical publishing, TV drama adaptations In terms of plot and rhythm alone, 80 points should not be a problem, but in terms of dialogue and words, it is still lacking half a point. Fortunately, the number of words is not too many at present, and there is still room for perfection, or we can pay attention to it in the future. For persistence, the score of this work has been raised from 79.5 To 80. I hope the author can still work hard for this half point! If we spend more time on characterization, look for prototypes, highlight individuality, and be more truly free and easy, the quality of our works will rise even further. (The level of passers-by is limited, the comments are purely amateur, based on personal preferences, for reference only)

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Rating: Plot: 85 This book is a male novel, with a good sense of romance and a compact plot. Some of the routes starting from the protagonist can quickly get to the theme, but I think that in the plot transition part, adding human stories will make it more immersive. For example, everyone likes Jianghu because there are all kinds of passionate legends about Jianghu, as well as love that can be sung and cried, and there is a kind of cohesion that everyone has a heroic spirit. Of course, the plot part belongs to the author's point of view and imagination, and is not forced. Writing style: 93 The author's writing style is very literary, easy to understand, and contains connotations, and a kind of emotion from the world. But from the perspective of character portrayal, I think some iconic things of the characters can be added to make readers more aware. Overall, it is great! Cool point: 80 The last part is the fun part~ In male videos, I think the cool part is very important Whether it is the writing style or the plot, the part about torturing the scumbag should be what everyone likes to watch. Of course, this is my personal opinion. The struggle between the good guys and the bad guys is definitely inevitable in the world of martial arts. I think it can be a little more detailed. I haven't watched much and I don't know much about male videos, so I apologize for any bad comments~ In short, it's a strong Amway

The author's writing style is excellent, he has a high level of refinement of words and sentences, and the transitions are seamless. In reading, Gu Long's martial arts style will be more obvious, but it is not plagiarism, but a natural inheritance. In this regard, the narrative perspective has always been a wide-angle bird's-eye view, which can be a bit stressful when there are many characters and events. The author's writing style should make some changes in rhythm to make it more perfect. For example, the delicacy of Jiangnan and the emerging woman are in harmony with each other. In addition, the true meaning of martial arts lies in inversion. A character with a perfect personality actually skews the author's in-depth understanding of the world. In addition, I don't have many suggestions for this book. The subsequent author should make it more perfect. Mutual fans of my humble work "No More Regrets YF" ~

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"Drunk and singing frivolously" - Jia Sheng's mourning time Riding the wind to the ninth level, the young man comes with the moon in his arms The sword is tested by light frost, the autumn water is cold together There are people in the rivers and lakes who are drunk, singing wildly outside the Great Wall The south of the Yangtze River is not expensive, the desert has the setting sun Three spring swallows are startled, and the three winters are gone. Pass, ride alone through the wilderness Be young and cherish it, drink horses in the vast sea Drunk and sing to yourself, waving thousands of gold like gold mud Going thousands of miles away with a sword, the fragrance of three feet is enough Breaking Messi to give to old friends, leaving the Nanshan valley to hate Today we don't see the ancient heroes, they laughed foolishly and then became romantic and proficient To the martial arts, the chivalry is immortal and will last forever! Finally, the great Zhou thief minister asks for investment, collection, comments and recommendations! The next book will be about Xianxia😊

As a martial arts fan, I always have a feeling for martial arts, and I always have a sincere respect for martial arts authors. The chivalrous knights who once dominated the world are now gradually declining, but the author's persistence is admirable! When I first read the title of the book, I thought it was a bloody world with countless killings. Looking through it, it's not! It's like returning to the old world, like a world constructed by Mr. Gu Long. If you look closely, it's not the case! It has its own unique way, using delicate brushwork and multi-faceted rendering to make full and vivid characters appear on the paper and be announced to the outside world. For example, the protagonist Ling, the young master, has been prepared for many times. When he appears in front of a large audience, he is dressed in white clothes. The image of an elegant noble prince has been deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. (At this moment, I can't imagine where his sword should be placed. I always feel that it should be somewhere out of sight.) Where there are people, there are rivers and lakes, and rivers and lakes are the rivers and lakes of Jianghu people. The portrayal of a Jianghu man, besides appearance, besides wielding swords and swords, what else is there? That is words, that is, talking nonsense. As the saying goes, words are the voice of the heart. As the saying goes, what is inside must be outside. What kind of character will have what kind of language expression. There is no doubt that the author did it very successfully. The plot progression of the novel is mostly expressed in the form of dialogue, which directly highlights the inner world of the characters. This is far more intuitive and powerful than an inner monologue! The dialogues of the characters in the book often appear in the form of short sentences, which are concise and powerful, and can resonate more with readers. The plot of the novel is perfectly controlled. The opening chapter takes the Lake Island case as a starting point, pushing the protagonist Ling to the forefront. Then, under the cloud of doubts about Emperor Hui's treasure, big cases of the Yao family were thrown out one after another, and the world was shocked by the joke, and then involved the long-standing secrets of the world... One case after another was linked to each other like a cloud and mountain fog, and one after another the cocoon was peeled off to make the truth known to the world, and then suspicions arose again and again... From beginning to end, the story firmly held the readers' hearts! At this point, if I insist on talking about the shortcomings of this book, I personally feel that the author's writing operation often has a slight mark at the turning point. However, the shortcomings do not hide the good points. Overall, this is an excellent book!