Establish a Clear Path and Set One's Mind

After reading Chapter 12, there are some things I can't say and feel unhappy about. 1. The indigenous protagonist is inherently unlikable, and the protagonist has a bad personality. Although he can be said to be diligent and thoughtful, the protagonist also does not know how to consult with teachers, visit friends, and practice sutras. The first step in Qi training is to get angry. The talented protagonist is really thoughtful and has the demeanor of Buddha enlightening under the Bodhi tree. 🐮B 2. The author deserves to be a student of history, but unfortunately he learned how to fight in the palace. But the article cannot only have conspiracy calculations, but also basic background settings and character styles. I was confused in the first dungeon. Why is there a mission? The author at least has an explanation. Where did the first spell that appeared, the audio-visual spell, come from?

The dynasty occupies one-fifth of the continent. It would take countless months to fly across the continent with immortals. Why is it only a few thousand miles from the north to the central capital, which does not meet the setting of the upper world. The area of ​​the dynasty designed in this way is too small. . . .

After reading more than ten chapters, what I don't understand is: 1: Why did the protagonist suddenly learn a spell, and he was kicked out just after he felt the energy! Two: The protagonist is involved in the struggle between the master and apprentice and the aristocratic family. The aristocratic family uses the protagonist to suppress the master, but why does the master and apprentice not fight back? ! The aristocratic family has not reached the point where it can cover the sky with one hand! Three: The protagonist takes the blame and is sent on a mission, but a person who just feels angry and has no skills to eliminate evil spirits is not seeking death? ! The master-disciple lineage didn't show any expression? Even if you protect me secretly! Only the protagonist knows about the protagonist's golden finger! What's more, the viewer is also a good friend of the protagonist's grandfather? Even if you can't be promoted, you still have to protect your life! Author, you don't explain anything clearly, which really makes me feel more and more frustrated as I read it. It's disgusting to forcefully push the plot from God's perspective. You say you write about reality, but I don't think what you write is realistic at all. It's too superficial. You haven't dealt with the connection well. You are eager for quick success and quick gain.

The beginning is very discouraging, there are too many inner dramas, and they are all inner dramas with an explosion of negative energy. The protagonist has no courage and diligence in practicing.

I just read the beginning of this book, which is very similar to Dao Zheng Zheng, but the author's writing style is still not up to standard. If you want to write a novel about immortality, you should at least read a few Daozang novels to enrich yourself first, otherwise you won't be able to write it and it won't have the flavor. You should also read classical immortal novels written by others. For example, Xu Gongzi Shengzhi's book is a true novel about immortality. Why I say it is an immortal novel, because it is an immortal novel that truly breaks away from the core of martial arts. It is no longer about fighting and killing, but about real cultivation of immortality, especially his Taishang Chapter. The current Xianxia novels are said to be Xianxia, ​​but in fact they are still martial arts. They have just changed the skin and amplified the force, but the essence has not changed. On the other hand, if you want to integrate these schools, the biggest difficulty lies in Honghuang Liu, because Honghuang Liu is the masterpiece of Shenji after reading many traditional Chinese works and myths. It is because he was so comprehensive that the structure of Honghuangliu was already so perfect that later generations could not make major changes and could only tinker with it. This also led to the decline of Honghuangliu because it was difficult to produce high-quality products. If the author wants to integrate it well, he should read more traditional Chinese myths and classics. The most important thing is to read more Taoist canon, because the only thing that can overhaul the ancient world is the Taoist immortal system. After all, this is a traditional Chinese religion, and it has been dedicated to compiling China's mythological system for thousands of years. Moreover, many things in Dao Zang are ready-made and can be directly used in novels.

Nowadays, all novels have protagonists with a child mentality and no desire to read them at all. The protagonist of your book is very familiar but stiff, mechanical, and soulless. The scheming villain in the first chapter is better than a pig's foot, smart and understanding of the world.

Just like the title, someone else's editor came to poach me personally, but here I just closed the book without saying anything in advance. I have never seen such a thing as an editor. I want to go to a place that will treat me with the most basic respect. Readers who want to read a book in the future can just search the title of the book directly on the search website. We apologize for any inconvenience caused.

In fact, I haven't read a single word of this book 😅. After reading the book review, it's not my favorite style and I plan to leave. Because the critic below is so right, I plan to say a few words. This book is the author's first book and has already written 2.8 Million. If the author is not full time, I recommend writing until the end. Regardless of whether the data is good or not, you can understand the structure of writing a complete book and what problems you will encounter. Which mistakes were made, which areas drove away customers and which were explosive points, are very meaningful for the next book. And according to my experience, the author of the first tj will find it easier to write articles in the future. Readers also like to take a look at previous articles when choosing an author.

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After reading more than a dozen chapters, the writing is good, but the story is too poor, especially when compared with the writing. The first reason is that the author has limited experience and cannot write anything. The second reason is that the author repeatedly emphasizes that he should write some of his own thoughts. The article is not for primary school students. From what the author said, he feels more like a child. If the author insists on thinking so, why bother publishing it? Can you just read it yourself after writing it? Speechless, no wonder 3 million words are still so cold. No matter how good the writing is at the end, the strength in the front will persuade me to quit.

This, the introduction is very impressive and eye-catching; I looked at the number of words, oh, so fat; I looked at the comments, it was just over three digits, this, whether you deleted the post or banned it, the comment area has more than 3 million words but less than 500, and the results are somewhat not good.

Let me post a post, author, writing a novel is not about writing a thesis or an expository essay. The first two or three hundred chapters are fine, but the whole following chapter is your written discussion, or a description of the development history of Yiqimen. Please remember that readers are not here to read history books. In addition, when writing novels, don't bring too much of your own thoughts, and don't try to instill your own opinions into reading. We are not idle. Come to class, good novels all use characters and stories to metaphor something, but it is better for you to express your point of view directly and discuss it throughout the whole chapter. Originally, the audience for cultivating immortals in ancient times was small. If the author wants to write about cultivating immortals in ancient times well, I suggest the author read it to the end and read it several times.

In fact, what fascinates me most when reading fairy tales is his thoughts on cultivation, cultivating the Tao rather than cultivating immortals. Among them, the one about sword cultivation is the most resonant. It is the most similar way of cultivation to the feeling of unity between man and nature. It's not that I'm too supreme to forget my feelings. The feeling of human beings blending into the sky is like exploring the heaven as a human being. I think this is like the feeling of an immortal. The sky is too big and the Tao is too big. When humans merge with the sky, it's like a drop of water melting into the sea. So I still have to maintain a human mood to explore the way. Only then do I feel that I won't get lost. Like Asking the Mirror, Rebirth in the Mythical World of Immortal Cultivation, and Path of the Swordsman, I really like their feeling.

Don't write narration, don't write about psychological activities. When you have to write, use description instead. , Veterans will add a person to write dialogues to express hesitation, experts will write scenes Narrations and psychological activities have existential meanings, and novices often abuse them in writing, so the warning for novices is not to write, use description and dialogue to support the story, and then write three or four books like this , let's use narration and psychological activities If you still don't understand, let me give you an example Zuo Gong thought in his heart, xxxxxxx Zuo Gong's lips wriggled a few times, wanting to speak, but still fell silent Zuo Gong remained silent , at the end of the sentence, he said, "What are you hesitating about? Do you have any choice?" The room became more and more stuffy, Zuomong tugged on his collar, and the clock on the wall ticked every time, which made Zuomong even more annoyed. He tugged on his collar again, staring at the table, as if the answer was written on the table.

The author can still write so many chapters with this achievement! He's a great guy. Please subscribe. I hope you will work hard for the next book and don't give up

There are all kinds of problems, all the women the pig's feet touch are..., Yue Linglong, Shan Hui, that princess from the Dragon King, they are all inexplicable

It's not a time-travel novel. Who can read this now?

More than sixty chapters later, I am still spinning in my own body. Cultivation as an immortal means competing with myself. How can I become an immortal? No matter how stupid you are, you can't keep talking to yourself. Books are for people to read, not for masturbation. A purely self-entertaining author.

Watching it for the second time, I reached Chapter 8 and couldn't stand it anymore. A rhythm that drives people crazy. A little ant worries about others harming him all day long. It is true that someone is plotting against you, so I just want to ask: What can you do? Are you dissatisfied? Can you resist? This kind of protagonist borrows the words of Brother Fly: You eat shit.

It's all bullshit

The author owns all the bad things about Xianxia

I laughed so hard, and my tone was so loud that I got a writer level of 1.

It's a pity that I'm born in the 90s, and you wrote it for those born in the 00s, otherwise I would read it all

The new book has been successfully signed on other platforms, which is equivalent to internal promotion. It will not be updated here, nor will it be updated if it is re-listed. Original title: Song Dynasty Royal Publisher New title: The Royal Publisher of the Song Dynasty The pen name is still the same. I don't leave you here, I have my own place to stay. Bye bye.

The writing is too bad, it feels too different.

Book reviews are not very friendly, just ignore them.

He was poisoned at the beginning, and if he wanted to learn from Dao Zhengfeng, he could engage in a battle between master and disciple and the family line, but the master and disciple lineage of Dao Zhengfeng at least gave him some protection and Taoism in the early stage. What about this novel? If it weren't for that bead at the beginning, I probably wouldn't even be able to enter the Taoist temple. Everyone in the entire Taoist temple would teach the protagonist how to enter the Taoist temple, and they would just wait for the protagonist to practice blindly on his own, and then he could directly destroy the Taoist temple.

The writing is not very good. The protagonist has been cultivating immortality for hundreds of years, but his mind is just that of a slightly more mature mortal. He is not decisive in killing, and he has no courage to pursue the truth. I don't know how this kind of trash can become an immortal.

God is not above the immortals, but before them

You, a monster, level up very quickly. I'm poisoned.