I Have a Great System

Author, you should either use third person or first person, not both at the same time. The writing is also not good, just like primary school students writing essays. Writing is not your thing. If you continue like this, you will not even be able to afford food, so you should stop writing first. It's not too late to write after you find a job, come on (ง •̀_•́)ง!

Look at the difference between my works and yours. It's easy to understand and bring into the plot. One by one,

After reading one chapter, there are all kinds of grammatical errors, and I can't even read smoothly. It always makes people laugh, predicting that the author is a junior high school student 🤫