No. 13, Laoxiang Street

Cheers to the author, after all, they are also books of the same period, let's share the popularity of each other. I hope that I can write better and better as I write, as if I am a god 😃

In the article, I only saw that the small store has just started to gain a foothold, and I hope it can develop and stand up quickly. The current main line is that the protagonist participates in various strange events and serves as a node connecting various events. The protagonist's ability should be to master various alien beasts in the Book of Mountains and Seas, and can turn people into alien beasts. There are also several powerful alien beasts, and they have a good relationship with them. They do everything. The protagonist's own ability is not outstanding enough. Think about it, you have no ability, how can you convince the capable alien beasts? Therefore, this point needs to be described well. I think that the previous experience of collecting and dealing with strange beasts can be interspersed with the main line, and the story about the strange beasts can be described using narrative techniques, which will make it more readable. My opinions are for reference only, I still hope the author can write well 👍👍👍

To downplay the topic in the opening on the 13th, let me tell you a logic. This is a very scary and scary reminder, but it is not scary enough. It is equivalent to destroying the supernatural (quiet), just talk about it a few words. The writing is mature and not childish. I'm just talking about your starting layout.

It's great. I haven't seen such an interesting supernatural article in a long time. Come on, the author.

The plot is a bit tighter, the plot develops a bit too fast, the characters and actions change too quickly and the plot is not delicate enough, and it looks a bit Turkic. The details are a little lacking, but considering that it is acceptable for a new author, I suggest you read carefully the books of other authors who are somewhat famous. (Any type can be used! Refer to how other people express the details and how to write the scene naturally, but I don't want the author to learn from other people's mistakes 🙂) Others are pretty good. I hope the author can write better and better.

😏 We are all writing about offices, so we came to take a look and support our colleagues to keep warm - and then I found that this book is actually very good, the writing is very smooth, and the description is in place. It is a good book that can be read. I have to learn from this boss's writing style. I am now collecting and reading the book.