Second Grade Martial Artist Qiao Fox

Already recommended for collection~Support and support~ Dada, the plot of our book is very good, I like your plot and story, thieves like that~ And for the great cause of signing the contract, I want to give you a few small suggestions~ There are a lot of punctuation and typos in the first few chapters, but the first few chapters are really important. You can read it a few times and revise it, I believe it will be effective~ Then the image modification of our characters can be a little simpler. If you can't read it smoothly, it will draw points in the book~ The protagonist's emotions in the book are very accurate, but our little fox and the protagonist Dada cry at the beginning and the other is indifferent. They use too much force. If you change it a little bit, it must be great~ Hey, let's work together. These are my personal opinions and do not affect my love of Dada's books~

After reading the first few chapters, I found that the style of the whole article is more fairy-like. I personally prefer this kind of writing style. I hope that in the future you can write more excellent works without hesitation, write with spirit and spirit 🤭

I didn't want to read it at first, but after reading a few chapters, it was so delicious😁

I am the author of "Recycled Explosion". I am here to comment based on your request for mutual review. Please let me know first that I am toxic. The first niche subject Since the background of your plan is currently about experiencing the immortal world and being purified in the world of mortals, the story is probably that maggots fell from the sky. These maggots were flies before or are the key to turning into flies. Normally, you show affection and warmth, but at critical moments, you become a beauty in anger. The elements in the subject matter are nice to look at, but they are too one-dimensional. Second theme elements Since your theme elements are few and the outline frame is still small, you will find it more and more difficult as you write. The reason is that the layout is too small, so that if you know the names of cats and dogs in a town, it will be a headache. If you have nothing to write about, your talents will be exhausted. Expanding your horizons can solve problems. Third, the description of the fighting scenes is single and vague Although I am not sure about your gender, your delicate writing style is similar to that of urban romances in most female videos. The writing is delicate but cannot be written freely. There is no exciting place that can make people suddenly move to tears, and it cannot burst into flames. For example, "Xiling Empire" Compared to your sweet couple, there are more surprises and touches, and the scenes and backgrounds are very successful! Success is delicate and failure is delicate! Remember! Men have to be fierce sometimes! If someone looks at you harshly, you'll kill his whole family! And then you still like to get in the crowd, and you are not afraid that you will not be able to write! I'm afraid you can't write it! As the saying goes, chivalrous and tender, without chivalry, you will be a big sissy! Women can be unruly, arrogant and even the world-destroying devil, but they must help and highlight the protagonist at critical moments! A book without a protagonist is like a book without a soul! But the prominence of your protagonist is not obvious, because there are too many other plots and the pressure is too heavy! For a book to become truly popular, it must have a wide audience! And it's concise and impressive at the same time! Okay, this is the end of the comments. I will express it later depending on the situation. After all, there is not much to say about a book with fifty or sixty chapters. If you plan to write a slow-burning book with thousands of chapters, the current layout is enough for the time being. However, if the map is not updated, and there are no new items and conflicts, it will look... Watery! Convention The first couplet: Man's original nature is coquettish, The second couplet: The chants of things are in the same phase. Hengpi: Such chant~ "Just drink this bowl of shit-green poisonous milk!"

I have invested in my favorites, come on, thank you for leaving a comment on my Dot Circle post, although it is an advertisement... The idea is very good, and the writing is also good. I wish you will sign the contract as soon as possible, and I will be rewarded. Please come and support me too

It's very well written, keep up the good work! ! ! 😜😜😜

Come on, fairy😰😰

I came here from "Emperor's Ancient Illustrations" and collected it. The writing is beautiful.

Dear, here I come, let me give it a try first~ If you feel good, I will send you two tickets from time to time every day. If it doesn't suit my taste, I may only give you two tickets today~ Come on!

Thumbs up, the writing is elegant and smooth, rare, keep it up.

The subject matter is very good and the writing is beautiful. Come on~ I hope the little fox and the male protagonist can sprinkle a lot of sweet candies.

Already collected! 12 Votes cast! Come on, author!

One chapter is too little, at least two chapters, it's not enough to follow 😎😎

The author writes happily and the readers enjoy reading it. This is the online article that people want to read. Come on, bring us more happiness!

Very interesting work! Collected permanently! Take your time and watch! Come on update! Welcome to visit us again!

Return visit and collect! Don't worry, I will definitely write it down!