Fantasy Smoke and Cloud

It's best not to stop updating too many times as it won't accumulate enough readers' attention. The content seems okay. From a reader's perspective, it's not a very attractive beginning.

I'll check in. Come on, author!

Why don't you write anymore? It's a bad habit to stop updating.

If I were just reading a book, I would keep reading. Now? I really can't stand it.

Qidian's first comment is to share my personal views on the first ten chapters I just finished reading. As a fun plot with a big face, the routine was the same both times. They looked down on the protagonist and started fighting whenever they disagreed. The conflicts in the process were not very sharp and there was a lack of foreshadowing, so that there was no pleasure of spitting out a breath of bad breath after being slapped in the face. The second coolest point is Goldfinger, but it seems that its role is not amazing enough so far. Moreover, the soul of Goldfinger is a cute girl, and her interaction with the protagonist should be more interesting. Then, judging from the plot, the protagonist's character should be arrogant and a bit arrogant, but such character traits have not been transformed into personality charm, and so far there is no character who can make people shine. In terms of characterization, the old magician is too impulsive and reckless, which seems inconsistent with his age and status. Sluo, a villain, is so loyal in the end that he lets his opponent send the protagonist away first. Please forgive me if I am wrong. I will give you a recommendation vote and wish the author will become a god soon.

I think it's very well written and I'll give you two recommendation votes.

Well, I read the first chapter carefully and found that your writing is very confusing. The story is not compact at all, and the background of the characters is not clearly explained. Why the protagonist is still at Level 2 after three years was not mentioned; Little Shitou seemed to be inspired by just one glance; Why the protagonist vomited blood was not mentioned; The protagonist's father said "you wait" before and then said "father" which is contradictory. The teacher was in class and a female classmate punched the male protagonist, causing severe pain all over the male protagonist's body, but the teacher said nothing. The dragon came out a little abruptly. The sudden appearance of two languages ​​​​is also difficult for me to understand. I am fifteen years old and can't speak?