A Magical Empire of Planes Starting from a Song of Ice and Fire

Let's put it this way, it feels like reading a middle school composition!

After reading the first few chapters, it was the first time I saw such a bad novel. Not a single character stood up, and the entire story was self-explanatory. Are you writing a novel?

The plot, rhythm, and setting are all good, but it fails as a novel. There is not enough transition and dialogue, and it feels like a running account... I hope the author slows down a little and polishes it a little.. It is strongly recommended to add some dialogue and character description 😁 There are many of them online, and they are actually copied back and forth, but they can inject a lot of vitality into the novel. Come on, author!

Fight for hegemony flow, quickly cross the flow, narrative poetry. The protagonist goes to one world, and so on, and then goes to the next world and so on. In general, it's like a running account, and it really doesn't make much sense. The only novelty is that it uses the template of Lao Gunwu. After all, games are very popular, but few people write novels. Still worth seeing. In one section, the protagonist travels through Marvel, and the huge energy fluctuations in his portal are discovered by Ancient One, who teleports him through the ring, and the two meet and are wary of each other. Didn't start a fight? I thought there would be an exchange of magical skills. In the end, the protagonist gave in and said that the energy was high because traveling through the portal consumes more materials, so the energy caused was high, not my own energy. Hehe. If you really follow Gu Yi's temperament, he will be pulled directly into the mirror space after hearing these words, beat you up and then ask you what you are doing here. Always pass through each other. After all, planes compete for hegemony. There is no problem in bringing people from other worlds to another world. The strange thing is that the protagonist only fights a few times, and many people have never seen it. How can it be a deterrent? Normally, don't you have to pretend to be intimidating first and then talk? I think the author didn't write this well. Could it be that a long list of titles can prove how awesome he is? It seems to others that I am bragging. In addition, I hope the author will write more, instead of always traveling to this plane, doing trivial things, then getting something, building a door, slapping his ass and leaving. There is no sense of substitution at all, okay? I hope the author will work hard in writing. Some places are poisonous but not fatal. This is still okay.

Much better than those on many rankings!

This book will be considered complete after I finish writing Azeroth. I plan to write the next book about the second dimension. I don't know if anyone else will like it. I will roughly write down the two outlines I have drawn up and see which one you like better. Outline 1 "Starting with a Natural Teeth" How can I break it when I start with a natural tooth and no output, only milk? The sword-cutting skills I learned in "The Heroes of the Fallen Knight" and the inherent spiritual equipment turned out to be the famous natural teeth. I was very disappointed when there was no output. This is the story of the protagonist who constantly travels and grows between the two dimensions with his inherent spiritual equipment, Tianya. If I strike with this sword, you may be resurrected with full health. Traveling across planes: Fullmetal Alchemist - History's Strongest Disciple Kenichi - Attack on Titan - Crimson Eyes - Naruto - Full-time Hunter - TBD Outline 2 "Dragon Ball: The Nail Palace Power User" People with super powers are so weak. Who did I tell you that this old man is a person with nail power? Traveling to the Dragon Ball universe, you will continue to gain superpowers from characters voiced by Kugimiya, and see how those with Kugimiya's abilities can survive in the cracks of powerful combat bosses who explode planets at will. I understand Alphonse's alchemy, Shana's Heaven and Earth Tribulation Fire, and Zero Louise's magic. What's going on with this "Roadless Race" ability? Outline Three "The Battlefront of the Blood Realm of All Heavens" After practicing the Blood Fighting Technique to the full level in the world of "Blood Blockade Battlefront", the journey of becoming stronger and stronger begins with Fullmetal Alchemist. Uchiha Madara: Do you also want to dance? Protagonist: Breglid's Bloody Fighting Technique 999 - Long-lasting Coffin Sealing Prison! Madara turned into a blood cross and fell to the ground... Protagonist: What did he just say? Experience the world: Steel Refining-The Red Eyes-To be determined Out of these three outlines, please think about which one you like more. I will consider it and tell me your opinions. The first book has already trained me on how to write. The second book should be easier to write. If I decide on it early, I can organize how to write it and flesh out the outline.

The running account is so long-winded, what else can I do besides talking to myself? ? ?

What the hell are you writing? Listen to the story.

He didn't conquer a country, conquer a plane, or kill a few people. What kind of empire is this? Also, are you writing a diary?

. . . This is like reading a fucking account

The more I watch it, the less interesting it becomes. It seemed interesting at first, but it is about army colonization and constantly opening new worlds, and the more I watch it, the more boring it becomes, especially the many dramas I have never watched before. I was confused when I watched it. If you read it longer, you can slowly understand it. However, what I see now is a hodgepodge, and a bunch of unfamiliar ingredients are constantly added.

The girl's scroll has reached full level, but the God of Slaughter, the Devourer of Worlds should be considered a god, right, Dragon God?

You can use this book as an outline and write another one that is more in-depth. This book already has bones, but no flesh and blood. Although this is only your interest as the author, since you have published it, you should do better, come on!

After reading the beginning, I suddenly felt that the book was too dry. The plot did not affect the book but it made people very unbearable, and the anecdote was a bit suspicious.

To be honest, reading the first 10 chapters of this kind of book and then reading the last 10 chapters will never affect the reading experience, 666

If you have any favorite fantasy planes, tell me and I will write them in the article. Movies, American TV series, British TV series and even anime are all available. Since the book is "The Magical Empire of the Planes Beginning with a Song of Ice and Fire", I tried my best to keep it related to magic. Vampires and werewolves are also acceptable, but Naruto and the like are omitted and cannot be added. If you have any favorite works, tell me and I will try to add them to the outline. It's always valid. If there's anything you want to see in the future, feel free to tell me and I'll study it and add it.

After reading Chapter 2, there is no plot. It is all about introduction-like content. There is no character interaction or plot at all. What do you want us to watch?

The reading experience is very poor, there are too many missing chapters and pages. One world after another without ending, no adventure experience, the whole story is soy sauce

The subject matter is good, but it lacks a sense of immersion. Moreover, the pace is a bit fast, and readers cannot keep up with the author's rhythm.

Can you read more about The World of Ice and Fire? I only read the book after seeing The World of Ice and Fire. I haven't read it yet, but it seems that The World of Ice and Fire only has dozens of chapters.

The sense of immersion is very poor ~ it feels like storytelling without emotion! ~~Although it has some content, it is too dry and can easily make people think it is a chronicle!

The outline is pretty good, but it's too dry and makes people choke. The author should think about how to water it down a bit. Also, come on.

I really want to read about The Hobbit! What a pity~

The author writes so well. My new book "Ice and Fire: The Beggar King's Counterattack" welcomes ice and fire fans to read and give advice.

Finished with flowers, thank you all for your support, I am so touched. I hope everyone will like the new book "The Beginning with Natural Teeth".