The Pillar of Ita

This is from my classmate. He posted it on the forum. I will help him forward it

Seeing that many netizens suspect pneumonia, I want to say something: Calm down, Ji Cao, I started reading The Amber Sword in 2010, and it ended in 2016, and the plot ended quickly at the end of the novel. The same goes for Jialan. I started reading it in 2005, but ended up writing it in 2010. Can you believe that the last chapter was updated in 2013?! Pneumonia Pigeon King, I am used to it, but we cannot deny that the conception and plot of the novel, as well as the design of the world view and the core idea of ​​the work, all require the consumption of pneumonia brain cells. But I'm determined to pay attention. I won't dare to read Pneumonia's book until it's finished. Otherwise, you won't know how painful it is to update Pneumonia's chapter for several months when the plot is extremely exciting. But I am more worried that we readers think that Yi Zhu has written 50%-60% of the plot, but in the eyes of Pneumonia, 99.99% Of the plot has been written.

Top statement: The review of this book is only a personal opinion and is inevitably biased. Inappropriate points can be pointed out calmly. Please reduce the comments with a negative temper. PS: This is my trumpet account. Because I mistakenly connected my mobile phone before, I can only post with this account. The main account is partially subscribed (disciple level, student party). Text part: Today I finished "The Pillars of Ita" (hereinafter referred to as "Ita") in one go. To be honest, I was a little disappointed. Compared with "The Amber Sword", the author has only made progress in the details of world view setting, but has regressed in character creation, character interaction, main plot arrangement, and branch plot design. First discuss the most important part of the main plot. I think the biggest problem with "Ita" is that the main plot is unclear, which in turn leads to confusion in the portrayal of the protagonist's character. Based on my impression after reading it, its main line is the Dragon Witch quest line, with the ultimate goal of defeating the evil star and saving the two worlds. Very good, this is an old-fashioned but useful main line to create a traditional hero image. From the protagonist's early immaturity, we can also see that the author is trying to depict his growth through this main line. However, there is a problem with the growth idea established by the author for the hero. Under normal circumstances, the hero's growth process should be "frustration-growth-frustration-continue to grow." Taking "The Three Musketeers" as an example, d'Artagnan in "The Three Musketeers" initially suffered a core setback when his letter of introduction was stolen. Then he was misunderstood by the three musketeers during the process of finding the letter (a small setback). After resolving the conflict, he became a enemy of the cardinal because of his chivalry (a small setback)... During this process, the protagonist gradually became mature and responsible. Now let's take a look at what the protagonist's experience is like in "Ita": at the beginning, the adventure group is destroyed and he is killed by the girl he admires (it should have constituted one of the core frustrations, but there is no follow-up, and the result is that it can only barely pave the way for suspense); after that, the hotel, Dolifen, Fenris , El Paxin, Du Lun... Every big scene is a display of talent and unlimited scenery; not to mention the praises from passers-by in the branch lines, and the disgusted and despised villains are all villains with disgusting faces and sinister actions (except for Liu Liyue, Luo Hao and other exceptions). Despite the oppression of the Super Competitive Alliance and the test of several severe events, it is still difficult to understand why the protagonist has a mature mentality. As of the last chapter, the protagonist I saw is still a rather blind, self-mature tool man (forgive me for using this word) who is good at manipulating structures. This way of shaping reminds me of Kira in "Gundam SEED", who is extremely powerful but has become a standard-bearer who calls for freedom, justice and mutual understanding without thinking about the meaning at all, and is willing to be a simple concept, which is ultimately disgusting. I hope the author can enrich his image in the future. When talking about the protagonist's philosophy and the Super Competitive League, we have to discuss the second issue: the central idea of ​​​​the book is unclear and naive (of course, it may be that the author has not written it yet, but after writing 4 million words, I think I can already comment on this point). If the author wants to write about traditional heroism and chivalry, I think the comedy model of "overcoming difficulties relies entirely on ignorance and fearlessness, and improving abilities does not rely on experiencing hardships and obstacles and relies entirely on adventure" is a big step back compared to the tragic form of "The Hope of Gentle Words" and "The Ride of the Valkyrie" in "The Sword of Amber", and the protagonist's constant pretentiousness also dilutes the shaping of this idea; from the last chapter "What is justice" and the constant criticism Looking at the Super Competitive League as a target, I feel that the core issue the author wants to discuss is the relationship between moral justice and procedural justice. However, not to mention the axiom of "a drama must not have two premises" in drama writing (in my opinion, popular novels can be regarded as extremely elongated dramas), the childish way of writing in the previous article "Those who support the protagonist are good, and those who oppose the protagonist are bad" basically declare the death of this idea. So what exactly does the author want to express? If you want to show your depth, it is recommended to read targeted philosophical books; if you want to celebrate idealism, it is recommended to read more romantic literature and plays by Shakespeare, Ostrovsky, Maeterlinck and others (only within the scope of personal reading, you can find professional book lists online). The third question is character creation. The characters in "Ita" are severely labeled and poorly shaped. Taking the protagonist as an example, I feel that the author wanted to portray him as a "naive fighter" but ended up creating an emotional "fool". Another example is Sylvide. The author tried his best to show her superior political intelligence and cunning and cuteness, but I felt that many places were out of place and even annoying (such as Fenris teasing the protagonist when they met underground, and the ubiquitous "fox tail"). Many other members of the protagonist team could only think of their professions (Jita, Luo Yu) after reading the book. Many characters represented by Sophie were inexplicably kind to the protagonist, and the author also used "goodwill and vision" as the core shaping point. As a result, the ones who impressed me most after reading it were the Dark Dragon Nicol Bolas and Lady Misu. I think the author needs to further strengthen the sharing of pen and ink, and the fullness of the characters does not mean the superposition of daily life and wartime, but the reflection of character in the details. The solution to this problem requires the creator's personal experience, so I won't go into details. The fourth question is writing style and rhythm control. The author's writing style is quite good among online writers, but there is still a lot of room for improvement. A long description does not mean it is delicate and delicate. If it is not written well, it is often just too few words to convey irrelevant information. For example, in the first chapter, the atmosphere is beautiful and peaceful at first glance, but there are a lot of semantic confusions when you look closely, and it doesn't match the tense atmosphere before the war at all. Of course, this is too high a requirement. After all, the update speed of online articles does great damage to the writing style. As for the web-style rhythm control, I don't know much about it and I don't dare to speak nonsense. But what I can feel is that the main plot events are not refined enough. Where there is suspense, there must be reversal-style routine speculation and the main plot insertion is inappropriate. The last selfish suggestion is that I feel that the protagonist's tactical system is still too simple. It is a complete replica of multi-turret bombing. Some control and tactical configurations can be added, such as the early "Mirror Imager" and "Screaming Banshee". I am not a loyal reader of online articles, but the "Amber Sword" that Feihong glanced at back then left a deep impression on me and strengthened my belief that "the author Feiyan can create Chinese-style classic popular novels." However, the current creative results are still far from my expectations. So, Feiyan, please stop playing games. Your current world view setting has been done very well. Now, if you want to upgrade the book to a higher level, you need more life experience and a deeper knowledge foundation. From the perspective of a reader who does not wait for updates (other readers, please don't hit me), I hope that the author will stop updating for one to three months after finishing the third volume or the complete book of "Ita" to fully contact the society and improve his cultivation. I firmly believe that you can create top popular literature in China in the 21st century.

The map of Corin-Ishulian has been made and was dedicated by Ms. Papamo. However, since it is the map for the Seven Seas Brigade's own use, it only roughly marks some of the places they pass. You can use the mobile APP to view character fanart, and some other settings/maps will be launched in the future~

It doesn't update, and it doesn't save the manuscript. He also said that he owed a few chapters. I wish you a big guarantee of 80 every time

26.7.7 At this time last year, I asked how far the plot of Feiyan was, and the answer was "almost 60%." I asked again this year 2025.3.23 Hand washing "Ask, how far has the plot progress bar been advanced?" Feiyan "80%. Probably, at least 70% is there, all involving the battle of gods. " Handwash "How long will it take to enter the second world?" Handwash "Since you asked, how long do you plan to finish it?" Handwash "What the hell? Come on, brother."

As a long-time reader of Pneumonia, I have read Canaan and Amber. I still want to lament that the plot rhythm of this book is still not strong. Although it is not bad overall from the starting point, it is still far from the top level like Lord of Mysteries. (For example, the segmentation of large chapters, the differentiation of strengths, and the characterization of characters). Even if you have pneumonia, you should still work hard to improve your own level (play less games) and learn from excellent works! 😃😃😃😃😃😃🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

You win, you only updated one chapter in a year and a half, okay, you are so awesome, you are so cruel, I will write a book in a year, why don't I write it myself!

Doriffin Mr. Gray Rock Box and the Big Cat Drawed a Dawn Star Fang Gugu

I drew some illustrations in my spare time. This corresponds to Miya in the first chapter. I plan to go through the specific settings from the beginning.